Comment from visionary1234

Excellent

You sure pack a punch into a katie-21 Debra ... this one brought memories of my own mother, whose life force is fading - and I have some many memories of what she USED to be ... well done within such strict limitations.
:Sharyn

 Comment Written 06-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 08-Jun-2014

Hi Sharyn :) Thank you for your wonderful feedback. I'm sorry about your mum... Grandad is in the latter stages of dementia, he's physically frail also and the last couple of days he isn't responding to anything, it's hard to even wake him. We were so close and I have so many treasured memories of the man he was. He deserves his peace, existing isn't living :(
Kindest regards, Debra :) x

Comment from Domino 2

Excellent

Lovely and emotional free verse tribute to your ailing granddad, Debs.

I never knew my paternal granddad, but my maternal granddad, 'Pop', was a wonderful and supportive friend to me.

Best wishes, Ted.

 Comment Written 06-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 06-Jun-2014

Hi Ray :) thank you for your kind feedback. Glad to hear you had a great friend in Pop, my grandad and I were always very close too. I visit him every week still, though he no longer knows me. Life can be harsh... Cheers for now, debs x

Comment from aanneee

Excellent

What a beautiful 'tribute' for your Granddad. Look lovely printed and framed by his bedside or chair, a constant reminder for him on how much you care and love him.

Color choice, picture, words just perfect and I thank you for the pleasure of reading you today...Dinah

 Comment Written 06-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 06-Jun-2014

Hi Dinah :) Thank you so much for your lovely feedback. I really appreciate your comments. Kindest regards, Debra

Comment from misscookie

Excellent

Mm, if I can remember I will give it a try. There are so many forms of writing poem.
I thought this was cute.
Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 06-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 06-Jun-2014

Thank you for your feedback miss cookie. Kind regards as always, Debra :)

reply by misscookie on 06-Jun-2014

You're very welcome. Have a blessed week-end.
Cookie

Comment from risktaker

Excellent

The sad times are really few if one practices gratitude. When most of us think we have experienced the worse, we always manage to realize that experiences can change if we change our thoughts and our actions. The pain can be released as soon as we can release the past and live in the present. Thanks

 Comment Written 06-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 06-Jun-2014

Thank you for your comments, risktaker. Kind regards, Debra :)

reply by risktaker on 06-Jun-2014

ok

reply by risktaker on 07-Jun-2014

ok

Comment from LIJ Red

Excellent

Another of them thar Katie 21s. Yep 21 words. Yep,makes sense if you read it. Five stars.
And my very best wishes for your grandfather.

 Comment Written 06-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 06-Jun-2014

Thank you :)

Comment from tfawcus

Excellent

Such a lovely poem for your grandad! Your lines,
"I resurrect golden memories
refreshing them with tears"
are just beautiful, so full of love and pathos.
One thing is for sure - he will always live in your memory.

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 Comment Written 06-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 06-Jun-2014

Hi Tony, thank you so much for your lovely feedback. I appreciate it :) Kindest regards as always, Debra x

Comment from Imogen JH

Excellent

Beautiful art choice. That's stunning and really gives your work meaning.

Nice layout Deb's. Poignant poem with a very personal touch. It tells your wee story effortlessly.

Best of luck in the competition.

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 Comment Written 06-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 06-Jun-2014

Thanks Imogen, both for your great comments and good luck wishes :) Debs x