The Seven-Tined Stag
An Acrostic poem for the contest34 total reviews
Comment from meeshu
wow, tony, wow. I got so wrapped up in language and verse
I didn't even notice it is Acrostic. super. 'shadows confuse
the margins of this place'.....good luck.....meeshu
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2018
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wow, tony, wow. I got so wrapped up in language and verse
I didn't even notice it is Acrostic. super. 'shadows confuse
the margins of this place'.....good luck.....meeshu
Comment Written 29-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2018
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Very many thanks for your review, Meeshu. Much appreciated. Best wishes for a happy Easter, Tony
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welcome it is the best one I've seen yet
Comment from Gloria ....
Very good warning, Tony. When I'm on my midnight walk tonight I am going to steer right clear of the Seven-Tined Stag.
I find the poem reads perfectly well with a wee bit of refreshing metre, so fine, fine job and best of luck to you in the contest. :)
Gloria
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2018
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Very good warning, Tony. When I'm on my midnight walk tonight I am going to steer right clear of the Seven-Tined Stag.
I find the poem reads perfectly well with a wee bit of refreshing metre, so fine, fine job and best of luck to you in the contest. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 29-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2018
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Very many thanks for your review, Gloria. Much appreciated. Best wishes for a happy Easter, Tony
Comment from Cindy McIntyre
Another amazing poem you have written. I love that you include historical information. This information on Ireland is quite interesting. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2018
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Another amazing poem you have written. I love that you include historical information. This information on Ireland is quite interesting. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2018
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Very many thanks for your review, Cindy. Much appreciated. Best wishes for a happy Easter, Tony
Comment from lyenochka
Interesting! So there is some folklore about a seven-tined stag? Our neighborhood is overrun by deer and the bucks do have multi-tined antlers but they never seem quite the symmetrical. Thanks for the poem translated by Graves.
Your acrostic is full alliteration and assonance and the meter is pleasant and the acrostic is perfectly executed.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2018
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Interesting! So there is some folklore about a seven-tined stag? Our neighborhood is overrun by deer and the bucks do have multi-tined antlers but they never seem quite the symmetrical. Thanks for the poem translated by Graves.
Your acrostic is full alliteration and assonance and the meter is pleasant and the acrostic is perfectly executed.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2018
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Very many thanks for your review, Helen. Much appreciated. Best wishes for a happy Easter, Tony
Comment from Marisela Contona
I like this. it flows nicely. You have good word choses, and a great style. Keep writing, you have the skill. I look forward to more of your work.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2018
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I like this. it flows nicely. You have good word choses, and a great style. Keep writing, you have the skill. I look forward to more of your work.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2018
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Very many thanks for your review, Marisela. Much appreciated. Best wishes for a happy Easter, Tony
Comment from CD Richards
Hi Tony,
I enjoyed this tale in a poem very much, even if "good huntsman" is something of an oxymoron. Of course, I was cheering from the sidelines for the stag.
One comment - I thought the first stanza established pentameter as the metrical form, so when I got to the lines that didn't follow it, they seemed a bit dissonant. But I'm well aware that you probably didn't intend it to be read with that expectation, so I'm happy to put that down to my error in imposing a structure that's not meant to be there.
A most enjoyable piece, good job.
Craig
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2018
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Hi Tony,
I enjoyed this tale in a poem very much, even if "good huntsman" is something of an oxymoron. Of course, I was cheering from the sidelines for the stag.
One comment - I thought the first stanza established pentameter as the metrical form, so when I got to the lines that didn't follow it, they seemed a bit dissonant. But I'm well aware that you probably didn't intend it to be read with that expectation, so I'm happy to put that down to my error in imposing a structure that's not meant to be there.
A most enjoyable piece, good job.
Craig
Comment Written 29-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2018
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Very many thanks for your review, Craig. Much appreciated. Yes, a few variations from iambic pentameter here, but I tried to keep all lines to five metric feet, which doesn't necessarily equate to ten syllables, Best wishes for a happy Easter, Tony
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the 'Acrostic' writing prompt.
Well said. Your verse gives fair warning against going out in the night to become victim to the shape changing stag.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2018
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I think this is a good entry for the 'Acrostic' writing prompt.
Well said. Your verse gives fair warning against going out in the night to become victim to the shape changing stag.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 29-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2018
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Very many thanks for your review, Sharon. Much appreciated. Best wishes for a happy Easter, Tony
Comment from Just2Write
This was an interesting read, Tony. A bit of lore, a bit of intrigue and all woven nicely into an acrostic that feels like a ballad sung by the minstrels of a bygone era. Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2018
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This was an interesting read, Tony. A bit of lore, a bit of intrigue and all woven nicely into an acrostic that feels like a ballad sung by the minstrels of a bygone era. Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2018
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Very many thanks for your review, Rose. Much appreciated. Best wishes for a happy Easter, Tony
Comment from Katya
Well done! As I have come to expect from your pen, of course. How on earth do you carry through such a long acrostic? Rhythms done well, and sounds build throughout the poem. Good!
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Well done! As I have come to expect from your pen, of course. How on earth do you carry through such a long acrostic? Rhythms done well, and sounds build throughout the poem. Good!
Comment Written 29-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2018
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Very many thanks for your review, Katya. Much appreciated. Best wishes for a happy Easter, Tony
Comment from Fridayauthor
Very well written entry in this contest. A great choice of words.
While like the image you chose, it didn't seem to speak of night, as described in the verse.
And as a bonus, a little history tossed in to educate us readers.
Thank you.
Thank you for a fine posting.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2018
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Very well written entry in this contest. A great choice of words.
While like the image you chose, it didn't seem to speak of night, as described in the verse.
And as a bonus, a little history tossed in to educate us readers.
Thank you.
Thank you for a fine posting.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2018
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Thanks, Fridayauthor. I had some difficulty in tracking down an appropriate image of a stag with seven prongs on each antler! This was the best I could come up with. At least is might be imagined to be standing before a setting sun! Best wishes to you for a happy Easter.