Clocks stand motionless
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Comment from acerisestory
This is a moving poem, Gary, written about the loss of one's wife after 60 years. I hope this is not autobiographical. If so, I am deeply sorry.
Your poem has a wonderful flow. I wish there were a way to rhyme the two middle lines. I might also change "What is the reason, why continue on life" to "What is the reason, why continue with life."
Thank you for sharing another heartfelt poem, Gary. Take care. Alana
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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This is a moving poem, Gary, written about the loss of one's wife after 60 years. I hope this is not autobiographical. If so, I am deeply sorry.
Your poem has a wonderful flow. I wish there were a way to rhyme the two middle lines. I might also change "What is the reason, why continue on life" to "What is the reason, why continue with life."
Thank you for sharing another heartfelt poem, Gary. Take care. Alana
Comment Written 23-Aug-2014
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thank you for this Alana
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You are welcome, Gary! Alana
Comment from Glasstruth
Time is the enemy. What can we do? Enjoy the moment. Your poem takes a 180 degree turn in the last line. Like that. Also, left me with a thought provoking message. Each line is unique in presenting a unique thought. One of your best short ones. Three thumbs up! Les
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Time is the enemy. What can we do? Enjoy the moment. Your poem takes a 180 degree turn in the last line. Like that. Also, left me with a thought provoking message. Each line is unique in presenting a unique thought. One of your best short ones. Three thumbs up! Les
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Comment from Leineco
There is so much truth to the opening line
Clocks stand motionless, abbreviation in time.
that time stops is the first (and hardest to shake) reaction in situations like these - second is why continue on life,. Whatever else may differ. . .these are the issues of commonality in the face of death.
Well written
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There is so much truth to the opening line
Clocks stand motionless, abbreviation in time.
that time stops is the first (and hardest to shake) reaction in situations like these - second is why continue on life,. Whatever else may differ. . .these are the issues of commonality in the face of death.
Well written
Comment Written 23-Aug-2014
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Comment from barbara.wilkey
Oh my, losing ones wife about 60 years. My parents have been married sixty-one years. I am afraid if I loose one it won't be long before I've lost both of them. Thank you for sharing your wonderful poem.
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Oh my, losing ones wife about 60 years. My parents have been married sixty-one years. I am afraid if I loose one it won't be long before I've lost both of them. Thank you for sharing your wonderful poem.
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thank you Barbara
Comment from Rmocruz
A profound, sombre message is poetically presented.
Metaphor is effectively employed. Brevity not lacking
in content or style.
Very cleverly crafted, a pleasure to have read.
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A profound, sombre message is poetically presented.
Metaphor is effectively employed. Brevity not lacking
in content or style.
Very cleverly crafted, a pleasure to have read.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2014
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You're welcome
Comment from victor 66
Your poem had a very nice flow and was easy to read. I would not know the answer to what one would say to a person who has lost their life partner after so long of a period of time. The only thing I can thing of is, if you had that long of a run and they were good years, what else really matters? Best wishes.
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Your poem had a very nice flow and was easy to read. I would not know the answer to what one would say to a person who has lost their life partner after so long of a period of time. The only thing I can thing of is, if you had that long of a run and they were good years, what else really matters? Best wishes.
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You are welcome.
Comment from Fridayauthor
Very beautifully composed with much feeling. The final line comes as a shocker.
This is a true example of few words saying so much. Thank you for so nice a posting. It was a pleasure to read.
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Very beautifully composed with much feeling. The final line comes as a shocker.
This is a true example of few words saying so much. Thank you for so nice a posting. It was a pleasure to read.
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Comment from anthony shacknofsky
A heartfelt emotional expression of the sadness experienced at the loss of a wife with whom the poet has shared 60years of life.There comes a time in ones life when we lose life long friends on a regular basis, but it is only when a spouse is lost that we feel the futility of it all.
Well done
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A heartfelt emotional expression of the sadness experienced at the loss of a wife with whom the poet has shared 60years of life.There comes a time in ones life when we lose life long friends on a regular basis, but it is only when a spouse is lost that we feel the futility of it all.
Well done
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Comment from flylikeaneagle
deepwater: How hard it is to lose someone after a 60 year connection. Well written, why go on? The kids and friends need you. Congrats on the award for all time best!!!
flylikeaneagle
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deepwater: How hard it is to lose someone after a 60 year connection. Well written, why go on? The kids and friends need you. Congrats on the award for all time best!!!
flylikeaneagle
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Comment from N.K. Wagner
Time stands still after the death of a loved one. I can't imagine how much worse it must be to lose a mate. You've captured the emptiness. Without notes, I don't know...condolences, if warranted. - Nancy
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Time stands still after the death of a loved one. I can't imagine how much worse it must be to lose a mate. You've captured the emptiness. Without notes, I don't know...condolences, if warranted. - Nancy
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thank you Nancy