Wonder Lust
A poem in abab quatrains65 total reviews
Comment from Bill Pinder
Excellent poem that is very well written about Wonderlust. I like how you use the metaphor about the captured birds and the fact that they are meant to live free. Thanks for your creative expression. Bill
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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Excellent poem that is very well written about Wonderlust. I like how you use the metaphor about the captured birds and the fact that they are meant to live free. Thanks for your creative expression. Bill
Comment Written 20-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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Very many thanks for your supportive review, Bill. Much appreciated. All good wishes, Tony
Comment from LisaMay
Gorgeous photo of a NZ Kotuku white heron in breeding plumage, to go with your flights of fanciful imagery - your 'wonder' lust did a lot of travelling. There's danger out there for words on the loose.
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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Gorgeous photo of a NZ Kotuku white heron in breeding plumage, to go with your flights of fanciful imagery - your 'wonder' lust did a lot of travelling. There's danger out there for words on the loose.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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Very many thanks for your supportive review, Lisa. I'm delighted that you enjoyed my poem. It's a beautiful bird, isn't it? All good wishes, Tony
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Once free of lockdown, I'm looking forward to going over to the heron's bird colony on the West Coast (South Island NZ) and go kayaking to see them.
Comment from Darlene Franklin
I hope that's not what we do to our words! Kill them! But I guess when we pin them into a specific poem or story we have given t hem a single definition and ended their stream of choices. Until the next poem or story. Well done.
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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I hope that's not what we do to our words! Kill them! But I guess when we pin them into a specific poem or story we have given t hem a single definition and ended their stream of choices. Until the next poem or story. Well done.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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Thank you, Darlene. I appreciate your review and comments. Best wishes, Tony
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You're welcome.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
"I planted on the page a ream of random words
To grow like seeds, and watered them with wonder lust -
A poet's yearning - but a pair were turned to birds
and flew away; two precious ones, released from dust." I really like this stanza it captures the essence of life and hope. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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"I planted on the page a ream of random words
To grow like seeds, and watered them with wonder lust -
A poet's yearning - but a pair were turned to birds
and flew away; two precious ones, released from dust." I really like this stanza it captures the essence of life and hope. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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Thank you, Iza. I appreciate your review and comments. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Superb! Flawless rhythm and rhyme, startling imagery throughout--unique metaphor re birds flying away with your words. Apparently you got all the best ones back. Cheers. LIZ
Back to congratulate on your prize. I'd have been pissed had this masterpiece been bypassed. Cheers. LIZ
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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Superb! Flawless rhythm and rhyme, startling imagery throughout--unique metaphor re birds flying away with your words. Apparently you got all the best ones back. Cheers. LIZ
Back to congratulate on your prize. I'd have been pissed had this masterpiece been bypassed. Cheers. LIZ
Comment Written 20-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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Thank you, Liz. I am most appreciative of your review and supportive comments. I'm delighted that you thought my poem worth a sixth star. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Wonder Lust
by tfawcus
Hello my friend
Beautiful in poem in abab quatrains. The imagery is outstanding and the presentation complements the poem. Well done ð???
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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Wonder Lust
by tfawcus
Hello my friend
Beautiful in poem in abab quatrains. The imagery is outstanding and the presentation complements the poem. Well done ð???
Comment Written 20-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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Thank you, Rose. I appreciate your review and kind comments. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Minglement
I really enjoyed this lovely, poem of a bit of nature. Nature can be so spectacularly beautiful, and turn on a dime and show it's ugly side. There is a price for life. Well done.
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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I really enjoyed this lovely, poem of a bit of nature. Nature can be so spectacularly beautiful, and turn on a dime and show it's ugly side. There is a price for life. Well done.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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Thank you, Minglement. I appreciate your review and kind comments. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from sunnilicious
Great artwork choice for overall presentation. Nice poem. I liked how you wrote this poem with plenty alliterations. Nothing really stood out, but it was very lyrical on my tongue with assonance. Beautiful storytelling. Excellent :)
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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Great artwork choice for overall presentation. Nice poem. I liked how you wrote this poem with plenty alliterations. Nothing really stood out, but it was very lyrical on my tongue with assonance. Beautiful storytelling. Excellent :)
Comment Written 19-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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Thanks, Alicia. I appreciate your lovely comments. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Gypsymooncat
I love the wording in this poem, and the unexpected phrasing which takes the reader off with those escapee birds/words. My perception of this poem's meaning is that if a poet (or writer) reins in their thoughts too much, then those words don't thrive on the page. They wither. If we allow ourselves to simply fly off...go with it, as it were...we may produce work that is more natural, beautiful and work that is a thriving metropolis on each page it graces. Yes, I did love this piece Tony; it's beautiful!
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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I love the wording in this poem, and the unexpected phrasing which takes the reader off with those escapee birds/words. My perception of this poem's meaning is that if a poet (or writer) reins in their thoughts too much, then those words don't thrive on the page. They wither. If we allow ourselves to simply fly off...go with it, as it were...we may produce work that is more natural, beautiful and work that is a thriving metropolis on each page it graces. Yes, I did love this piece Tony; it's beautiful!
Comment Written 19-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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Thank you, Gypsymooncat. I appreciate your review, perceptive comments and encouragement. I'm delighted that you thought my poem worth a sixth star. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from CrystieCookie999
Ah yes, this method of creating poetry doesn't seem to work too well. Favorite lines: Their eyes condemn
The one who sought to scribe and pinion flight's true worth.
They scratch, uprooting all my seedlings, and I sigh.
I heard some great 's' alliteration in scratch, seedlings, and sigh.
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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Ah yes, this method of creating poetry doesn't seem to work too well. Favorite lines: Their eyes condemn
The one who sought to scribe and pinion flight's true worth.
They scratch, uprooting all my seedlings, and I sigh.
I heard some great 's' alliteration in scratch, seedlings, and sigh.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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Thank you, Cookie. I appreciate your review and kind comments. Best wishes, Tony