Another Pretty Face
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Comment from daffodil
This is a lovely romantic chapter, if i worked non stop every day i could never become the writer you so obviousy are. A pleasure to read. God bless you, Daffodil
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2010
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This is a lovely romantic chapter, if i worked non stop every day i could never become the writer you so obviousy are. A pleasure to read. God bless you, Daffodil
Comment Written 10-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2010
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Thank you for the lovely compliment. I appreciate your kind review.
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Your wellcome
Comment from Auroraboreal800
Hi Barbara! Here, in Venezuela, South America, there is some one prying for you... Please, donīt give up... Writing as a therapeutic exercise can help a lot, specially when the author is as wonderful writer as you are.
God bless you my dear friend,
Alba
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2010
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Hi Barbara! Here, in Venezuela, South America, there is some one prying for you... Please, donīt give up... Writing as a therapeutic exercise can help a lot, specially when the author is as wonderful writer as you are.
God bless you my dear friend,
Alba
Comment Written 10-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2010
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Thank you for your prayers. I appreciate your friendship even though we are miles apart. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Isaiah Ramesses
I'm mainly reviewing for editorial issues tonight, Barbara--so didn't focus on the story. I found no errors here. Great narration as usual.
Isaiah Ramesses
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2010
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I'm mainly reviewing for editorial issues tonight, Barbara--so didn't focus on the story. I found no errors here. Great narration as usual.
Isaiah Ramesses
Comment Written 10-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from TT7Z
Excellent piece, easy to read and follow. Many places left open for twists and turns of future chapters. Very nicely done. I can't wait to read more of this sags. Thank you again for such a wonderful piece.
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2010
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Excellent piece, easy to read and follow. Many places left open for twists and turns of future chapters. Very nicely done. I can't wait to read more of this sags. Thank you again for such a wonderful piece.
Comment Written 09-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from BPL76
The plot is good
I was expecting more romance
but that is in another chapter
the dialog is good
This story has promise
This is a good read
BPL
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2010
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The plot is good
I was expecting more romance
but that is in another chapter
the dialog is good
This story has promise
This is a good read
BPL
Comment Written 09-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2010
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There will be romance, I promise. I just need to make sure Sara is ready. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from E.P. Thomas
Great chapter. You mesh descriptive and narrative passages together in a manner that makes your writing interesting and fun to read. The dialogue is well-written.
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2010
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Great chapter. You mesh descriptive and narrative passages together in a manner that makes your writing interesting and fun to read. The dialogue is well-written.
Comment Written 09-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Helen Tan
The doorway scene steams and if you had continued to mention his hands maybe roaming her bare back as they kissed, her curves ... it might be HOTTER! It looks like Joe is opening his life faster to Sara but she's not resisting though she might be slower in trusting. It's harder as she needs to consider Cassie.
I get up around five-thirty and do PT (physical training)
I'm not too sure whether having parenthesis in dialogue is an accepted format to explain an abbreviation. I might just have him say - I get up around five-thirty and do PT, that's physical training.
Something like that, as if he's explaining to Sara and us readers indirectly. This is just my thoughts.
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2010
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The doorway scene steams and if you had continued to mention his hands maybe roaming her bare back as they kissed, her curves ... it might be HOTTER! It looks like Joe is opening his life faster to Sara but she's not resisting though she might be slower in trusting. It's harder as she needs to consider Cassie.
I get up around five-thirty and do PT (physical training)
I'm not too sure whether having parenthesis in dialogue is an accepted format to explain an abbreviation. I might just have him say - I get up around five-thirty and do PT, that's physical training.
Something like that, as if he's explaining to Sara and us readers indirectly. This is just my thoughts.
Comment Written 09-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2010
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Thank you, I like that, I have been trying to figure out a good way to work it in there, because civilians wouldn't know what it is.. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from L.lora
Barbara this was a wonderful
expertly written addition to
your storyline. Your descriptions
and dialogues are spot on. Getting
to know Joe and Sara better as they
are getting to know each other is
handled superbly in this easy flowing
read. Prayers continue to be sent your
way...hugs.. Lora
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2010
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Barbara this was a wonderful
expertly written addition to
your storyline. Your descriptions
and dialogues are spot on. Getting
to know Joe and Sara better as they
are getting to know each other is
handled superbly in this easy flowing
read. Prayers continue to be sent your
way...hugs.. Lora
Comment Written 09-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2010
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Thank you for your continued prayers. Everything is in God's hand now. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Thesis
Barbara, I hope everything goes well at the doctor's. My thoughts are with you.
This Part is good, since it shows Sara letting her guard down a little, trying to get to know Joe. He's a very methodical guy. It's going to be hard for her to say goodbye, when he has to get back to work. - John
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2010
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Barbara, I hope everything goes well at the doctor's. My thoughts are with you.
This Part is good, since it shows Sara letting her guard down a little, trying to get to know Joe. He's a very methodical guy. It's going to be hard for her to say goodbye, when he has to get back to work. - John
Comment Written 09-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2010
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Thank you for your kind review. Your well wishes are appreciated.
Comment from marcii
What I really liked mostly about this chapter is that you got your male character asking your female character about her pregnancy, not often the thing told in a romantic story unless they are in the situation were they are about to have a baby in the story at that moment. I thought it was interesting and well thought of. Might seem a simple thing.
Marcii
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2010
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What I really liked mostly about this chapter is that you got your male character asking your female character about her pregnancy, not often the thing told in a romantic story unless they are in the situation were they are about to have a baby in the story at that moment. I thought it was interesting and well thought of. Might seem a simple thing.
Marcii
Comment Written 09-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2010
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Thank you for your kind words.