To Cherish Thorns
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Comment from RGstar
Oh, how good this is. I saw this competition and almost entered, but time and health against and also the point of not usually entering competitions saw me hop over. When I read such as this,it is a joy to partake of the process, for an inanimate object's connection to both its origin and the plight and entity it seeks to influence is magnificently potent in every sense of the word. This is my idea of a job well done and would be a worthy winner.
A very well done for this would have my vote of all those I have read.
A very well done, my friend, a very well done.
Have a good day.
RGstar
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Oh, how good this is. I saw this competition and almost entered, but time and health against and also the point of not usually entering competitions saw me hop over. When I read such as this,it is a joy to partake of the process, for an inanimate object's connection to both its origin and the plight and entity it seeks to influence is magnificently potent in every sense of the word. This is my idea of a job well done and would be a worthy winner.
A very well done for this would have my vote of all those I have read.
A very well done, my friend, a very well done.
Have a good day.
RGstar
Comment Written 30-Sep-2015
Comment from RYME4U
A well done tribute to a lowly insignificant object, THE story that you tell in free verse explains the reason the bottle cap is there. goo job!
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A well done tribute to a lowly insignificant object, THE story that you tell in free verse explains the reason the bottle cap is there. goo job!
Comment Written 30-Sep-2015
Comment from robina1978
Excellent photo of a bottle cap that complements your free style verse poem perfectly. A worthy entry for the prompt. You had hurt yourself while drinking. This bottle and its cup did you no favours. Best wishes for the prompt.
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Excellent photo of a bottle cap that complements your free style verse poem perfectly. A worthy entry for the prompt. You had hurt yourself while drinking. This bottle and its cup did you no favours. Best wishes for the prompt.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2015
Comment from prettybluebirds
Excellent. A most interesting poem on a most unlikely subject. This was a good read, I enjoyed it very much. I agree with you, I welcome the tips I receive from the experts
Good luck in the contest
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Excellent. A most interesting poem on a most unlikely subject. This was a good read, I enjoyed it very much. I agree with you, I welcome the tips I receive from the experts
Good luck in the contest
Comment Written 30-Sep-2015
Comment from Patricia Dsouza
The picture you chose compliments your writing. when you write I see you create a mental picture and than pen it out. Awesome way of getting into the heart of the reader.
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The picture you chose compliments your writing. when you write I see you create a mental picture and than pen it out. Awesome way of getting into the heart of the reader.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2015
Comment from Benjamin Valencia
Hi Michael..Interesting idea that the bottle cap is being portrayed as the guest of honor..correct? Seems like you had a good fight on your hands there, the can opener that wasn't a twist off versus you who lost it and where it went, those foreign landscapes, under the sofa. heh heh. Good story flow and take care. Cheers.
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Hi Michael..Interesting idea that the bottle cap is being portrayed as the guest of honor..correct? Seems like you had a good fight on your hands there, the can opener that wasn't a twist off versus you who lost it and where it went, those foreign landscapes, under the sofa. heh heh. Good story flow and take care. Cheers.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2015
Comment from mfowler
I think you've captured the mood of drunken stupor very successfully, Mikey.
Experience, or that great imagination of yours, I wonder? The poem follows the mind funk of an awakening drunk who's fought with himself and lost, ending up imprinted on a bottle top lost on an earlier binge. He seems almost intimate with the find, hoping at some point to remember why things between them went so badly. The free verse flows like a slightly inebriated stream of consciousness, but the use of occasional rhyme and excellent alliterative phases, shows there's been considerable care in constructing the poem. A fun and perfect entry for this competition. Best of luck.
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I think you've captured the mood of drunken stupor very successfully, Mikey.
Experience, or that great imagination of yours, I wonder? The poem follows the mind funk of an awakening drunk who's fought with himself and lost, ending up imprinted on a bottle top lost on an earlier binge. He seems almost intimate with the find, hoping at some point to remember why things between them went so badly. The free verse flows like a slightly inebriated stream of consciousness, but the use of occasional rhyme and excellent alliterative phases, shows there's been considerable care in constructing the poem. A fun and perfect entry for this competition. Best of luck.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2015
Comment from P1
yes you are a poet. i have lived
through alcoholism thankfully not myself
but somebody close and your words and
imagery brought back so many memories it
made me shiver
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yes you are a poet. i have lived
through alcoholism thankfully not myself
but somebody close and your words and
imagery brought back so many memories it
made me shiver
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Comment Written 30-Sep-2015
Comment from Tessa Kay
I could just feel your character being drawn back to the alcohol, aptly pictured by the
bottle cap. Not even half awake and already thinking about the next drink. Unfortunately that is the life of many.
Your poem is very powerful in a subtle way. Very well done. Deserves a six. :)
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I could just feel your character being drawn back to the alcohol, aptly pictured by the
bottle cap. Not even half awake and already thinking about the next drink. Unfortunately that is the life of many.
Your poem is very powerful in a subtle way. Very well done. Deserves a six. :)
Comment Written 30-Sep-2015
Comment from JPilcher
Laughing so hard right now!! Was just getting ready to head for bed & I thought "Why not read one more?" & all I can think about now is the endless injuries I got not only on bottle tops that weren't twist off BUT - twist offs I mistook as such!! Not only that though, but the many memories & ways I still have to open those tops (& not with my teeth or a lighter btw!) without injuring myself & many which have still proven to be worth knowing somehow even to this very day!!! Well done!!! <3 Jill P.
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Laughing so hard right now!! Was just getting ready to head for bed & I thought "Why not read one more?" & all I can think about now is the endless injuries I got not only on bottle tops that weren't twist off BUT - twist offs I mistook as such!! Not only that though, but the many memories & ways I still have to open those tops (& not with my teeth or a lighter btw!) without injuring myself & many which have still proven to be worth knowing somehow even to this very day!!! Well done!!! <3 Jill P.
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Comment Written 30-Sep-2015