Contest Entry and Winners
Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "I'm Here!"Short Stories
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Comment from winsome
This is so sad but with a happier ending. It is a great piece and I wish you best of luck in the contest. the artwork is stunning.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2010
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This is so sad but with a happier ending. It is a great piece and I wish you best of luck in the contest. the artwork is stunning.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2010
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Winsome,
Thank you so much for the generous response to my story. I appreciate it very much. Carol
Comment from IndianaIrish
What a heart-warming story this is. I enjoyed the message and she found a listener. However, since this contest requires a fiction story, I'm sorry I felt the need to deduct a star. A warm story and thank you for sharing.
Indy :>)
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2010
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What a heart-warming story this is. I enjoyed the message and she found a listener. However, since this contest requires a fiction story, I'm sorry I felt the need to deduct a star. A warm story and thank you for sharing.
Indy :>)
Comment Written 27-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2010
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Indy,
True, part of the story is real, but then everything we right comes from some thought in life. The story is fiction...since his daddy isn't very sick and there's nothing wrong with his sisters either. Yes, I do feel like he's talking to me when the sky opens, but that's not the whole story. Thanks for reading and for leaving your generous comments.Smiles to you......
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I think it would help my friend, not to state the category as non-fiction. Thee's several stories in this fiction contest that are classified as non-fiction. People do it all the time. I agree with your thoughts. :>)
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Indy,
thank you so much for telling me that it was written that way...I didn't know that I had somehow hit that key..I thought it was under flash fiction..My apologies....my excuse is that I must be going senile...Smiles and thanks again....
Comment from MizKat
I love your '100 word dash' story. I'm in sort of the same kind of perdicament, so your story was a pick-me-up and a good reminder that God always listens and helps. Thank you.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2010
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I love your '100 word dash' story. I'm in sort of the same kind of perdicament, so your story was a pick-me-up and a good reminder that God always listens and helps. Thank you.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2010
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Kat,
Yes...we always need reminders don't we? Thank you for the kind response..Wishing you the best as well...Carol
Comment from tati
Hi,
Great entry. So touching. When the clouds parted and the sun peeked through the hole, the mother grasped it as a sign that everything will be alright. Very interesting.
Beautifully chosen words, very well crafted with your heart. You know well how to grab the reader's emotion and attention. Thank you for sharing; good luck in the voting booth.
tati, March 27, 2010
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2010
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Hi,
Great entry. So touching. When the clouds parted and the sun peeked through the hole, the mother grasped it as a sign that everything will be alright. Very interesting.
Beautifully chosen words, very well crafted with your heart. You know well how to grab the reader's emotion and attention. Thank you for sharing; good luck in the voting booth.
tati, March 27, 2010
Comment Written 27-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2010
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Tati,
Thank you for enjoying my story. I truly appreciate your comments and best wishes. Smiles, Carol
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Oh, it's you, my dear Carol. Enjoy your weekend.
tati
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And to you also my special friend...Sunshine and happiness...Carol
Comment from Alexandra.Obreja
Your story is full with emotion and you managed in so few words to create also a vivid image of the story.
Wonderful job, i wish you good luck in the contest!
Best regards, Alex
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2010
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Your story is full with emotion and you managed in so few words to create also a vivid image of the story.
Wonderful job, i wish you good luck in the contest!
Best regards, Alex
Comment Written 27-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2010
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Alex,
Thank you so much for the wonderful review. Your comments are greatly appreciated. Carol
Comment from rmdelta
this was a very strong and quite well written story. Fits easily within the constraint of the contest rules. Excellent message within the writing. Good luck
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2010
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this was a very strong and quite well written story. Fits easily within the constraint of the contest rules. Excellent message within the writing. Good luck
Comment Written 27-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2010
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rmdelta,
Thank you so much for the wonderful thoughts and comments. Carol
Comment from Teri7
This is an exceptionally good story you have penned. It gave me chills as I was reading it. I wish I had six stars to give you. Good luck. Hugs, Teri
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2010
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This is an exceptionally good story you have penned. It gave me chills as I was reading it. I wish I had six stars to give you. Good luck. Hugs, Teri
Comment Written 27-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2010
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Teri,
Your comments are appreciated far more than the stars. Thank you....Carol
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Hugs Carol
Comment from JW
I feel that most likely I could relate to this story more than most. This afternoon, I paid a visit to my mother's graveside in order to put fresh flowers there and of course, to tell her what is going on in my life.
This is an excellent story. I could easily feel the emotion and mentally see the scene before me. Great job!
Thanks for sharing this!
Jonathon
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2010
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I feel that most likely I could relate to this story more than most. This afternoon, I paid a visit to my mother's graveside in order to put fresh flowers there and of course, to tell her what is going on in my life.
This is an excellent story. I could easily feel the emotion and mentally see the scene before me. Great job!
Thanks for sharing this!
Jonathon
Comment Written 27-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2010
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Jonathon,
It's nice to know that they are listening...Smiles, Carol
Comment from Katiesherrill
Can't imagine the loss of losing a son. I like how you resolution is simply the mother feeling like her son was present she does not have any answers but she that is not what was important. Good job.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2010
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Can't imagine the loss of losing a son. I like how you resolution is simply the mother feeling like her son was present she does not have any answers but she that is not what was important. Good job.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2010
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Katie,
Yes, just knowing that they are listening is comforting. Thank you...Carol
Comment from E.P. Thomas
Anon,
I can't imagine writing a story in 100 words. I admire you for attempting it. Unless I miscounted, your story is exactly 100 words long. That had to make it more difficult.
The best advice I can give is to make every word count, focus on imagery, and know with certainity the message you would like your story to convey.
ep
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2010
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Anon,
I can't imagine writing a story in 100 words. I admire you for attempting it. Unless I miscounted, your story is exactly 100 words long. That had to make it more difficult.
The best advice I can give is to make every word count, focus on imagery, and know with certainity the message you would like your story to convey.
ep
Comment Written 27-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2010
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EP
I thought I followed your advice perfectly...Thank you for the review. Carol