All Hallows Eve
Halloween Poetry Contest Submission41 total reviews
Comment from JennaG
I love a good scary Halloween poem and yours is definitely that! Really well done! I especially like all the internal rhyming throughout the piece, especially "Three witches brew, a deadly stew Of newts and gnats, and vampire bats." This is well written with a very spooky picture to accompany your words. I really enjoyed reading this! Best of luck to you in the contest! :)
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I love a good scary Halloween poem and yours is definitely that! Really well done! I especially like all the internal rhyming throughout the piece, especially "Three witches brew, a deadly stew Of newts and gnats, and vampire bats." This is well written with a very spooky picture to accompany your words. I really enjoyed reading this! Best of luck to you in the contest! :)
Comment Written 27-Oct-2017
Comment from Thomas Bowling
This is too good to be scary. Your rhymes are perfect. You never miss any. Your meter is right on. You tell a great Halloween story in rhyme. Good luck in the contest.
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This is too good to be scary. Your rhymes are perfect. You never miss any. Your meter is right on. You tell a great Halloween story in rhyme. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2017
Comment from GracieAnn
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This Halloween Poetry Contest submission utilizes all the things that most of us are used to seeing at this time. The rhyme and meter is solid. I appreciated the fact that there is an unseen world at play during this unholy time. All the best in the contest! :0 GracieAnn
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This Halloween Poetry Contest submission utilizes all the things that most of us are used to seeing at this time. The rhyme and meter is solid. I appreciated the fact that there is an unseen world at play during this unholy time. All the best in the contest! :0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 27-Oct-2017
Comment from jusylee72
I truly like the inner and outer rhymes in this poem. It captivated me from the beginning. There is great imagery and the picture also begs the reader to read it. Congratulations on a good write.
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I truly like the inner and outer rhymes in this poem. It captivated me from the beginning. There is great imagery and the picture also begs the reader to read it. Congratulations on a good write.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2017
Comment from closetpoetjester
A poetic thirst is quenched in full here quite obviously and rhymed well. I see the trick or treat time is nearly upon us and as I'm from Down Under I'll be throwing a few Hallowed Weeners on the BBQ as opposed to filling my childrens brown paper bags with an array of eye popping teeth rotting candy LOL
I blame the foul demons haha
Great write. I'm not much into the spooky but THIS was super...naturally LOL
Good luck!
Cheers P
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A poetic thirst is quenched in full here quite obviously and rhymed well. I see the trick or treat time is nearly upon us and as I'm from Down Under I'll be throwing a few Hallowed Weeners on the BBQ as opposed to filling my childrens brown paper bags with an array of eye popping teeth rotting candy LOL
I blame the foul demons haha
Great write. I'm not much into the spooky but THIS was super...naturally LOL
Good luck!
Cheers P
Comment Written 27-Oct-2017
Comment from estory
You have that rhythm and rhyme like an incantation, all the images of witches brewing bats wings, eye of newt and that kind of thing. It paints that spooky portrait of Halloween, that night when the pane between the living and dead wears thin, and the ghosts can come back to visit the living on this earth. It always interests me, how man has been so intrigued by the afterlife, all through history, the idea of some dark soul haunting the living. estory
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You have that rhythm and rhyme like an incantation, all the images of witches brewing bats wings, eye of newt and that kind of thing. It paints that spooky portrait of Halloween, that night when the pane between the living and dead wears thin, and the ghosts can come back to visit the living on this earth. It always interests me, how man has been so intrigued by the afterlife, all through history, the idea of some dark soul haunting the living. estory
Comment Written 27-Oct-2017
Comment from mermaids
This is a scary poem, I can feel chills up my spine while reading it. You have a vivid use of words that creates clear scenes of the Halloween creatures and how they instill fear. Excellent poetic form that appeals to the senses.
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This is a scary poem, I can feel chills up my spine while reading it. You have a vivid use of words that creates clear scenes of the Halloween creatures and how they instill fear. Excellent poetic form that appeals to the senses.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2017
Comment from RGstar
Good presentation. Great colours, good use of the form, for this form ABCC is not easy to get rolling off the tongue, but you did a great job.
Good luck.
My very best wishes.
RG
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Good presentation. Great colours, good use of the form, for this form ABCC is not easy to get rolling off the tongue, but you did a great job.
Good luck.
My very best wishes.
RG
Comment Written 27-Oct-2017
Comment from WalkerMan
This aptly illustrated post is an excellent entry for the Halloween Poetry Contest. I like the interesting rhyme scheme of a-a,b-b,c,c in each quatrain (internal rhyme in the first and second lines, plus end-rhyme in the third and fourth lines of each stanza). The imagery emphasizes the darker side of this anniversary (l find stanza 1, line 4 particularly chilling because of the word "sweet"), rather than the playful modern interpretation. Well done.
Some issues with apostrophes can easily be improved:
- Your first line is correct, so the title should match (Hallows').
- The first word in stanza 1, line 2 is a possessive pronoun NOT taking an apostrophe (Its). [It's, WITH the apostrophe, is the contraction of It is.]
- In the same line, you need possessive singular (man's -- as in mankind's).
- Similarly, stanza 1, line 4 (hell's) and stanza 2, line 4 (evening's).
Also, there are some commas needing attention:
- At the end of stanza 1, line 3, the comma should be removed because it does not belong between a verb (escape) and its direct object (line 4).
- In stanza 2, line 1, remove the mid-line comma for the same reason (brew a).
- At the end of stanza 3, line 3, remove the comma because a subject (need) should not be separated from its (line 4) verb (Will not be quelled) by a comma.
- At the end of stanza 4, line 3, remove the comma because a noun (meal) should not be separated from a prepositional phrase modifying it (line 4).
- At the end of stanza 5, line 1, remove the comma because it interrupts the verb
(dare to seek) [dare / To seek (where / represents the poetic line break)].
- At the end of stanza 5, line 3, the comma is unnecessary; but, if you intend a pause there, it is acceptable to keep it. (That does not apply to the other commas which should be removed.)
Please tell me if you make these simple changes, and I will revise this review.
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This aptly illustrated post is an excellent entry for the Halloween Poetry Contest. I like the interesting rhyme scheme of a-a,b-b,c,c in each quatrain (internal rhyme in the first and second lines, plus end-rhyme in the third and fourth lines of each stanza). The imagery emphasizes the darker side of this anniversary (l find stanza 1, line 4 particularly chilling because of the word "sweet"), rather than the playful modern interpretation. Well done.
Some issues with apostrophes can easily be improved:
- Your first line is correct, so the title should match (Hallows').
- The first word in stanza 1, line 2 is a possessive pronoun NOT taking an apostrophe (Its). [It's, WITH the apostrophe, is the contraction of It is.]
- In the same line, you need possessive singular (man's -- as in mankind's).
- Similarly, stanza 1, line 4 (hell's) and stanza 2, line 4 (evening's).
Also, there are some commas needing attention:
- At the end of stanza 1, line 3, the comma should be removed because it does not belong between a verb (escape) and its direct object (line 4).
- In stanza 2, line 1, remove the mid-line comma for the same reason (brew a).
- At the end of stanza 3, line 3, remove the comma because a subject (need) should not be separated from its (line 4) verb (Will not be quelled) by a comma.
- At the end of stanza 4, line 3, remove the comma because a noun (meal) should not be separated from a prepositional phrase modifying it (line 4).
- At the end of stanza 5, line 1, remove the comma because it interrupts the verb
(dare to seek) [dare / To seek (where / represents the poetic line break)].
- At the end of stanza 5, line 3, the comma is unnecessary; but, if you intend a pause there, it is acceptable to keep it. (That does not apply to the other commas which should be removed.)
Please tell me if you make these simple changes, and I will revise this review.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2017
Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion, an exciting and fun Halloween entry, well constructed in fluid rhythm and rhyme - presented in full compliance with the prompt. Best of luck in the contest...
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In my opinion, an exciting and fun Halloween entry, well constructed in fluid rhythm and rhyme - presented in full compliance with the prompt. Best of luck in the contest...
Comment Written 27-Oct-2017