Heart Crafted Poems - 2022
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Comment from Carolyn Dooley
Yes, it begins with each individual. It takes team work. I enjoyed reading your poem about making America great again. Sharing is caring. We have to look out for one another. We have to make better choices in everything dealing with life. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2022
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Yes, it begins with each individual. It takes team work. I enjoyed reading your poem about making America great again. Sharing is caring. We have to look out for one another. We have to make better choices in everything dealing with life. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2022
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Carolyn, thank you for your supportive comment.
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You are welcome.
Comment from Wendy G
Ah, so well done. Of course, the topic depends on how one defines greatness. The country will be great if the individuals within it are great - and to be great they must show integrity, kindness, compassion and support for each other. You have very well expressed this. sending best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2022
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Ah, so well done. Of course, the topic depends on how one defines greatness. The country will be great if the individuals within it are great - and to be great they must show integrity, kindness, compassion and support for each other. You have very well expressed this. sending best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 06-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2022
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Thank you Wendy, it does take all of us to make greatness a reality worldwide.
Comment from MissMerri
I don't see how anyone could disagree with this clearly stated logic and abundance of common sense. It breaks my heart to hear people of either party proclaiming the inferiority of their fellow Americans, especially when truth is utterly forsaken simply for the purpose of making their case. Recent example: I was hurt by the president's speech the other day, even though I do not identify as a "Trumpie." I think you should send him a copy of this poem.
Loved these lines: "greatness is you and me and he and she and they and them/putting our best Faith into each other and doing good
encouraging one another to get up and go!"
Thanks for sharing this, and much good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2022
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I don't see how anyone could disagree with this clearly stated logic and abundance of common sense. It breaks my heart to hear people of either party proclaiming the inferiority of their fellow Americans, especially when truth is utterly forsaken simply for the purpose of making their case. Recent example: I was hurt by the president's speech the other day, even though I do not identify as a "Trumpie." I think you should send him a copy of this poem.
Loved these lines: "greatness is you and me and he and she and they and them/putting our best Faith into each other and doing good
encouraging one another to get up and go!"
Thanks for sharing this, and much good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 06-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2022
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MissMeri, thank you, like you I am unaffiliated politically, while I still yearn for statesmen and women to rise about the brouhaha caused by sound bites and disinformation. I yearn to see debt taking responsibly, I yearn to see education focussed on the art of learning, I yearn to see everyone putting there shoulder to the boulder because it is right to participate and pay a fair contribution for services. But, mostly I yearn for one nation under God to being meaningful again.
Comment from Boogienights
Wonderfully done. You make a great argument for working together, without dragging politics into it. Its all about working toward a common goal. Best of luck in the contest. :)
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2022
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Wonderfully done. You make a great argument for working together, without dragging politics into it. Its all about working toward a common goal. Best of luck in the contest. :)
Comment Written 06-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2022
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Thank you with smiles coming back to you!
Comment from royowen
Greatness doesn't really rest in the shoulders of any man, if that were true thapem all countries would be great, and at least at sometime in history, in fact some country's have been, greatness is something given, it really can't be earned, greatness is given to those who adopt what is great, love, faith, hope, kindness, goodness, patience etc. beautifully written, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2022
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Greatness doesn't really rest in the shoulders of any man, if that were true thapem all countries would be great, and at least at sometime in history, in fact some country's have been, greatness is something given, it really can't be earned, greatness is given to those who adopt what is great, love, faith, hope, kindness, goodness, patience etc. beautifully written, blessings Roy
Comment Written 06-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2022
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You are spot on Roy, thank you! 🙏🙏
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Well done
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
I agree greatness for any type of organization, nation ...etc.. begins with the common man. Just the regular old Sally, Sue and regular Joe. I wasn't sure if you weren't being sarcastic using Joe repeatedly in your poem. I hope not because that defeats the purpose of writing about folks getting along. I would drop the first line down one or two notches. You have lots of space at the bottom. The visual fits okay, but you never mention Christ in your poem. Perhaps a visual of regular people helping each other would fit better. Also, it would be good to see some red, white and blue somewhere in your poem. Maybe, a blue background with alternating red and white lettering to symbolize the flag.
LOVE THE CHANGES YOU MADE!!!!!
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2022
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I agree greatness for any type of organization, nation ...etc.. begins with the common man. Just the regular old Sally, Sue and regular Joe. I wasn't sure if you weren't being sarcastic using Joe repeatedly in your poem. I hope not because that defeats the purpose of writing about folks getting along. I would drop the first line down one or two notches. You have lots of space at the bottom. The visual fits okay, but you never mention Christ in your poem. Perhaps a visual of regular people helping each other would fit better. Also, it would be good to see some red, white and blue somewhere in your poem. Maybe, a blue background with alternating red and white lettering to symbolize the flag.
LOVE THE CHANGES YOU MADE!!!!!
Comment Written 06-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2022
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Thanks, no Joe rhymed with so?. am unaffiliated politically, while I still yearn for statesmen and women to rise about the brouhaha caused by sound bites and disinformation. I yearn to see debt taking responsibly, I yearn to see education focussed on the art of learning, I yearn to see everyone putting there shoulder to the boulder because it is right to participate and pay a fair contribution for services. But, mostly I yearn for one nation under God to being meaningful again. You are so correct I will add some color to bring the piece alive.
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You are welcome.
Comment from GWHARGIS
Understanding and allowing others to have their own beliefs is the sign of intelligence. There isn't much of that going around now. When I was a little girl my parents told me to never discuss these three things: religion, politics, and sex. I don't to this day. The aspects of social media have given bullies a place to hide. Great poem. Really truly a problem that could be solved if all would respect each other.
Gretchen
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2022
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Understanding and allowing others to have their own beliefs is the sign of intelligence. There isn't much of that going around now. When I was a little girl my parents told me to never discuss these three things: religion, politics, and sex. I don't to this day. The aspects of social media have given bullies a place to hide. Great poem. Really truly a problem that could be solved if all would respect each other.
Gretchen
Comment Written 06-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2022
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Gretchen, wise parents and you are spot on!
Comment from John Ciarmello
What is a profound entry for this contest. I've read a few for this contest, but yours stands alone in my mind because of its truths and its pearls of wisdom. I enjoyed the read and the thoughts. Best, JohnC
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2022
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What is a profound entry for this contest. I've read a few for this contest, but yours stands alone in my mind because of its truths and its pearls of wisdom. I enjoyed the read and the thoughts. Best, JohnC
Comment Written 06-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2022
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Thank you John C!
Comment from Fleedleflump
I wonder if we'd be better served by governments just trying to run the country in a sensible manner, rather than pursuing an ideology that may or may not gel with the current pragmatic path - regardless of political or any other beliefs.
I applaud for writing something rational - may we see more such thoughts!
Mike
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2022
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I wonder if we'd be better served by governments just trying to run the country in a sensible manner, rather than pursuing an ideology that may or may not gel with the current pragmatic path - regardless of political or any other beliefs.
I applaud for writing something rational - may we see more such thoughts!
Mike
Comment Written 06-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2022
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Mike, thank you! We can only hope ...
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your contest entry read well, Mystery Author. The picture was
supportive. However, we as a country have forgotten how much
all of us depend on God. We have done away with His teachings
in schools and elsewhere. Is it any wonder the dilemma the USA
is in? Your words were well-chosen and flowed smoothly. I liked
the rhyme scheme. You expressed your thoughts and feelings
well of improvements we all could make IF we only tried.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest, Jan
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2022
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Your contest entry read well, Mystery Author. The picture was
supportive. However, we as a country have forgotten how much
all of us depend on God. We have done away with His teachings
in schools and elsewhere. Is it any wonder the dilemma the USA
is in? Your words were well-chosen and flowed smoothly. I liked
the rhyme scheme. You expressed your thoughts and feelings
well of improvements we all could make IF we only tried.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest, Jan
Comment Written 06-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2022
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Thanks, Jan, I agree fully with your comment!🙏🙏🙏