Heart Crafted Poems - 2022
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Comment from Frank Malley
The poem, " Impossible dreams," elegantly uses a complex form called "Domino Rhyme." It may be a fault of mine that this form did not appear saliently to me as I read, although I did note the recurrence of rhymes within the poem. The irregular meter of the poem is a plus, as it expands the pensive sequence of the narrative intentions in the poem. Troubled and uncertain love tethered by a skeptical thoughtfulness is the central descriptive focus of this excellent poem. I suspect all writers have fascinations with particular words at particular points in their creative work; my poem, "Refrigerator Poetry" has attractive word fascination as a theme. It's in my portfolio. I see this poet's diction and design of lines as an excellent and evolving capability.
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reply by the author on 11-Jul-2022
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The poem, " Impossible dreams," elegantly uses a complex form called "Domino Rhyme." It may be a fault of mine that this form did not appear saliently to me as I read, although I did note the recurrence of rhymes within the poem. The irregular meter of the poem is a plus, as it expands the pensive sequence of the narrative intentions in the poem. Troubled and uncertain love tethered by a skeptical thoughtfulness is the central descriptive focus of this excellent poem. I suspect all writers have fascinations with particular words at particular points in their creative work; my poem, "Refrigerator Poetry" has attractive word fascination as a theme. It's in my portfolio. I see this poet's diction and design of lines as an excellent and evolving capability.
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Comment Written 11-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2022
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Frank, thank you and I am excited to have a poem of yours to read and learn from. Best regards, Jim
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Well..... I hope at least it makes sense to you. It was fun to write.
Comment from Sally Law
Well, Sir Galahad, You have penned a dreamy poem full of passion and longing between you and your subject. A lovely poem in this form (new to me) and response to the challenge. Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the challenge,
Sal :))
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Well, Sir Galahad, You have penned a dreamy poem full of passion and longing between you and your subject. A lovely poem in this form (new to me) and response to the challenge. Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the challenge,
Sal :))
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Comment Written 11-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2022
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Smiling back with great respect for you and your supportive mind.