A Life Disrupted
The tragedy of Alzheimers62 total reviews
Comment from KC Guler
This poem is absolutely lovely, profound and full of such heartache. The only thing I would suggest is that the narrator be revealed as a man earlier than the fifth stanza. Thank you for sharing this. While it is so sad to know it came from a horrible loss, it is also very clearly from your heart.
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2012
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This poem is absolutely lovely, profound and full of such heartache. The only thing I would suggest is that the narrator be revealed as a man earlier than the fifth stanza. Thank you for sharing this. While it is so sad to know it came from a horrible loss, it is also very clearly from your heart.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2012
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KC Guler, thank you so very much. You are the fifth person to review this retired work this month and I am truly humbled.. again thank you... jlsavell
Comment from Katherine2
WOW!! How beautiful! I would not change a thing in this poem. Your rhyming is perfection. Very insightful into the world of the aging old. I wonder, is this someone you know? If so I am sad for them. Great job! Congrats!
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2012
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WOW!! How beautiful! I would not change a thing in this poem. Your rhyming is perfection. Very insightful into the world of the aging old. I wonder, is this someone you know? If so I am sad for them. Great job! Congrats!
Comment Written 01-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2012
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Katherine2, once again a big thank you! I do not even know where you found this, but the fact that it paid nothing for you to review and you gave me one anyway, truly humbles me. thank you so very very much.... jlsavell
Comment from Pete Ak...
First of all congratulations on broaching a topic that clearly carries with it a lot of emotionality for you. As a poetic piece it works well as a narrative that flows logically and consistently. The tale itself is tragic and the way you relay the story is relentless, a horrific journey of confusion and hurt. Is there no room in the piece at all for positivity? I know in real life there isn't, Alzheimer's is the ultimate human tragedy and it is without remorse; yet I wonder if poetic expression can allow us to seek redemptive dimensions; indeed I believe if you were to examine that possibility in this simply expressed poem you could create a real piece of art.
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reply by the author on 10-Sep-2012
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First of all congratulations on broaching a topic that clearly carries with it a lot of emotionality for you. As a poetic piece it works well as a narrative that flows logically and consistently. The tale itself is tragic and the way you relay the story is relentless, a horrific journey of confusion and hurt. Is there no room in the piece at all for positivity? I know in real life there isn't, Alzheimer's is the ultimate human tragedy and it is without remorse; yet I wonder if poetic expression can allow us to seek redemptive dimensions; indeed I believe if you were to examine that possibility in this simply expressed poem you could create a real piece of art.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2012
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Pete Ak, thank you for stopping by to read and review my work. I apologize for just returning a thank you... jls
Comment from MAMONIA
What a beautiful and very sad poem this is.
Indeed it has to be the most crippling of
all diseases, robbing us of our precious
memories and making strangers of our loved
ones.
So sorry for your loss. So tragic too.
This is a lovely tribute and a work of art.
I loved every word.
Marie
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2012
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What a beautiful and very sad poem this is.
Indeed it has to be the most crippling of
all diseases, robbing us of our precious
memories and making strangers of our loved
ones.
So sorry for your loss. So tragic too.
This is a lovely tribute and a work of art.
I loved every word.
Marie
Comment Written 14-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2012
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MAMONIA, wow, thank you ever so much for such a delightful surprise. I had no idea this poem would go over so well and be recieved as it was. Again thank you for the wonderful review, but most of all, thank you for you heartfelt words. jlsavell
Comment from justatuna
That was exceptional. Very sad. The structure and rhymes were excellent. The message touchedd my heart. I like poems that teach me how to be better. I'm new at this and this one definitely helped. Touched my heart. Thank you.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2012
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That was exceptional. Very sad. The structure and rhymes were excellent. The message touchedd my heart. I like poems that teach me how to be better. I'm new at this and this one definitely helped. Touched my heart. Thank you.
Comment Written 02-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2012
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justatuna, I apologize for just responding to this exceptional review. I am simply humbled. Are you new on Fanstory? jlsavell
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I'm new to writing. Work like yours inspires me. Be good.
Comment from Oldsteamer
I am so sorry and sad for your loss.
Your words hit right in the solar plexus.
I felt his pain and confusion.
Life is messy and death is far from idyllic.
Great poem.
Thank you for sharing.
Randall
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2012
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I am so sorry and sad for your loss.
Your words hit right in the solar plexus.
I felt his pain and confusion.
Life is messy and death is far from idyllic.
Great poem.
Thank you for sharing.
Randall
Comment Written 01-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2012
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Oldsteamer, thank you ever so much for stopping by to read and review my work. Your comments and review are sweet and caring. Again thank you.. jlsavell
Comment from mermaids
I applaud your words and can relate to this poem. As a nurse who works with alzheimer patients, you eloquently capture what they maybe thinking. Excellent poetic form.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2012
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I applaud your words and can relate to this poem. As a nurse who works with alzheimer patients, you eloquently capture what they maybe thinking. Excellent poetic form.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2012
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Mermaids, oh my, thank you so very very much. What an unexpected and pleasent surprise. I am moved and humbled by this review. It is even more valued to me, for it paid you nothing to review. again thank you so very very much... jlsavell
Comment from crazy gemini
Really great poem that shows the confusion of alzheimers and what a crippling disease it is.'A life disrupted' is a great title as that is what it is. It's interesting that the family are strangers and he is now more connected with the nurse. Good work
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2012
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Really great poem that shows the confusion of alzheimers and what a crippling disease it is.'A life disrupted' is a great title as that is what it is. It's interesting that the family are strangers and he is now more connected with the nurse. Good work
Comment Written 28-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2012
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crazy gemini, thank you ever so much for stopping by to read and reivew my work. Excellent comments and observation of my work. again thank you... jlsavell
Comment from twinklepoems
Your poem brought me to tears! You write only as someone who has watched and struggle with this tragedy can. You capture the inner thoughts of one who can not share their inner thoughts. My mother had dementia and I spent lots of time in assisted living and nursing home facilities with her, trying to interpret the world in a way she could not, not wanting her to relive memories of ones who have died. Dang, I need to go get a tissue. Great job!
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2012
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Your poem brought me to tears! You write only as someone who has watched and struggle with this tragedy can. You capture the inner thoughts of one who can not share their inner thoughts. My mother had dementia and I spent lots of time in assisted living and nursing home facilities with her, trying to interpret the world in a way she could not, not wanting her to relive memories of ones who have died. Dang, I need to go get a tissue. Great job!
Comment Written 26-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2012
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twinklepoems, oh my!! thank you ever so much. I am so srry to hear of your mom, it is devastating. That being said, I am moved and humbled by this six star review, but even more so because it did not pay you anything to review. thank you so much!!!!!!!! jlsavell
Comment from juliaSjames
You managed to capture the core of this terrible ailment by writing in a most intuitive way from the POV of a bewildered sufferer.
Your words, especially the repetition of "strangers" tore at my heart.
The excellent end rhyme and meter flowed smoothly as an unobtrusive backdrop for the unfolding of this account of a day in the life of a victim.
Your author notes added a note of pathos and horror.
Neutral colors and an anonymous image complete the perfect package.
Well done.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2012
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You managed to capture the core of this terrible ailment by writing in a most intuitive way from the POV of a bewildered sufferer.
Your words, especially the repetition of "strangers" tore at my heart.
The excellent end rhyme and meter flowed smoothly as an unobtrusive backdrop for the unfolding of this account of a day in the life of a victim.
Your author notes added a note of pathos and horror.
Neutral colors and an anonymous image complete the perfect package.
Well done.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2012
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juliajames, thank you ever so much for stopping by to read this work and award it an exceptional. I am speechless. thank you thank you... jlsavell