Heart Crafted Poems - 2022
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Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I'm loving the sentiment, but struggling with the flow here. the last stanza is my favourite, good luck with the contest, minute poems sound much better with iambic metre, although I know is is not a requirement for the contest, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2022
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I'm loving the sentiment, but struggling with the flow here. the last stanza is my favourite, good luck with the contest, minute poems sound much better with iambic metre, although I know is is not a requirement for the contest, love Dolly x
Comment Written 16-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2022
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thank you as I struggle forward I intend to live long enough to write the perfect iambic metered anything ...:)
Comment from Wendy G
A lovely poem about the advent of Spring in your area. An impressive photo to go with your poem. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
Note: "Warmed with sun's source" (need an apostrophe for singular possessive case).
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2022
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A lovely poem about the advent of Spring in your area. An impressive photo to go with your poem. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
Note: "Warmed with sun's source" (need an apostrophe for singular possessive case).
Comment Written 16-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2022
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Wendy thank you good catch...
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Good luck and smooth sailing. ..............................................................................................................................................................
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2022
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Good luck and smooth sailing. ..............................................................................................................................................................
Comment Written 15-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2022
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Roger that!
Comment from in777wr#
This is a well written poem. The poem reads, and flows well. The rhyming scheme is consistent throughout the poem. You syllable count is on point. Nice job.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2022
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This is a well written poem. The poem reads, and flows well. The rhyming scheme is consistent throughout the poem. You syllable count is on point. Nice job.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2022
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Thanks much
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You are welcome.
Comment from jessizero
I like all of your personifications. Thank you for writing this lovely poem of seasons and for choosing to share it here. Keep up the good work. Best wishes.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2022
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I like all of your personifications. Thank you for writing this lovely poem of seasons and for choosing to share it here. Keep up the good work. Best wishes.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2022
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Thanks Jessi
Comment from harmony13
The author's words are descriptive, clear, interesting and descriptive.
I especially like the last stanza especially the first line. Spring for me
is uplifting and something to look forward to. The poem flows and
connects well. The artwork is awesome and compliments this poem.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2022
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The author's words are descriptive, clear, interesting and descriptive.
I especially like the last stanza especially the first line. Spring for me
is uplifting and something to look forward to. The poem flows and
connects well. The artwork is awesome and compliments this poem.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2022
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Thanks much!
Comment from lyenochka
I like your traditional minute poem form and I especially like how your poet's eye always observes those changes in nature, allowing it to nurture the soul. Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2022
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I like your traditional minute poem form and I especially like how your poet's eye always observes those changes in nature, allowing it to nurture the soul. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 15-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2022
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I am grateful for your review.
Comment from RGstar
Just my thought, would not spring and sprung orchestrate the same stress point for the iambic meter? Meaning; should it not be stressed followed by unstressed?
This poem, regardless of what it is written in, as never judged by me, is a beautiful poem, and I had already made up my mind of the six star, before reading your notes informing it written in strict iambic meter. Then it has to be judged as written so. An apostrophe s could be also popped in there somewhere
I would never have guessed without looking deeply had you not stated it. Much of my writing is in iambic meter without me meaning it to be, because much of the way I write, naturally flows that way, so something written that way is perhaps familiar to my ear...and as I say, because something is written in Iambic meter does not mean the poem will be great, The poem has to written well, whatever the form.
This is a lovely poem, and I could have read much more of it. Well is it written. Just wondering about the first line of the iambic meter with ''
Spring sprung spritely.
Perhaps it is I that is uncertain.
All in all, beautiful writing.
Best wishes.
RG
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2022
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Just my thought, would not spring and sprung orchestrate the same stress point for the iambic meter? Meaning; should it not be stressed followed by unstressed?
This poem, regardless of what it is written in, as never judged by me, is a beautiful poem, and I had already made up my mind of the six star, before reading your notes informing it written in strict iambic meter. Then it has to be judged as written so. An apostrophe s could be also popped in there somewhere
I would never have guessed without looking deeply had you not stated it. Much of my writing is in iambic meter without me meaning it to be, because much of the way I write, naturally flows that way, so something written that way is perhaps familiar to my ear...and as I say, because something is written in Iambic meter does not mean the poem will be great, The poem has to written well, whatever the form.
This is a lovely poem, and I could have read much more of it. Well is it written. Just wondering about the first line of the iambic meter with ''
Spring sprung spritely.
Perhaps it is I that is uncertain.
All in all, beautiful writing.
Best wishes.
RG
Comment Written 15-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2022
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RG I am so truly grateful for your honest reflection and thoughts. I fail greatly with iambic meter, but alas, I fail forward always upright with a personal intention on living long enough to write the perfect iambic metered poem - preferably sonnet in this incarnation.
Comment from R.B.Bunn
This was fun. I always feel bad for the plants that bloom early only for winter to come back for one final round. Luckily they tend to be pretty resilient.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2022
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This was fun. I always feel bad for the plants that bloom early only for winter to come back for one final round. Luckily they tend to be pretty resilient.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2022
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RB thanks!
Comment from Carolyn Dooley
The poor plants were covered in snow. What a sight. I would hate to be a plant. Anyway, you have a great post. I like the picture, even though the poor plants do not. Mother nature knows how to throw curve balls sometimes. And the weather is so messing up from global warming.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2022
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The poor plants were covered in snow. What a sight. I would hate to be a plant. Anyway, you have a great post. I like the picture, even though the poor plants do not. Mother nature knows how to throw curve balls sometimes. And the weather is so messing up from global warming.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2022
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Thanks for the review.
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You are welcome.