Nightqueen
She is so beautiful it hurts.She is the Night Queen, Lilith.45 total reviews
Comment from tfawcus
Gloriously sensuous language in this poem! You have penned an irresistible temptress here. Loved the descriptions of green (Greengage, and Gimlet coloured). The Gimlet was a much favoured drink when I was living in the Far East, refreshing but, like Lilith, dangerous!
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2017
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Gloriously sensuous language in this poem! You have penned an irresistible temptress here. Loved the descriptions of green (Greengage, and Gimlet coloured). The Gimlet was a much favoured drink when I was living in the Far East, refreshing but, like Lilith, dangerous!
Comment Written 07-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2017
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thankyou so much for your details and interesting review :)
Comment from TPAC
Very interesting write with many appealing aspects defined in its line structuring, captivating story compelling to the reader with delights, with strong end. Nice.
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Very interesting write with many appealing aspects defined in its line structuring, captivating story compelling to the reader with delights, with strong end. Nice.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2017
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Thankyou so much for your very kind review :) x
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Wow! Your author notes are amazing and second best to your beautiful poem.
"Take all of me" are Ella Fitzgerald's song words....take all of me, are perfect for your poem.
Well done my friend.
Gypsy
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2017
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Wow! Your author notes are amazing and second best to your beautiful poem.
"Take all of me" are Ella Fitzgerald's song words....take all of me, are perfect for your poem.
Well done my friend.
Gypsy
Comment Written 07-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2017
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Thankyou so much Gypsy Rose xx
Comment from MelB
You certainly captured the darkness of this creature, especially with the forked tongue. Great imagery and descriptions. It is a creature I hope to stay far away from.
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You certainly captured the darkness of this creature, especially with the forked tongue. Great imagery and descriptions. It is a creature I hope to stay far away from.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2017
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thankyou so much for your kind review.I was actually advised by a rival poet 'friend' to remove the forked tongue line...that is what brings home the supernatural aspect. Thankyou so much Meia :)
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You're welcome. No, no - don't remove it. That's part of the great description
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I had no intention of removing it, she is suppose to be a close friend and I know she is worried about beating me in the rankings so that was a calculated move-shame, I thought she was a decent lady but I know she knows very well what she is doing. Thankyou for your very kind words xx
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It is a shame when people will resort to such things. The good thing is you see through it and are not falling for it.
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This brought Lilith to mind as I read through it so it was no surprise you mention her in your notes. You really use imagery masterfully to create both a scene and a strong sense of physical action. Nicely done and thank you very much for sharing it.
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This brought Lilith to mind as I read through it so it was no surprise you mention her in your notes. You really use imagery masterfully to create both a scene and a strong sense of physical action. Nicely done and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2017
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thanks so much for your very kind review Angel :) meia
Comment from nomi338
You paint a very compelling picture with your well chosen and accurately placed words. As a man I admit that I have had my own encounter with a modern day Lilith. I barely survived and have not been the same since. Some may pooh, pooh her existence, but I tell you she lives within the hearts of certain women and these women have devastated many men. I know, as I stated I am a lucky survivor and I have the scars to prove it.
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You paint a very compelling picture with your well chosen and accurately placed words. As a man I admit that I have had my own encounter with a modern day Lilith. I barely survived and have not been the same since. Some may pooh, pooh her existence, but I tell you she lives within the hearts of certain women and these women have devastated many men. I know, as I stated I am a lucky survivor and I have the scars to prove it.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2017
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I am sorry for your pain! We are not all like her though some have the capacity to be :( I am glad you enjoyed the poem thankyou so much meia :)
Comment from ~Dovey
Hi Meia,
I really enjoyed the descriptiveness of this piece. Your penchant for color and the detail you've taken with this poem are evident. The author's notes are a nice touch, too.
I couldn't choose one favorite; every description using the element of color caught my eye.
Good job.
Kim
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2017
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Hi Meia,
I really enjoyed the descriptiveness of this piece. Your penchant for color and the detail you've taken with this poem are evident. The author's notes are a nice touch, too.
I couldn't choose one favorite; every description using the element of color caught my eye.
Good job.
Kim
Comment Written 07-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2017
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Thankyou so much for your lovely review Kim, many thanks Meia x
Comment from mbroyles2
Quite the evil lady you created here. Extremely vivid imagery and wonderful descriptions.
"You carefully picked through all the colours of nature to set off your painful beauty "
Really good!
Michael
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Quite the evil lady you created here. Extremely vivid imagery and wonderful descriptions.
"You carefully picked through all the colours of nature to set off your painful beauty "
Really good!
Michael
Comment Written 07-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2017
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Thankyou so much for the lovely and kind review Michael many thanks Meia :)
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
A very intense poem about a mortal man becoming taken in by the evil spirit, Lilith. You see how many people, male or female, can pursue something self-destructive, like drugs, alcohol, or even tobacco, that they know leads them to death, and yet they can't help but follow it.
Great job,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2017
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A very intense poem about a mortal man becoming taken in by the evil spirit, Lilith. You see how many people, male or female, can pursue something self-destructive, like drugs, alcohol, or even tobacco, that they know leads them to death, and yet they can't help but follow it.
Great job,
Rhonda
Comment Written 06-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2017
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Thankyou so much for the lovely and kind review many thanks x
Comment from lyenochka
Your descriptions are powerful! I also appreciate all your notes. I didn't know that was the meaning of "lilith" but "laila" does mean "night" in Hebrew so it's related. Great use of repetition to strengthen the power of being intoxicated.
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Your descriptions are powerful! I also appreciate all your notes. I didn't know that was the meaning of "lilith" but "laila" does mean "night" in Hebrew so it's related. Great use of repetition to strengthen the power of being intoxicated.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2017
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I believe Lilith means Screech Owl in Hebrew would have to check, thanks so much for your kind review x