Heart Crafted Poems - 2022
Viewing comments for Chapter 94 "Too many spirits"Musings of an old man - 2022
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Comment from dragonpoet
Hey Jim,
This is a funny and embarrassing moment for this man. It shows the bad effects of alcohol are. This person seems to have the wrong life goals at this time.
The reason I gave you four stars is that the last your poem had the unrhymed lines telling a story not the las words of this lines telling a story.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Happy Holidays
Joan
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reply by the author on 17-Dec-2022
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Hey Jim,
This is a funny and embarrassing moment for this man. It shows the bad effects of alcohol are. This person seems to have the wrong life goals at this time.
The reason I gave you four stars is that the last your poem had the unrhymed lines telling a story not the las words of this lines telling a story.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Happy Holidays
Joan
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Comment Written 17-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2022
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Hum oh well!
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Well we all try our best with new forms.
Joan
Comment from Terry Broxson
I am not familiar with the Raccontino form of poetry. I found this to be very fun and creative. I do marvel at your ability to do this type of writing. Excellent work, Terry.
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2022
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I am not familiar with the Raccontino form of poetry. I found this to be very fun and creative. I do marvel at your ability to do this type of writing. Excellent work, Terry.
Comment Written 17-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2022
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Terry, that is very kind of you, thank you!
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Splendid effort. Quite the story. Whether the formulaic was met, idk, I am not a professor of creative writing but your nerve to take on such a challenge was braver than a Centurian.
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2022
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Splendid effort. Quite the story. Whether the formulaic was met, idk, I am not a professor of creative writing but your nerve to take on such a challenge was braver than a Centurian.
Comment Written 17-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2022
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Smiling back! I hope that is the case, meeting then formula! what a complex ways to write, I found it quite a challenge!
Comment from Sarah Das Gupta
A complex form which is well handled. This has a serious point about drinking and driving which is made humorously. You can spoil Christmas by over indulging.
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2022
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A complex form which is well handled. This has a serious point about drinking and driving which is made humorously. You can spoil Christmas by over indulging.
Comment Written 17-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2022
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Sarah, thanks 🙏
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HAPPY CHRISTMAS
Comment from Bill Schott
This raccontino poem, Too Much Spirits, has the proper formatting and blends the two stories into one. I guess the format allows one to get the story through just reding the odd or even lines alone.
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reply by the author on 17-Dec-2022
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This raccontino poem, Too Much Spirits, has the proper formatting and blends the two stories into one. I guess the format allows one to get the story through just reding the odd or even lines alone.
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Comment Written 17-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2022
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Bill, I hope that is the case, what a complex ways to write, I found it quite a challenge!