Meeting Her
I knew there would come a day...32 total reviews
Comment from granny goes viral
Oh my goodness. I had to catch my breath. I would have given you six, however I did not totally understand verse three or your intent with this metaphor. Also cancer is not contracted. So these two things just puzzled me.
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Oh my goodness. I had to catch my breath. I would have given you six, however I did not totally understand verse three or your intent with this metaphor. Also cancer is not contracted. So these two things just puzzled me.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2014
Comment from Dean Kuch
Wow. So this is a true account then, Lois? What a cold, calculating frigid hearted bitc... I think I'd better stop right there.
God does work in mysterious ways, I'm afraid. And when we "play", especially with infidelity, we will pay, one way or another. The sad part about the whole situation is it is not only the one who has been unfaithful that has a price to pay for their infidelity. They drag everyone in their immediate family right into the abyss of despair right along with them.
I know writing is great therapy, and I'm sure this has helped assist you in exorcising a few of your personal demons as it pertains to this matter.
It is exceptionally well written, showcasing your poetic talents through excellent rhyme, meter and tempo.
A sad poem, it's true, but also, a very well written poem too.
Well done, and I agree.
Just let it go...
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Wow. So this is a true account then, Lois? What a cold, calculating frigid hearted bitc... I think I'd better stop right there.
God does work in mysterious ways, I'm afraid. And when we "play", especially with infidelity, we will pay, one way or another. The sad part about the whole situation is it is not only the one who has been unfaithful that has a price to pay for their infidelity. They drag everyone in their immediate family right into the abyss of despair right along with them.
I know writing is great therapy, and I'm sure this has helped assist you in exorcising a few of your personal demons as it pertains to this matter.
It is exceptionally well written, showcasing your poetic talents through excellent rhyme, meter and tempo.
A sad poem, it's true, but also, a very well written poem too.
Well done, and I agree.
Just let it go...
Comment Written 23-Sep-2014
Comment from kiwijenny
I wish I had a six to give for a life loved and lived...You are a strong good good woman. I am so proud of you letting go but I am out raged for you.
God bless and hugs
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I wish I had a six to give for a life loved and lived...You are a strong good good woman. I am so proud of you letting go but I am out raged for you.
God bless and hugs
Comment Written 23-Sep-2014
Comment from drivenbackward
That's a very powerful story, Loanna. You had me glued to the screen. My sister found herself in a similar situation recently, but on the wrong side. You dealt with this challenge well. Did you still love him after this incident? I often hear "care about" but not "love."
she did what thoughtless does. -- Great line.
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That's a very powerful story, Loanna. You had me glued to the screen. My sister found herself in a similar situation recently, but on the wrong side. You dealt with this challenge well. Did you still love him after this incident? I often hear "care about" but not "love."
she did what thoughtless does. -- Great line.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2014
Comment from amahra
Oh my goodness. This poem is amazing. I actually know of a woman in my circle of acquaintance whose husband actually went through that. And you're right, she gave him back and the wife let it go. Any you know what, she did right, because the whole incident becomes his punishment. Great writing, my dear.
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Oh my goodness. This poem is amazing. I actually know of a woman in my circle of acquaintance whose husband actually went through that. And you're right, she gave him back and the wife let it go. Any you know what, she did right, because the whole incident becomes his punishment. Great writing, my dear.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2014
Comment from Dawny53
A really great surprise unravels in this poem. You did such a great job incorporating your surprise, the read expects to be reading about a love that has sparked and one party finally gets the nerve to explain his feelings to the other.. not the case! A great story within a poem
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A really great surprise unravels in this poem. You did such a great job incorporating your surprise, the read expects to be reading about a love that has sparked and one party finally gets the nerve to explain his feelings to the other.. not the case! A great story within a poem
Comment Written 23-Sep-2014
Comment from lakeport
Meeting her, indeed that's a very heartfelt expressed story poem. very nice rhyming and flow,I enjoyed reading it.God bless you.Lakeport,
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Meeting her, indeed that's a very heartfelt expressed story poem. very nice rhyming and flow,I enjoyed reading it.God bless you.Lakeport,
Comment Written 23-Sep-2014
Comment from royowen
A beautifully written poignant and well expressed which evokes compassion from the reader and a rather weary, sad resignation who missed out on the best that a partnership should offer, this is well composed, the words living and sad, well done, good work, Loanna, blessings, Roy,
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A beautifully written poignant and well expressed which evokes compassion from the reader and a rather weary, sad resignation who missed out on the best that a partnership should offer, this is well composed, the words living and sad, well done, good work, Loanna, blessings, Roy,
Comment Written 23-Sep-2014
Comment from Mark Valentine
The poems have just been pouring out lately. I hope there is some catharsis in this latest literary spate of yours.I would give it a six on raw honesty alone - just so happens that it's also a good poem. I love the "she did waht thoughtless does" line. "thoughtless" is the perfect word - she was so narrowly focused on short term, selfish pleasure that she was completely oblivious to other people, to the deeper aspects of relationships, to decency, to long term consequences of actions - thoughtless.
It sounds like it's (understandably)been a rough month or so for you. I'll keep you in my prayers.
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The poems have just been pouring out lately. I hope there is some catharsis in this latest literary spate of yours.I would give it a six on raw honesty alone - just so happens that it's also a good poem. I love the "she did waht thoughtless does" line. "thoughtless" is the perfect word - she was so narrowly focused on short term, selfish pleasure that she was completely oblivious to other people, to the deeper aspects of relationships, to decency, to long term consequences of actions - thoughtless.
It sounds like it's (understandably)been a rough month or so for you. I'll keep you in my prayers.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2014
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is an excellent write, loanna, you did an excellent job sharing this poem about meeting the one he betrayed you with and the words she had to say. that had to have been so hard.
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this is an excellent write, loanna, you did an excellent job sharing this poem about meeting the one he betrayed you with and the words she had to say. that had to have been so hard.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2014