The Midnight Hour
She is coming for me...68 total reviews
Comment from Just2Write
I like how you get into the rhythm of Poe's so easily and carry it throughout the telling of this tale.
Excellent story telling and a compelling read. Who is to say any of us are sane. Poe was certainly a tormented soul - but his writing was genius. That is certain.
piteous moans and mournful groans =
To my eye, the meter went of on the word piteous -
The word piteous is stressed on the first syllable -
(PIT-e-OUS) the rest of the poems lines start with an unstressed syllable -
Suggestion for a fix:
came baleful moans and mournful groans
Just a suggestion, of course. Yours to take or toss.
Rose.
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2014
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I like how you get into the rhythm of Poe's so easily and carry it throughout the telling of this tale.
Excellent story telling and a compelling read. Who is to say any of us are sane. Poe was certainly a tormented soul - but his writing was genius. That is certain.
piteous moans and mournful groans =
To my eye, the meter went of on the word piteous -
The word piteous is stressed on the first syllable -
(PIT-e-OUS) the rest of the poems lines start with an unstressed syllable -
Suggestion for a fix:
came baleful moans and mournful groans
Just a suggestion, of course. Yours to take or toss.
Rose.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2014
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Thanks so much for the comments and for that fine suggestion as well, Rose. I appreciate them both, very much. :}
As far as getting into the rhythm of Poe, I have read his work literally hundreds of times, so it is quite easy for me to do so. He is the penultimate teller of dark terror tales, and one fantastic Gothic poet as well. My all-time favorite. :}
Thanks so much again.
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There's none like Poe to quicken a heart-beat or send a trickle down the leg. I love his writing - especially the Tell Tale Heart and of course, The Raven. One of my favourites. R.
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Well, I'm very glad you liked it. :}
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Indeed.
Comment from Allezw2
Lots of motion in this exercise.
The internal rhymes mirror Poe's exceptional vocabulary, too.
Transitions of style, from rhyme to near-rhyme to near blank verse keep the readers' hopping to follow the forms.
A different muse here, though. So, original in execution, an exercise in word usage.
Prose has been described as words in good order; poetry as words in the best order.
Nicely done, Master Dean Kuch,
Fantasist
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2014
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Lots of motion in this exercise.
The internal rhymes mirror Poe's exceptional vocabulary, too.
Transitions of style, from rhyme to near-rhyme to near blank verse keep the readers' hopping to follow the forms.
A different muse here, though. So, original in execution, an exercise in word usage.
Prose has been described as words in good order; poetry as words in the best order.
Nicely done, Master Dean Kuch,
Fantasist
Comment Written 22-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2014
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Thanks so much for your very complimentary comments, and the six stars as well, Allew2. I am very happy that you enjoyed the read.
Be well, my friend. :}
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You're quite welcome.
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
Finally a lone lost soul manages to turn the tide of evil
and send it in its way.
Dean, as you know, I'm a softie and not really a fan of guts and gore but you write with such mastery and ease I am constantly drawn to the talent within your words.
This one, like all the others, is perfect.
:) Shirley
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Finally a lone lost soul manages to turn the tide of evil
and send it in its way.
Dean, as you know, I'm a softie and not really a fan of guts and gore but you write with such mastery and ease I am constantly drawn to the talent within your words.
This one, like all the others, is perfect.
:) Shirley
Comment Written 22-Sep-2014
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is an dean this is an exceollent poem about the sadness that surrounds a poet, this one encluded, I enjoyed readighhieeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee
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this is an dean this is an exceollent poem about the sadness that surrounds a poet, this one encluded, I enjoyed readighhieeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee
Comment Written 22-Sep-2014
Comment from Dawn Munro
Once again you dazzle us with your presentation, but Dean, the poem is wonderful too (if horrific can be 'wonderful' - you know what I mean! LOL) Great internal rhyme as well - another fabulous gem from your pen.
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Once again you dazzle us with your presentation, but Dean, the poem is wonderful too (if horrific can be 'wonderful' - you know what I mean! LOL) Great internal rhyme as well - another fabulous gem from your pen.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2014
Comment from w.j.debi
A nice creepy story, Dean. Excellent internal and end rhyming. It adds to the mystery and helps build the suspense, sort of like chanting incantations.
Insanity? Who is to say what that is? What is considered insane in one set of circumstances and time might be pure genius in another. Personally, I think horror writers exorcise their demons and may be the sanest of all.
I remember reading something from Vincent Price about him being able to act in all those creepy shows because he did not believe in monsters, vampires or ghouls. If he did, he would not have been able to take the parts he played.
Happy haunting!
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A nice creepy story, Dean. Excellent internal and end rhyming. It adds to the mystery and helps build the suspense, sort of like chanting incantations.
Insanity? Who is to say what that is? What is considered insane in one set of circumstances and time might be pure genius in another. Personally, I think horror writers exorcise their demons and may be the sanest of all.
I remember reading something from Vincent Price about him being able to act in all those creepy shows because he did not believe in monsters, vampires or ghouls. If he did, he would not have been able to take the parts he played.
Happy haunting!
Comment Written 21-Sep-2014
Comment from country ranch writer
the death of his wife was the straw that broke the camels back he lost touch with reality and they say he died loving her and now he lies again with his soul mate. His poems will never be forgotten or his stories.
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the death of his wife was the straw that broke the camels back he lost touch with reality and they say he died loving her and now he lies again with his soul mate. His poems will never be forgotten or his stories.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2014
Comment from JM
I know you are the master of Gothic imagery and that you are a fan of EAP. You have some of Poe's flair for words. You did not disappoint me with this tale. You have captured Poe's tormented Soul. The artwork is also quite appropriate. Another amazing read.
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I know you are the master of Gothic imagery and that you are a fan of EAP. You have some of Poe's flair for words. You did not disappoint me with this tale. You have captured Poe's tormented Soul. The artwork is also quite appropriate. Another amazing read.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2014
Comment from DALLAS01
Hard to write a detailed review on perfection. The language is beautiful, the imagery honed to pierce the senses, wonderful end and inner line rhyme, and a surprise ending. The author notes are always appreciated. Great Halloween tale.
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Hard to write a detailed review on perfection. The language is beautiful, the imagery honed to pierce the senses, wonderful end and inner line rhyme, and a surprise ending. The author notes are always appreciated. Great Halloween tale.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2014
Comment from Writingfundimension
This is a great poem dedicated to the man who taught me to love good horror writing. Edgar Poe was a deeply enigmatic individual who, apparently didn't choose to let very many people close enough to get to know him. I love this line, in particular:
'Hell's minions can't express opinions, their will has been removed...'
Great job, Dean.
:) Bev
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This is a great poem dedicated to the man who taught me to love good horror writing. Edgar Poe was a deeply enigmatic individual who, apparently didn't choose to let very many people close enough to get to know him. I love this line, in particular:
'Hell's minions can't express opinions, their will has been removed...'
Great job, Dean.
:) Bev
Comment Written 21-Sep-2014