Feverence
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Comment from Spitfire
This is so full of sensory images that I could get hot just reading it. LOL A teetering stomach, cotton and gauze replacing salivatory glands. Love the throaty moan that has everyone staring at you. Reference to Olympic scores good for a big laugh. A smart ending that addresses the prompt by giving a new word for falling in love: Feverance.
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2022
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This is so full of sensory images that I could get hot just reading it. LOL A teetering stomach, cotton and gauze replacing salivatory glands. Love the throaty moan that has everyone staring at you. Reference to Olympic scores good for a big laugh. A smart ending that addresses the prompt by giving a new word for falling in love: Feverance.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2022
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Now THIS is a terrific review! Thank you for all of it...and for the extra star, as well.
Comment from C. Gale Burnett
A hot read all the way through. I had begun to feel really sorry for the poor woman with a bad case of 'feverence'. Perfect ending. Never saw that coming. Great story and new word for the contest!
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2022
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A hot read all the way through. I had begun to feel really sorry for the poor woman with a bad case of 'feverence'. Perfect ending. Never saw that coming. Great story and new word for the contest!
Comment Written 03-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2022
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This is such an encouraging, validating review. Thank you; your words mean the world.
Comment from K.L. Rockquemore
This is a fantastic write!!
Your interpretation of the prompt is clever and imaginative. This is a fun prompt I must say, and it seems as though you had fun writing this.
The point of view is unique and engaging.
Your writing is wildly descriptive and paints a vivid picture of the scene.
The dialogue is very realistic and has a nice flow. It is well written and adds depth to the story.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2022
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This is a fantastic write!!
Your interpretation of the prompt is clever and imaginative. This is a fun prompt I must say, and it seems as though you had fun writing this.
The point of view is unique and engaging.
Your writing is wildly descriptive and paints a vivid picture of the scene.
The dialogue is very realistic and has a nice flow. It is well written and adds depth to the story.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2022
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What a REALLY nice review this is! Thank you very much for making me feel as if I accomplished what I hoped it would.
Comment from GWHARGIS
I thought Margaret was the carrier of some rare virus. Lol. Glad to know it was just a symtom of last. You built up the suspense and then left us with a bit of a cliff hanger. Great job. Gretchen
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2022
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I thought Margaret was the carrier of some rare virus. Lol. Glad to know it was just a symtom of last. You built up the suspense and then left us with a bit of a cliff hanger. Great job. Gretchen
Comment Written 03-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2022
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Thanks!
Comment from Pam (respa)
-I love your story.
-I don't know if you have read any books by Sariah Wilson, but she writes really good romance novels, and your story reminds me of her writing.
-Your descriptions are excellent, and you involve the reader in the story.
-We care about the narrator with her heart racing "like a drunken tight rope artist."
-And then Paul from Accounting shows up, and it all makes sense.
-I like your description involving the ratings in the Olympics.
-The ending is like the cherry on top of the Sundae.
-This is really good, and deserves to win the contest. I look forward to knowing who wrote it!!!!!
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2022
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-I love your story.
-I don't know if you have read any books by Sariah Wilson, but she writes really good romance novels, and your story reminds me of her writing.
-Your descriptions are excellent, and you involve the reader in the story.
-We care about the narrator with her heart racing "like a drunken tight rope artist."
-And then Paul from Accounting shows up, and it all makes sense.
-I like your description involving the ratings in the Olympics.
-The ending is like the cherry on top of the Sundae.
-This is really good, and deserves to win the contest. I look forward to knowing who wrote it!!!!!
Comment Written 03-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2022
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Wow! This makes me feel fantastic! What a really nice review. Thanks very much.
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You are very welcome, and I am glad you felt fantastic. It was a really, really good story!!!
Comment from Tpa
I congratulate on your vast vocabulary that enriched your various descriptions and made a ready flow of your text. I hope your eloquent words will cast a superfluous judgement upon its entry to the contest.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2022
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I congratulate on your vast vocabulary that enriched your various descriptions and made a ready flow of your text. I hope your eloquent words will cast a superfluous judgement upon its entry to the contest.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2022
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Thanks.
Comment from Liz Westfall
This was hot, and I don't just mean the fever haha. I like the picture you chose. I imagine Paul looks like that. I would probably feel some kind of way if I worked with a guy like that. Of course my significant other is the only one for me, but I can appreciate a gorgeous man! Also, I love the first paragraph. It's very well-written.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2022
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This was hot, and I don't just mean the fever haha. I like the picture you chose. I imagine Paul looks like that. I would probably feel some kind of way if I worked with a guy like that. Of course my significant other is the only one for me, but I can appreciate a gorgeous man! Also, I love the first paragraph. It's very well-written.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2022
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Attached doesn't mean blind, after all! No harm in appreciating something fine to look at! Thanks for the nice review.
Comment from Sally Law
Oh wow, this is super, mystery writer! No errors and perfect for the contest. My vote for sure. Please accept my high 5555's and compliments, and I'll be back to you once the contest is in the voting box.
Sending along my very best to you as always and my best for the contest.
Sally :))
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reply by the author on 03-Oct-2022
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Oh wow, this is super, mystery writer! No errors and perfect for the contest. My vote for sure. Please accept my high 5555's and compliments, and I'll be back to you once the contest is in the voting box.
Sending along my very best to you as always and my best for the contest.
Sally :))
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Comment Written 03-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2022
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Thank you VERY, very much!!
Comment from royowen
Heh heh. Being a writer seems to be in the slightly disturbed water of creating words because we're not happy with the ones we have available to us, but then that's better than being language-crude, instead of language-rich, beautifully written, blessings Roy. PS I like feverence
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reply by the author on 03-Oct-2022
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Heh heh. Being a writer seems to be in the slightly disturbed water of creating words because we're not happy with the ones we have available to us, but then that's better than being language-crude, instead of language-rich, beautifully written, blessings Roy. PS I like feverence
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Comment Written 03-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2022
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Thanks!
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Welcome
Comment from RodG
What a delightful story and that new word is perfect! You have the reader wondering what alien ailment the narrator could be experiencing. Excellent description throughout and a marvelous conclusion. I'm betting this entry wins the contest. Rod
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2022
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What a delightful story and that new word is perfect! You have the reader wondering what alien ailment the narrator could be experiencing. Excellent description throughout and a marvelous conclusion. I'm betting this entry wins the contest. Rod
Comment Written 03-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2022
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I vote for you to be right!! Thank you for the wonderful review.
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My pleasure!