The Subtle Glow
A Sonnet31 total reviews
Comment from Dawny53
You certainly had no problem crafting this.. the image you have chosen is absolutely stunning.. I wish I had a six left to give you.. because this entry certainly deserves one.. well done, structured perfectly.. a really good read.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2015
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You certainly had no problem crafting this.. the image you have chosen is absolutely stunning.. I wish I had a six left to give you.. because this entry certainly deserves one.. well done, structured perfectly.. a really good read.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2015
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Thank you so much for the kind review and the big six offer, Dawny. I dearly appreciate the gracious stars and kind words. I'm glad you liked the piece.
Ron
Comment from LateBloomer
Hello DragonSkulls, Your poet's quill flowed gently from verse to verse, and I found your words to be heartfelt and thought-provoking. Of special note:
But years have sadly dulled the poet's quill.
The sun that rose now settles to the west.
The coming nightfall seems so harshly still
and seldom shares its joys upon request.
(Poignant)
And now just sharing my after-thought:
And so ...
The poet's pen is still, though mighty,
and the sun is still aglow and dressed in amber,
but yet my heart still yearns to see
the rose within the rose
that only the eyes of desire may see.
DS, your poet's quill reached out to me. As this is a contest entry, I wish you good luck. LateBloomer
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2015
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Hello DragonSkulls, Your poet's quill flowed gently from verse to verse, and I found your words to be heartfelt and thought-provoking. Of special note:
But years have sadly dulled the poet's quill.
The sun that rose now settles to the west.
The coming nightfall seems so harshly still
and seldom shares its joys upon request.
(Poignant)
And now just sharing my after-thought:
And so ...
The poet's pen is still, though mighty,
and the sun is still aglow and dressed in amber,
but yet my heart still yearns to see
the rose within the rose
that only the eyes of desire may see.
DS, your poet's quill reached out to me. As this is a contest entry, I wish you good luck. LateBloomer
Comment Written 21-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2015
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Thank you for the fantastic poetic review, LateBloomer. I loved it. I dearly appreciate the gracious stars and good luck wishes. I'm glad you liked the piece. I hope you have a great weekend. Thank you again.
DS
Comment from w.j.debi
This is a beautiful sonnet which tugs a bit at the emotions. Excellent sonnet construction, especially the turn in line nine. Your meter is spot on. Your concise word choice and use of enjambment make for a smooth flow of thought. The picture and formatting also couple well with your theme for an outstanding presentation.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2015
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This is a beautiful sonnet which tugs a bit at the emotions. Excellent sonnet construction, especially the turn in line nine. Your meter is spot on. Your concise word choice and use of enjambment make for a smooth flow of thought. The picture and formatting also couple well with your theme for an outstanding presentation.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2015
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Thank you so much for the fantastic review and big sixer, WJDebi. I dearly appreciate the gracious rating. I'm humbled. I'm glad you liked the piece. Thank you again and have a great weekend.
;)
Ron
Comment from Domino 2
Thanks for entering, Ron.
Maybe 'this' poet's...in both cases.
Excellent poetic expression of dulled disenchantment, conveyed with many top metaphors.
Impeccable iambs throughout this excellent sonnet.
Top enjambment and unforced rhymes.
Not sure about the clever presentation, as the title and description don't show up on my screen - just the poet's name. The same thing happens when Dean or Mikey use this style.
Good luck and best wishes, Ray
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2015
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Thanks for entering, Ron.
Maybe 'this' poet's...in both cases.
Excellent poetic expression of dulled disenchantment, conveyed with many top metaphors.
Impeccable iambs throughout this excellent sonnet.
Top enjambment and unforced rhymes.
Not sure about the clever presentation, as the title and description don't show up on my screen - just the poet's name. The same thing happens when Dean or Mikey use this style.
Good luck and best wishes, Ray
Comment Written 21-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2015
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Yeah, that happens to the title any time you use black for the background color. Thank you for the fantastic review, Ray. And for sponsoring the contest. Hopefully it's not your last. I really appreciate the generous stars and good luck wishes. I'm glad you liked the piece. Have a good one.
Ron
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No probs, Ron.
I often use black as a background colour, but I never have this 'problem'.
Maybe it's only when CERTAIN colours are used for the text.
It won't be my last, as I've chilled out now. :-)
Cheers, mate. Ray
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Glad to hear it, friend.
Comment from Jeanie Mercer
I like the progression of this poem from sunrise to sunset and back again. It serves as a good metaphor for the rising and falling of a poet's inspiration. Good luck to you, Jeanie Mercer
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2015
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I like the progression of this poem from sunrise to sunset and back again. It serves as a good metaphor for the rising and falling of a poet's inspiration. Good luck to you, Jeanie Mercer
Comment Written 21-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2015
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Thank you for the great review, Jeanie. I really appreciate the gracious stars. I'm glad you liked the piece.
Ron
Comment from adewpearl
your poem is beautifully presented
strong rhymes in the traditional rhyme scheme of the English sonnet
good alliteration in phrases like poet's pen
and would whisper
beautiful descriptive detail and a thoughtful tone of appreciation for this beauty
good sensory appeal to a range of senses and effective emotional appeal
good turn in stanza three
a poignant look at what it is like for a poet to lose his/her creative inspiration and motivation to write
Brooke
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2015
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your poem is beautifully presented
strong rhymes in the traditional rhyme scheme of the English sonnet
good alliteration in phrases like poet's pen
and would whisper
beautiful descriptive detail and a thoughtful tone of appreciation for this beauty
good sensory appeal to a range of senses and effective emotional appeal
good turn in stanza three
a poignant look at what it is like for a poet to lose his/her creative inspiration and motivation to write
Brooke
Comment Written 21-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2015
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Thank you for the fantastic review, Brooke. I dearly appreciate the gracious stars. I'm glad you liked the piece.
Ron
Comment from royowen
Beautifully written, for somebody who's quill is dulled you write extremely well, the language is elegant much like a sonnet written in modern language, the style lends itself magnificently to this style of poem! I think this to be a great entry in this "no rules contest". Good rhyming in ababcdcdefefgg. It is an excellent entry in this contest, well done, blessings, Roy.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2015
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Beautifully written, for somebody who's quill is dulled you write extremely well, the language is elegant much like a sonnet written in modern language, the style lends itself magnificently to this style of poem! I think this to be a great entry in this "no rules contest". Good rhyming in ababcdcdefefgg. It is an excellent entry in this contest, well done, blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2015
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Thank you for the fantastic review, Roy. I really appreciate the generous stars and good luck wishes. I'm glad you liked the piece. Have a great weekend.
Ron
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You too,
Comment from Pyrrho
I am always impressed to read sonnet creations that are consistent iambic pentameter. On the rare occasion I write in sonnet form it usually iambic randometer with trochees and the occasional spongee.
Your lament hits home for me. A few years back I wrote a self-assessed gem and realized I had written all I wished to write or that was in my mind and of value recording.
So, at the request of my children, I assembled my poetry, written over a sixty-five year period, edited much of it and organized it into a book. It took three years of a rather lazy effort.
Suddenly, a budding poem germinated in my retired grey blob. I am writing once again, but at a much reduced output and the joy I am taking from the effort is ... exemplary.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2015
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I am always impressed to read sonnet creations that are consistent iambic pentameter. On the rare occasion I write in sonnet form it usually iambic randometer with trochees and the occasional spongee.
Your lament hits home for me. A few years back I wrote a self-assessed gem and realized I had written all I wished to write or that was in my mind and of value recording.
So, at the request of my children, I assembled my poetry, written over a sixty-five year period, edited much of it and organized it into a book. It took three years of a rather lazy effort.
Suddenly, a budding poem germinated in my retired grey blob. I am writing once again, but at a much reduced output and the joy I am taking from the effort is ... exemplary.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2015
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Wow, thank you for the fantastic review and big sixer, Pyrrho. You have quite a bit more experience in writing than I have. I'm glad your kids got you to get your book together and I'm glad you're writing again. It just comes and goes with me and here lately not too many things have been inspirational. I really appreciate the generous rating, friend. I'm humbled. I'm glad you liked the piece. Thank you again.
Ron
Comment from boxergirl
Great job with your sonnet poem about how your writing like the sunrise has started to wane somewhat. Once both used to excite you, but lately, you've found it less fulfilling. You have hope in your last couplet that someday, your passion like the sunrise will ignite once more. 8-)
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2015
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Great job with your sonnet poem about how your writing like the sunrise has started to wane somewhat. Once both used to excite you, but lately, you've found it less fulfilling. You have hope in your last couplet that someday, your passion like the sunrise will ignite once more. 8-)
Comment Written 21-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2015
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Thank you for the great review, BG. I dearly appreciate the gracious stars. I'm glad you liked the piece.
DS
Comment from patcelaw
This is a beautiful poem and very nicely presented. Just wait and while you wait keep writing. Writing helps to keep the quill ready for the masterpiece. So never give up. Blessings and good luck in the contest. Patricia
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reply by the author on 21-Feb-2015
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This is a beautiful poem and very nicely presented. Just wait and while you wait keep writing. Writing helps to keep the quill ready for the masterpiece. So never give up. Blessings and good luck in the contest. Patricia
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2015
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Thank you for the fantastic review, Patricia. Oh, I'm sure it'll never really go away. It just loses it's shine once in a while. I dearly appreciate the gracious stars and good luck wishes. I'm glad you liked the piece.
Ron