Love at First Kiss
Can it be?26 total reviews
Comment from RodG
Wow! Have you crammed a lot into 100 words. We learn quickly who and what the girl was, but that ending was shocking. Good hint in the phrase "Hookers aren't normal people; me neither." I can see this being extended into a longer story as we do wonder if THIS killer could ever love.
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Wow! Have you crammed a lot into 100 words. We learn quickly who and what the girl was, but that ending was shocking. Good hint in the phrase "Hookers aren't normal people; me neither." I can see this being extended into a longer story as we do wonder if THIS killer could ever love.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2014
Comment from highlander104
That's a neat ending. He actually paid her to kill her, that is, unless took his money back before leaving. Well written story. Good luck in the contest.
Jean K.
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That's a neat ending. He actually paid her to kill her, that is, unless took his money back before leaving. Well written story. Good luck in the contest.
Jean K.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2014
Comment from humpwhistle
Ah, the tender-hearted musings of a necropheliac.
A twisted little brain. I'm glad the money helps
ease his mind. I'm sure he didn't bother to recoup
his $100 on the way out.
Peace, Lee
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Ah, the tender-hearted musings of a necropheliac.
A twisted little brain. I'm glad the money helps
ease his mind. I'm sure he didn't bother to recoup
his $100 on the way out.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 08-Jun-2014
Comment from Hareem.S
I think "leave with me " should be "live with me".
I a good short tale you have penned down with some honest and loud thoughts.
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I think "leave with me " should be "live with me".
I a good short tale you have penned down with some honest and loud thoughts.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2014
Comment from LoannaLois
Now that was a nice little shocker. You did a good job of leading the reader down the path...and then...the surprise. Good job.
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Now that was a nice little shocker. You did a good job of leading the reader down the path...and then...the surprise. Good job.
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Comment Written 08-Jun-2014
Comment from akulkumol
Not a bad story written in so less words but you mixed up sex with love. Sex is nothing but a temporary enjoyment but live is forever. First kiss might not create any love. Best wishes for the contest.
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Not a bad story written in so less words but you mixed up sex with love. Sex is nothing but a temporary enjoyment but live is forever. First kiss might not create any love. Best wishes for the contest.
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Comment Written 08-Jun-2014