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Comment from Dawn Munro
I have written a few of these, but never one with such important subject matter. Your crown of sonnets is magnificent, and I hope you publish it on every possible website. Flawless!
reply by the author on 27-May-2022
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I have written a few of these, but never one with such important subject matter. Your crown of sonnets is magnificent, and I hope you publish it on every possible website. Flawless!
Comment Written 27-May-2022
reply by the author on 27-May-2022
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Thanks so much, Dawn :-). It's been a few years since I last did one of these so it was an interesting challenge.
I'm thrilled you liked it.
Mike
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I most surely did like it -- you are very welcome.
Comment from Beri Bee
Six stars and a standing ovation for this meta masterpiece. Here I am reviewing a poem fully recognizing this is a part of the poem. I've never felt more powerless (I've always been powerless but the feeling is stronger now... maybe it's what happens when social workers start writing poetry.) You've managed to create a piece of poetry that does something when nothing does something. Perhaps satire is all that can stand in this particular aftermath.
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Six stars and a standing ovation for this meta masterpiece. Here I am reviewing a poem fully recognizing this is a part of the poem. I've never felt more powerless (I've always been powerless but the feeling is stronger now... maybe it's what happens when social workers start writing poetry.) You've managed to create a piece of poetry that does something when nothing does something. Perhaps satire is all that can stand in this particular aftermath.
Comment Written 27-May-2022
reply by the author on 27-May-2022
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Thank you, my friend :-). I'm glad you've seen the 'in joke' here - that the poem itself is part of the very circus I'm sending up, and yet must exist for the satire to exist. I'm tying myself in knots lol. I'm thrilled by your review.
Mike
Comment from Lilly Flowers
After this latest tragedy, my mind wasn't so much on the reporters covering it, but on the horrible event itself. There are some excellent reporters who lament having to report on yet another school shooting. And, also, on their frustration about how Washington does nothing but fight.
You've done a wonderful job with this poem. The lunatic asylum sign says it all. I've been in such dismay over how sick the U.S. has become, in many respects. Regards, Lilly
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After this latest tragedy, my mind wasn't so much on the reporters covering it, but on the horrible event itself. There are some excellent reporters who lament having to report on yet another school shooting. And, also, on their frustration about how Washington does nothing but fight.
You've done a wonderful job with this poem. The lunatic asylum sign says it all. I've been in such dismay over how sick the U.S. has become, in many respects. Regards, Lilly
Comment Written 27-May-2022
reply by the author on 27-May-2022
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Thank you, Lilly. Sometimes there aren't answers, only hopes :-)
Mike
Comment from Tom Horonzy
FLEEDLEFLUMP: you are a brave man, taking on the ills of the day and if i read it write announcing the press is now the purveyor, so much of truth, but of getting ahead of the pack, in churning fictitiousness into fact, for it is known if you tell the public what you made up often enough, they will accept it as gospel Ask the Speaker of the House.
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FLEEDLEFLUMP: you are a brave man, taking on the ills of the day and if i read it write announcing the press is now the purveyor, so much of truth, but of getting ahead of the pack, in churning fictitiousness into fact, for it is known if you tell the public what you made up often enough, they will accept it as gospel Ask the Speaker of the House.
Comment Written 27-May-2022
reply by the author on 27-May-2022
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Sad but true, it seems self-aggrandising is more important than truth or decisive action. Thank you for the great review :-)
Mike
Comment from Jesse James Doty
Well, I read this whole thing through and found it excellent in every way. I have no more sixes to give you or I would. I love the bouncy way the sonnets go and the play on words to emphasize the show. The circus comes to town with journalists in tow to bring us everything our heart desires.
This is a fun satire and I would love to see more of it!
Thanks for sharing your deft humor.
Jesse
reply by the author on 27-May-2022
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Well, I read this whole thing through and found it excellent in every way. I have no more sixes to give you or I would. I love the bouncy way the sonnets go and the play on words to emphasize the show. The circus comes to town with journalists in tow to bring us everything our heart desires.
This is a fun satire and I would love to see more of it!
Thanks for sharing your deft humor.
Jesse
Comment Written 27-May-2022
reply by the author on 27-May-2022
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Thank you, Jesse :-). I'm glad people have been taking it in the spirit intended. As awful as the event itself was, I can't help being fascinated by the clamour to respond in the most public way possible. Thanks for the great review.
Mike
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Good morning, Mike.
Yes, satire is a great way of helping to diffuse a tragic situation. We need more satire!
The press and politicians race to the fore when a tragic situation happens.
And everybody clamors to take sides.
Have a wonderful weekend!
Jesse
Comment from C.A.Currie
VERY WELL DONE! I would find a pattern as complicated as that very difficult to pull off IF I could accomplish it at all. You made it look easy. Effortless in fact. I can see why you are ranked as an accomplished poet. I look forward to reading more of your work. I am sure you have a lot that I could learn from.
Thanks for sharing.
Hugs and Blessings from my heart to yours
~ Christine ~
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VERY WELL DONE! I would find a pattern as complicated as that very difficult to pull off IF I could accomplish it at all. You made it look easy. Effortless in fact. I can see why you are ranked as an accomplished poet. I look forward to reading more of your work. I am sure you have a lot that I could learn from.
Thanks for sharing.
Hugs and Blessings from my heart to yours
~ Christine ~
Comment Written 27-May-2022
reply by the author on 27-May-2022
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Thanks so much, Christine. What a lovely review :-)
Mike
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
This is brilliant! This may sound odd, but I'm a knitter and I use yarn, woven together one stitch at a time, to make a whole garment. Your construction of this poem reminds me of what I do with fiber art.
And, you're right, it's a f'ing circus that just won't leave town. These families just need to be left alone.
reply by the author on 27-May-2022
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This is brilliant! This may sound odd, but I'm a knitter and I use yarn, woven together one stitch at a time, to make a whole garment. Your construction of this poem reminds me of what I do with fiber art.
And, you're right, it's a f'ing circus that just won't leave town. These families just need to be left alone.
Comment Written 27-May-2022
reply by the author on 27-May-2022
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Thanks so much, Pam. I was worried it was a bit too long but I've been itching to write one of these (it's been a few years since the last) and this was a perfect subject!
Mike
Comment from Sally Law
Welcome to FanStory. Your poem show asked your talent and ease with a pen. I found this insightful, provocative, and illuminating.
Everyone with a mouthpiece was quick to judge the shooting in Texas and offer a solution, no matter how bizarre. Half a million people of all ages die in car accidents worldwide every year, a good number of vehicular homicides in the bunch and those driving while under the influence of drugs or alcohol. Yet, the cars are not taken away from the populace. Then there's road rage.
The murdering heart is the sin. This obviously sick young man just so happened to get his hands on an assault weapon and kill many. I mourn them and their families. Those left behind have enormous grief to deal with. However, did anyone realize that many preborn were killed on this day and weep for them? I did. The abortion clock tics away without stopping as our land runs read with blood. Waiting for a government to change can take a lifetime. I choose to be the change and uphold all life as God would have me to do. Only God's love can change this world and heal the rage that drives a soul to harm another, regardless of the chosen method.
Thank you for sharing, dear poet. My best for your writing endeavors and to you and yours,
Sally :))
reply by the author on 27-May-2022
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Welcome to FanStory. Your poem show asked your talent and ease with a pen. I found this insightful, provocative, and illuminating.
Everyone with a mouthpiece was quick to judge the shooting in Texas and offer a solution, no matter how bizarre. Half a million people of all ages die in car accidents worldwide every year, a good number of vehicular homicides in the bunch and those driving while under the influence of drugs or alcohol. Yet, the cars are not taken away from the populace. Then there's road rage.
The murdering heart is the sin. This obviously sick young man just so happened to get his hands on an assault weapon and kill many. I mourn them and their families. Those left behind have enormous grief to deal with. However, did anyone realize that many preborn were killed on this day and weep for them? I did. The abortion clock tics away without stopping as our land runs read with blood. Waiting for a government to change can take a lifetime. I choose to be the change and uphold all life as God would have me to do. Only God's love can change this world and heal the rage that drives a soul to harm another, regardless of the chosen method.
Thank you for sharing, dear poet. My best for your writing endeavors and to you and yours,
Sally :))
Comment Written 27-May-2022
reply by the author on 27-May-2022
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Thank you, Sally :-). If we could all stop hurting one another, that would truly be a start! I'm thrilled you enjoyed my piece.
Mike
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You are most welcome, Mike. :))
Comment from Wendy G
You've packed a lot of social commentary into your crown of sonnets. It may be satire but I found it very vivid and compelling, with its realism and cynicism. The metre nay not be perfect but my feeling is that one shouldn't be governed by rules to the extent that rhyme and metre interfere with what you want to say. Very thought provoking. I am sorry I have no sixes to offer. Well done. It's very worthy.
Wendy
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You've packed a lot of social commentary into your crown of sonnets. It may be satire but I found it very vivid and compelling, with its realism and cynicism. The metre nay not be perfect but my feeling is that one shouldn't be governed by rules to the extent that rhyme and metre interfere with what you want to say. Very thought provoking. I am sorry I have no sixes to offer. Well done. It's very worthy.
Wendy
Comment Written 27-May-2022
reply by the author on 27-May-2022
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Thank you so much, Wendy :-). Indeed, I took a couple of liberties in meter and used a couple of near/partial rhymes but all, as you note, in service to clarity. I was worried some might take it the wrong way (since I've taken a sly stab at pretty much every reaction I've been seeing - including us poets lol) but so far so good.
Mike
Comment from John Ciarmello
This is well done, Mike. There is so much to comment on here, but in a nutshell, will we be able to change the meanings of the laws? Or, better yet, the definitions in the minds? Our children and their parents continue to die and grieve for no particular purpose other than to say we are free?
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This is well done, Mike. There is so much to comment on here, but in a nutshell, will we be able to change the meanings of the laws? Or, better yet, the definitions in the minds? Our children and their parents continue to die and grieve for no particular purpose other than to say we are free?
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 27-May-2022
reply by the author on 27-May-2022
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Thank you, John :-). I think much happens in the name of freedom with little thought for how it might impact others' freedoms. There has to be a balance somewhere!
Mike