Alphabet- Loop (A-Z)
An Unrhymed Loop Poem47 total reviews
Comment from kiwigirl2821
hello Kahpot. I enjoyed the creative approach of your piece using sequential abc... to the finish of the piece. Some of the lines didn't quite make it for me, but you definitely get kudos for the try. xoxo Kiwi
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2017
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hello Kahpot. I enjoyed the creative approach of your piece using sequential abc... to the finish of the piece. Some of the lines didn't quite make it for me, but you definitely get kudos for the try. xoxo Kiwi
Comment Written 24-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2017
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Thank you for an excellent and honest review very helpful****kahpot
Comment from JanPerry
A unique and contrasting effect for poems. I think it is difficult to actually do the alphabet and using the loop together. You have mastered the ideas with great skill, I look forward to reading more of your work!
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2017
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A unique and contrasting effect for poems. I think it is difficult to actually do the alphabet and using the loop together. You have mastered the ideas with great skill, I look forward to reading more of your work!
Comment Written 24-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2017
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Thank you for an excellent review difficult it was but enjoyable****kahpot
Comment from LIJ Red
A loopy acrostic, very ambitious. I believe you pulled it off, and I admire your tenacity. Excellent. Life is a rapacious thing, give it an inch, it takes a mile, and then dies and dies...
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2017
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A loopy acrostic, very ambitious. I believe you pulled it off, and I admire your tenacity. Excellent. Life is a rapacious thing, give it an inch, it takes a mile, and then dies and dies...
Comment Written 24-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2017
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Thank you very much for an excellent review****kahpot
Comment from Dean Kuch
Hellcan;t can't replace our being or importance. ... **Note your punctuation of "can;t", kahpot ...
As for trying something different, this certainly fits the bill, I should think.
It is also a very good poem in Loop Poem format.
Well done, kahpot.
~Dean
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2017
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Hell
As for trying something different, this certainly fits the bill, I should think.
It is also a very good poem in Loop Poem format.
Well done, kahpot.
~Dean
Comment Written 24-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2017
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Thank you, Fiend and I have corrected said mistake many thanks****kahpot
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You bet...
Comment from Lucian Carter
This is stylistically wonderful. The repetition works throughout. It's a bit on the nose in terms of content, it lacks a little in subtlety.
It's odd to see spirituality and environmentalism mixed. That's not a criticism. I actually think the two go together well.
You have used "can;t" -the semicolon is an obvious typo. That's the only real mistake I spotted.
In a piece like this, form trumps content. They style alone is worth five stars. Excellent work.
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2017
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This is stylistically wonderful. The repetition works throughout. It's a bit on the nose in terms of content, it lacks a little in subtlety.
It's odd to see spirituality and environmentalism mixed. That's not a criticism. I actually think the two go together well.
You have used "can;t" -the semicolon is an obvious typo. That's the only real mistake I spotted.
In a piece like this, form trumps content. They style alone is worth five stars. Excellent work.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2017
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Thank you very much, mistake corrected thanks for the help****kahpot
Comment from Dhale89
Great work. These types of poems are really cool. This would sound great performed as spoken word at one of those open mic night's if you do those I don't think I could infront of crowd.
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2017
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Great work. These types of poems are really cool. This would sound great performed as spoken word at one of those open mic night's if you do those I don't think I could infront of crowd.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2017
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Thank you very much, and no I don't much like crowds either****kahpot
Comment from smileycloud
in your "h" line the apostrophe has been replaced with something else
wow
what a task you set yourself
acrostic loop-entire alphabet
wow
I really like your xrayed vision line
"Zero will end their chance to become" in this line at the end I was wondering if a word could end it like "to become wise or free"?
good work
have a smiley day
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2017
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in your "h" line the apostrophe has been replaced with something else
wow
what a task you set yourself
acrostic loop-entire alphabet
wow
I really like your xrayed vision line
"Zero will end their chance to become" in this line at the end I was wondering if a word could end it like "to become wise or free"?
good work
have a smiley day
Comment Written 24-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2017
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Thank you very much, and yes your type of ending sounds great many thanks****kahpot
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Comment from frierajac
Hi,you have a typo on 'Hell can't' the apostrophe is out of line. The rest of it with the theme of humanity and development of consciousness is well done and I wouldn't mark you don in a contest for punctuation.
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2017
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Hi,you have a typo on 'Hell can't' the apostrophe is out of line. The rest of it with the theme of humanity and development of consciousness is well done and I wouldn't mark you don in a contest for punctuation.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2017
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Many thanks and have corrected typo this review is excellent****kahpot
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hi Kahpot, you say 'no rhyme, just practising' - well you have done very well. It is a free verse loop and it contains some very wise thoughts. Line eight 'can;t' should be 'can't' - just a tiny typo - otherwise a well written poem. Thank you for posting. Warm regards Dorothy
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2017
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Hi Kahpot, you say 'no rhyme, just practising' - well you have done very well. It is a free verse loop and it contains some very wise thoughts. Line eight 'can;t' should be 'can't' - just a tiny typo - otherwise a well written poem. Thank you for posting. Warm regards Dorothy
Comment Written 24-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2017
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Thank you for an excellent review****kahpot
Comment from Bichon
A very unique poem. I haven't read one written like this before, but I loved it. You should continue doing this style, it's very enjoyable to read!!
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2017
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A very unique poem. I haven't read one written like this before, but I loved it. You should continue doing this style, it's very enjoyable to read!!
Comment Written 24-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2017
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Thank you for your excellent review****kahpot