Heart Crafted Poems - 2022
Viewing comments for Chapter 48 "Symphony of raindrops"Musings of an old man - 2022
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Comment from Madison Edenfield
Amazing poem JLR. I love the way you describe the rhythm ("drip by drip")
I also enjoyed how you related the pitch to the scale ( do re mi ) and the way you mentioned octaves to relate it to a symphony. This way beautify written. keep writing!
reply by the author on 24-May-2022
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Amazing poem JLR. I love the way you describe the rhythm ("drip by drip")
I also enjoyed how you related the pitch to the scale ( do re mi ) and the way you mentioned octaves to relate it to a symphony. This way beautify written. keep writing!
Comment Written 23-May-2022
reply by the author on 24-May-2022
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Madison, thank you
Comment from Verna Cole Mitchell
This is an outstanding nonet, using onomatopoeia and making music from the rain. I think this is a favorite of all the nonets I have read. The picture sets the image, and the end is perfect.
reply by the author on 23-May-2022
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This is an outstanding nonet, using onomatopoeia and making music from the rain. I think this is a favorite of all the nonets I have read. The picture sets the image, and the end is perfect.
Comment Written 23-May-2022
reply by the author on 23-May-2022
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Verna, this is simply a wonderful gift of six-stars for this nonet! I am honored and humbled; thank you!
Comment from royowen
Oh yes indeed, some folk have said that there is a perfect rhythm that emanates from Heave, that is designed to keep life in place, (my guess) this is perfect, correct syllable count, a great shape, great angle, well done,Jim, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 23-May-2022
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Oh yes indeed, some folk have said that there is a perfect rhythm that emanates from Heave, that is designed to keep life in place, (my guess) this is perfect, correct syllable count, a great shape, great angle, well done,Jim, blessings Roy
Comment Written 23-May-2022
reply by the author on 23-May-2022
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Roy, my favorite music comes from the heavens, especially on warm summer afternoons - to just take the edge off the heat the day.
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Well done Jim
Comment from lyenochka
Love how you incorporated all the musical terms into your nonet poem in almost every line: rhythm, tones, timbre, octaves, vibrate, pitch, and do-re-mi! Love the title, too. But would a nonet have too many "rules" for a "No Rules" contest? At any rate, wish you the best in the contest!
reply by the author on 23-May-2022
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Love how you incorporated all the musical terms into your nonet poem in almost every line: rhythm, tones, timbre, octaves, vibrate, pitch, and do-re-mi! Love the title, too. But would a nonet have too many "rules" for a "No Rules" contest? At any rate, wish you the best in the contest!
Comment Written 23-May-2022
reply by the author on 23-May-2022
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Humm good question ...
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your nonet is in great form, JLR. Your syllable count
per line is correct. Your art choice pairs nicely with
your descriptive words of rain. Great use of p, d, t,
alliteration. I like the smooth flow from the onset of
rain. You did a great job bringing in the sense of
hearing. Your color scheme is refreshing like the rain.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 23-May-2022
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Your nonet is in great form, JLR. Your syllable count
per line is correct. Your art choice pairs nicely with
your descriptive words of rain. Great use of p, d, t,
alliteration. I like the smooth flow from the onset of
rain. You did a great job bringing in the sense of
hearing. Your color scheme is refreshing like the rain.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 23-May-2022
reply by the author on 23-May-2022
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Jan, thank you for seeing this alliteration, be well!
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
This is a well-written poem and the visual fits perfectly with the text. The formation of the poem is great, It's similar to a raindrop. The text fits fine too. I didn't know what this line meant~ the POOLS collect tones drip by drip. Are you talking about swimming pools? Perhaps the word POND which is the same number of syllables fit the poem better. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 23-May-2022
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This is a well-written poem and the visual fits perfectly with the text. The formation of the poem is great, It's similar to a raindrop. The text fits fine too. I didn't know what this line meant~ the POOLS collect tones drip by drip. Are you talking about swimming pools? Perhaps the word POND which is the same number of syllables fit the poem better. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 23-May-2022
reply by the author on 23-May-2022
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Sandra thanks, I think you have a valid point.
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Thanks!
Comment from Carlos' girl
The nonet that you have created it is really beautiful. Very well written and Very pretty graphics and illustration as well. You should do well in the contest
reply by the author on 23-May-2022
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The nonet that you have created it is really beautiful. Very well written and Very pretty graphics and illustration as well. You should do well in the contest
Comment Written 23-May-2022
reply by the author on 23-May-2022
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Thank you.
Comment from karenina
I love these counting forms... They present beautifully center aligned!
Love your musical metaphor throughout. Clever you to change "do re mi" to "do re ME."
I'm counting syllable lines as:
108765432
Pitt/er patt/er/ing rain cre/ates/ rhy/thm
You may be one syllable "over" in line one...
Take a look...
Love the theme!
Karenina
reply by the author on 23-May-2022
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I love these counting forms... They present beautifully center aligned!
Love your musical metaphor throughout. Clever you to change "do re mi" to "do re ME."
I'm counting syllable lines as:
108765432
Pitt/er patt/er/ing rain cre/ates/ rhy/thm
You may be one syllable "over" in line one...
Take a look...
Love the theme!
Karenina
Comment Written 23-May-2022
reply by the author on 23-May-2022
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Karenina, I checked with how many syllables and I think I am spot on.
Pitter - 2
Pattering -3
Rain - 1
Creates - 2
Rhythm - 1
thanks for the Mi correction ... that was biggy brain cramp moment :)
Comment from K.L. Rockquemore
I love this poem!!!
As a violinist it speaks to my heart. You fantastic imagery is lyrical creating its own musical score. This is a strong contest entry that should do well.
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reply by the author on 23-May-2022
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I love this poem!!!
As a violinist it speaks to my heart. You fantastic imagery is lyrical creating its own musical score. This is a strong contest entry that should do well.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 23-May-2022
reply by the author on 23-May-2022
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K.L. thank you very much!
Comment from Teri7
This is a very beautiful and very well written Nonet poem you have penned for the contest. You used very good descriptive words and very lovely imagery. Best wishes in the contest. Blessings, teri
reply by the author on 23-May-2022
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This is a very beautiful and very well written Nonet poem you have penned for the contest. You used very good descriptive words and very lovely imagery. Best wishes in the contest. Blessings, teri
Comment Written 23-May-2022
reply by the author on 23-May-2022
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Teri you are so sweet in giving this poem the validation of six-stars, thank you!