Love Letter on a Napkin
The most important words you will ever say.38 total reviews
Comment from djeckert
This was well done and a beautifully told tragic story, Sally. I like how it also included a small "Gosoel message" with his note saying He will see her in Heaven. A heads up about a typo " it veered 'of' the road.. ." It was a pleasure to read. Blessings.
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2019
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This was well done and a beautifully told tragic story, Sally. I like how it also included a small "Gosoel message" with his note saying He will see her in Heaven. A heads up about a typo " it veered 'of' the road.. ." It was a pleasure to read. Blessings.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2019
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Thank you very much for the excellent review and kind comments. I appreciate the critique, as well. My eyesight gave me a fit on this one, I missed a lot of little hard to see things. My husband proofread this, but, he was obviously crying at the end. Thank you for the heads up. Always gotta squeeze in some Jesus. No life or true love without him.
All my best,
Sally
Comment from jules4jesus
woow what a stirring story sad but yet a twinge of hope, the love letter on the napkin was a brilliant idea its surprising how your mind thinks in the last moments of life it always goes back to the ones that we love. very beautifully written my heart goes out to the wife now having to receive the news that she was dreading and a son losing his father loll it was brilliant
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2019
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woow what a stirring story sad but yet a twinge of hope, the love letter on the napkin was a brilliant idea its surprising how your mind thinks in the last moments of life it always goes back to the ones that we love. very beautifully written my heart goes out to the wife now having to receive the news that she was dreading and a son losing his father loll it was brilliant
Comment Written 07-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2019
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Thank you dear Jules.,so glad you you could read and enjoy it. Thank you for the sixer, a real honor from you to me. My husband loved this and could hardly finish proofreading he was crying so.
All my best,
Sal
Comment from elpsog
My dear lady your pen is much stronger than mine of poetry. I am envy of your ability to write a story of such heart crushing. Have you ever printed any books in your name?
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2019
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My dear lady your pen is much stronger than mine of poetry. I am envy of your ability to write a story of such heart crushing. Have you ever printed any books in your name?
Comment Written 07-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2019
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Thank you, Ray. I am so glad it tugged at your heart. I am humbled by the outstanding marks. I know it is not the easiest thing for you to get through something as long as this, and that means the most. No, I write as a hobby for now. I am the CEO of my family?s company along with my husband, and just recently went on blindness disability. I am open to being published, just not yet. It is in Gods timing. In the meantime, I read and write.
God bless and thanks again,
Sal
Comment from Gert sherwood
Well Sally Law
I was hoping your story ended the way I didn't want it to end. It shows how good you wrote this very dramatic love story
Gert
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2019
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Well Sally Law
I was hoping your story ended the way I didn't want it to end. It shows how good you wrote this very dramatic love story
Gert
Comment Written 06-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2019
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Thank you very much for the exceptional rating and review. I am glad you liked my writing. This one was different for me. It was very emotional and the characters very real. My husband and I cried together when he proofed it for me.
All my best,
Sally
Comment from poetwatch
Sally, you had to do this to me. I forgotten that tears are only for the departed, but for those tears to come someone must tell the tale. This is very good. It only proves to me that you is a writer that can bring smiles as well as tears. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2019
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Sally, you had to do this to me. I forgotten that tears are only for the departed, but for those tears to come someone must tell the tale. This is very good. It only proves to me that you is a writer that can bring smiles as well as tears. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2019
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Oh, my dear poet, thank you. Yes, laughter and tears live together in the same world. So glad you liked it. My husband cried when he proofread it yesterday morning. I appreciate the outstanding marks and kind review.
All my best,
Sally
Comment from C. Gale Burnett
Oh, Sal ... this IS a tear jerker. You truly know how to tell a story. You tell a story so well that I can vividly picture scenes, sounds, personalities, drama, conflict, relationship ... and get so lost in the story that I feel as though I am there.
You are truly gifted!
I love, in this story, how the couple's faith and love for the Lord came through. You glorify God in all your writing :) I know He's proud :)
I know, like me, you are a perfectionist, putting your heart into your writing. I'm only mentioning this, so you don't kick yourself in the butt later when you spot it.
Look at this paragraph: '
He suddenly remembered there was a bridge, and old bridge,' See it? I bet it hasn't been spotted yet ... hurry and fix it (lol).
Love you so much ... you've become someone I treasure as a friend.
Hugs & blessings!
Gale
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2019
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Oh, Sal ... this IS a tear jerker. You truly know how to tell a story. You tell a story so well that I can vividly picture scenes, sounds, personalities, drama, conflict, relationship ... and get so lost in the story that I feel as though I am there.
You are truly gifted!
I love, in this story, how the couple's faith and love for the Lord came through. You glorify God in all your writing :) I know He's proud :)
I know, like me, you are a perfectionist, putting your heart into your writing. I'm only mentioning this, so you don't kick yourself in the butt later when you spot it.
Look at this paragraph: '
He suddenly remembered there was a bridge, and old bridge,' See it? I bet it hasn't been spotted yet ... hurry and fix it (lol).
Love you so much ... you've become someone I treasure as a friend.
Hugs & blessings!
Gale
Comment Written 06-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2019
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Thank you so much for the superb review. Yours is the review I can hardly wait to see. I kept looking for your name all day yesterday saying, ?where is my Gale?? You are so dear to me. I fixed my boo boo. My eyesight is deteriorating quickly as I am going blind. I think I told you about this. Anyway, this article gave me a fit. I missed quite a bit. Mostly little things. My husband proofread it, but he was crying so hard he missed a lot. I am so glad you liked my work and were touched by my story.
All my best,
Sal xo
Comment from Donka Kristeva
That is such a moving and heart-breaking story, yet with light ahead! You are a masterful writer, Sally, with all the intricacies and details of this family tale of love and integrity. The hope of "knowing Jesus" is clear and I think a key message to your story. The love abides -- for the Lord and between spouses. This is also in inspiring lesson for families and relationships. Wonderful!
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2019
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That is such a moving and heart-breaking story, yet with light ahead! You are a masterful writer, Sally, with all the intricacies and details of this family tale of love and integrity. The hope of "knowing Jesus" is clear and I think a key message to your story. The love abides -- for the Lord and between spouses. This is also in inspiring lesson for families and relationships. Wonderful!
Comment Written 06-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2019
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Thank you so much, dear friend. I am so glad you liked it. Your review and critique mean so much to me. I think you know that by now. Yes, love abides in all relationships that are central to Christ, for he is love!
All my best,
Sal xo
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What a lovely answer, Sally. Yes I know and the same is valid for me-- your reviews and comments are inspiring and a sisterly-in Christ-- support!!
Comment from Teresa Alford
I knew this would be a fantastic story, because that is what you write. And I knew it would be a fantastic story because of the title. I didn't know it would be a tear jerker. They can't all have happy endings. Your story is very realistic. My hat is off to you! I don't wear hats, but you know what I mean. Ha. If I hadn't just used my last six star, I would have given it to you!
TA. ";-)
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2019
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I knew this would be a fantastic story, because that is what you write. And I knew it would be a fantastic story because of the title. I didn't know it would be a tear jerker. They can't all have happy endings. Your story is very realistic. My hat is off to you! I don't wear hats, but you know what I mean. Ha. If I hadn't just used my last six star, I would have given it to you!
TA. ";-)
Comment Written 05-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2019
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Thank you so much for the excellent review and kindest of comments. I am so glad you could appreciate this. My husband proofed it this morning and was crying as he finished. He loved it. If I can make grown men cry then I know I have done my job as a writer.
All my best, dear TA.
Sal :+)
Comment from Sugarray77
What a sad story, Sally. You did a very good job setting this up and using a good narrative style to relate the tale. Good job on construction and presentation and handling the heartbreaking ending with a little flair. Well done.
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2019
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What a sad story, Sally. You did a very good job setting this up and using a good narrative style to relate the tale. Good job on construction and presentation and handling the heartbreaking ending with a little flair. Well done.
Comment Written 05-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2019
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Thank you for the excellent review review and insightful comments! I am glad you liked my storytelling and flow. This was emotional for me and for my husband who proofed this one. He cried and cried. He loved it. This is a little different style for me.
All my best,
Sal
Comment from meeshu
this is such outstanding writing, it had me riveted with great phrases like the truck 'staggering like a drunken man'. the ending is good old fashion 'rip-yer-heart-out. so very well done, Sal..................meeshu
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2019
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this is such outstanding writing, it had me riveted with great phrases like the truck 'staggering like a drunken man'. the ending is good old fashion 'rip-yer-heart-out. so very well done, Sal..................meeshu
Comment Written 05-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2019
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Thank you so much, Meeshu. I am so glad you liked my storytelling with the heart-ripping end. My husband was crying before he finished proofreading this morning. It is one of his favorites so far.
All my best,
Sal