Comment from Margaret Snowdon

Excellent

The second leaf is removed
from the old pine table
family shrinks
the emptiness expands
contraction.

this is so true to life when one by one they fly the nest, but then, all these items are needed when they crowd in on a visit - thus we hoard it all.

good poem.
good luck with the contest.

Margaret

 Comment Written 26-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 26-Feb-2014

Thank you for reviewing.

Comment from harmony13

Excellent

Excellent poem. The poem flows well. The author's words are strong, creative and thought provoking. The artwork is perfect and enhances the read.

 Comment Written 26-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 26-Feb-2014

Thank you for reviewing.

Comment from Glasstruth

Excellent

Never knew china had such a personal meaning. Like the metaphor in:

"New chips in the china
reflect heart's hemorrhage"

Awesome! The best two lines in the whole poem Thsnks for sharing. Les

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 Comment Written 26-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 26-Feb-2014

Thanks for reviewing and pointing out favorite lines.

Comment from Shirley E Kennedy

Excellent

How very true.
I''ve experienced thighs myself as children shrink from six to two.
Very honestly expressed with the sentiment behind the words so easy to gauge and appreciate.
A very thoughtful free verse poem.

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 Comment Written 25-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 26-Feb-2014

Thank you for the kind review. Sooner or later it happens to al f us.