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Viewing comments for Chapter 38 "Begin Again's Version"Two very real women in not so real situation.
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Comment from Wayne Fowler
Very nicely done. (And what a great photo! - smiley face here)
Wasn't it great of Rachelle and Gretchen to offer us a turn? What a great concept.
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2024
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Very nicely done. (And what a great photo! - smiley face here)
Wasn't it great of Rachelle and Gretchen to offer us a turn? What a great concept.
Comment Written 28-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2024
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Yes, it was! Hey! If there's a party, let's have fun! Can you guess that I was a "party planner" in my day? LOl thanks so much for enjoying the story and for the review.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Oh Carol, you excelled here and I was in absolute stitches with your version of events here and I have tears in my eyes as I laughed so much. You entertained me with your raucous scene of those stripper Police Offices in sparkling suspenders! Ha ha ha, and Gretchen hiccuping with a bottle of champers in her hand. What a good laugh this post is Carol. I wish I had a six for you as this deserves one, I am so glad you joined in the fun, much enjoyed, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2024
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Oh Carol, you excelled here and I was in absolute stitches with your version of events here and I have tears in my eyes as I laughed so much. You entertained me with your raucous scene of those stripper Police Offices in sparkling suspenders! Ha ha ha, and Gretchen hiccuping with a bottle of champers in her hand. What a good laugh this post is Carol. I wish I had a six for you as this deserves one, I am so glad you joined in the fun, much enjoyed, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 28-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2024
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Thanks so much, Dolly. I'll take the virtual six any day as long as I know you enjoyed the story. Glad I made you laugh! Have a great day and thank you again.
Smiles, Carol
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Your imagination ran wild here Carol x x x
Comment from Cecilia A Heiskary
I absolutely loved this story. Is it part of a chapter book or is it stand alone. I like how the officers cause tension initially and then rip off jackets to let the party begin. Great story. Keep them coming.
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2024
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I absolutely loved this story. Is it part of a chapter book or is it stand alone. I like how the officers cause tension initially and then rip off jackets to let the party begin. Great story. Keep them coming.
Comment Written 28-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2024
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Rachelle and Gretchen wrote stories about attending a FanStorian International Convention, and then they invited other writers on this site to write the final chapter. This was my crazy version. I'm thrilled you enjoyed it. Thank you!
Smiles and hugs, Carol
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You have a talent and I enjoy reading your stories. Keep up the great work.
Cecilia
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You make me smile with your kindness. thank you!
Comment from Wendy G
Wonderful chapter. At first I was worried about the police officer, but that soon got turned on its head. Great thinking getting everyone to "begin again" and party like there was no tomorrow! And a fine way to get rid of Jane!
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2024
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Wonderful chapter. At first I was worried about the police officer, but that soon got turned on its head. Great thinking getting everyone to "begin again" and party like there was no tomorrow! And a fine way to get rid of Jane!
Comment Written 28-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2024
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Thanks Wendy...it was a fun party and though messy, it seems FanStorians can have fun together and enjoy all the differences that make us who we are.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Rachelle Allen
OHHHHHHHHH. MYYYYYYYYYY. FREEEEEEEEAKIN. GAWD, Woman!!! WHAT have you done??!!! HAHAHAHAHAHAHAAHA!!! This is so hysterical I am beside myself with delight. This could NOT be more fabulous!!! Thank you, times a million zillion, for immortalizing this novel with your talent and FUN and outrageous sense of humor!!! I never - not in a million years - would have thought of a scene like this. So I am SOOO glad that you did!!! xoxoxoxoxoxox
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OHHHHHHHHH. MYYYYYYYYYY. FREEEEEEEEAKIN. GAWD, Woman!!! WHAT have you done??!!! HAHAHAHAHAHAHAAHA!!! This is so hysterical I am beside myself with delight. This could NOT be more fabulous!!! Thank you, times a million zillion, for immortalizing this novel with your talent and FUN and outrageous sense of humor!!! I never - not in a million years - would have thought of a scene like this. So I am SOOO glad that you did!!! xoxoxoxoxoxox
Comment Written 27-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2024
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Thanks for making my morning, Rachelle. I saw how so many were getting tons of reviews and I don't have many followers, then I thought I'd gone the wrong way with my ideas, and well you know...doom and gloom. But then Miss Sunshine (YOU) appeared on my horizon and spread her joy and stars. Thank you so much for liking my offering to your story.
Smiles, Carol
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Seriously, I have not had more fun reading anything on FS. Bawdy, and hysterically funny and exactly, EXACTLY what I was hoping for! You absolutely nailed the assignment!!. xoxox
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Thank you so much...I hope I get a few more readers to enjoy your raucous fun! I am thrilled you enjoyed it. Hope Gretchen does too!
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Gretchen? She's going to LOVE-LOVE-LOVE it, too. We were just saying the other day that although we're nothing alike on the outside, inside, we're pretty much twins. She definitely has the same sicko sense of humor and bawdiness, so she is going to be absolutely loving what you wrote! xoxox
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Thanks! This old lady worries too much!
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You sure don't write like an "old lady;" you write like a champion!!
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How kind! Every once in a while, I discover a bit of my youth rattling around in the corridors of my mind and I'm driven to write something for them. Crazy! But fun!
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Well, they are cheering for you today; that's for sure! xoxo
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Here's what a ninety-something neighbor of mine taught me about that back when I was in my twenties: Worrying is like rocking in a rocking chair. It gives you something to do, but it doesn't get you anyplace. Tell yourself this from now any anytime Worry creeps in. xoxox
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
You eat up all my sixes like Marzipan, but I have to save one for some deserving new writer. This is hysterically funny, and you got rid of Jane. Sexy guy strippers mean there will be another convention next year. Thanks for making me feel fifty years younger.
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2024
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You eat up all my sixes like Marzipan, but I have to save one for some deserving new writer. This is hysterically funny, and you got rid of Jane. Sexy guy strippers mean there will be another convention next year. Thanks for making me feel fifty years younger.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2024
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Thank you so much Carol for the kind review and the fact that you enjoyed it was certainly enough. You are always there to support me and I appreciate it very much.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Pearl Edwards
This started out as an interesting read and I was, thinking it was going to be a halloween party but instead, what a fun night it turned out to be, with the fanstory mob. Very amusing write, Carol. Well done.
cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2024
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This started out as an interesting read and I was, thinking it was going to be a halloween party but instead, what a fun night it turned out to be, with the fanstory mob. Very amusing write, Carol. Well done.
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 27-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2024
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Thanks, Valda.... Adding to Rachelle's and Gretchen's FanStory convention was a bit mystifying at first, but then the thought of a wild and crazy party (because we are fun people, right?) seemed the perfect thing to do.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Mrs. KT
Oh my goodness, Carol!
Your imagination was on fire with this offering of your version of Rachelle's and Gretchen's tale!
I laughed throughout your entire narration.
And, you may not believe this, but I can actually see the actions you described taking place ... especially with Rachelle!
I do believe everyone had a marvelous time!
I surely did just reading your version!
Very much enjoyed!
Thanks for sharing!
fondly,
diane
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2024
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Oh my goodness, Carol!
Your imagination was on fire with this offering of your version of Rachelle's and Gretchen's tale!
I laughed throughout your entire narration.
And, you may not believe this, but I can actually see the actions you described taking place ... especially with Rachelle!
I do believe everyone had a marvelous time!
I surely did just reading your version!
Very much enjoyed!
Thanks for sharing!
fondly,
diane
Comment Written 27-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2024
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You and Rachelle made my morning and I thank you so much. When I didn't have many reviews this morning I feared I'd gone overboard with my thoughts....but the two of you brought out the sun and I'm smiling. Thanks for enjoying my bit of the party.
Smiles, Carol
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Loved every morsel, Carol!
I still hope to add a chapter as well, but it's not coming together as I thought!
Here's to a beautiful new week ahead!
fondly,
diane
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Thank you so much, Diane. Have a great day!
Comment from royowen
What a fun story, if anyone should write a story by the prompting that was thrown out by the organisers of the Fanstory convention, and as always used your fabulous imagination to fulfil its promise, well done, good luck Carol, blessings Roy
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reply by the author on 28-Oct-2024
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What a fun story, if anyone should write a story by the prompting that was thrown out by the organisers of the Fanstory convention, and as always used your fabulous imagination to fulfil its promise, well done, good luck Carol, blessings Roy
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Comment Written 27-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2024
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Thanks, Roy! I might have gone a bit overboard, but it was in the spirit of things. LOL, I should have put it in there for you to watch your toes wearing those flip-flops with a tuxedo.
Smiles, Carol
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Heh heh, can't be too formal,
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I once went to a show in Carnegie hall, and lost the heels and soul of my shoes while walking from the cab to the entrance, there was a massive traffic jam, it was quicker to walk. I would rather have flip flops. Bless you.
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
O M G!!! LOL Best story ever!!!! Magic Mike visits a FanStory convention and barely lives to tell the tail...I mean tale LOL. Where do I sign up for the private tour that Jane got?? Carol, you go to the head of the class for this one.
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reply by the author on 28-Oct-2024
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O M G!!! LOL Best story ever!!!! Magic Mike visits a FanStory convention and barely lives to tell the tail...I mean tale LOL. Where do I sign up for the private tour that Jane got?? Carol, you go to the head of the class for this one.
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Comment Written 27-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2024
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Thanks so much for your kindness, Marilyn. I wasn't sure that it would go over well with the crowd, but it's where this "event planners" head traveled. Appreciate the review. Hope you are enjoying yourself.
Smiles, Carol