Wonder Lust
A poem in abab quatrains65 total reviews
Comment from Pam (respa)
-A gorgeous photo
and nice presentation, Tony.
-A well written poem and
metaphor for the writing process.
-I like the first line about planting
"a ream of random words."
-The egret as a symbol is
effective, as the words seem
to fly away and cannot be
retrieved, like the fish the egret catches.
-Well done.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2020
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-A gorgeous photo
and nice presentation, Tony.
-A well written poem and
metaphor for the writing process.
-I like the first line about planting
"a ream of random words."
-The egret as a symbol is
effective, as the words seem
to fly away and cannot be
retrieved, like the fish the egret catches.
-Well done.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2020
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Thanks very much, Pam, for your review and supportive comments. I'm delighted that you enjoyed my metaphors. All good wishes, Tony
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You are very welcome, Tony.
Comment from lyenochka
Loved your beautiful poem. I never thought about writing in quite this way - an ornithologist's delight! Enjoyed your amazing metaphors which were transforming words into birds and back. If this were in a contest, I'm sure it would win!
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2020
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Loved your beautiful poem. I never thought about writing in quite this way - an ornithologist's delight! Enjoyed your amazing metaphors which were transforming words into birds and back. If this were in a contest, I'm sure it would win!
Comment Written 21-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2020
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Thanks so much for your kind words, Helen, and for your positive comments. Appreciated, as always. All good wishes, Tony.
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
I like this. It's very creative, clever, and very well thought out. This is skillful writing. You gazing upon the interaction of fish and fowl in the circle of life. I really like your descriptive and well placed wording that drinks in the scene beautifully. I like how you've expressed that this bird beginning to partake of the fish through its scales, that you're eyes were opened to the reality of it all. This is really good work and I enjoyed reading this inspirational and well written work. Great job and well done!
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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I like this. It's very creative, clever, and very well thought out. This is skillful writing. You gazing upon the interaction of fish and fowl in the circle of life. I really like your descriptive and well placed wording that drinks in the scene beautifully. I like how you've expressed that this bird beginning to partake of the fish through its scales, that you're eyes were opened to the reality of it all. This is really good work and I enjoyed reading this inspirational and well written work. Great job and well done!
Comment Written 20-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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Very many thanks for your most encouraging and supportive review, Jeffrey. I'm delighted that you enjoyed my poem. All good wishes, Tony
Comment from ~Dovey
Hi Tony -
This poem has so many layers! Once I've read it six more times I may be able to write a review worthy of reading it just once. I'm not sure whether to base my comments on how much I enjoyed the consonance of p and r in the first stanza or the imagery and metaphor you've sown throughout this poem. So, it is settled... it is a six, and that is that! :)
Thank you for sharing your Wonder Lust!
Kim
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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Hi Tony -
This poem has so many layers! Once I've read it six more times I may be able to write a review worthy of reading it just once. I'm not sure whether to base my comments on how much I enjoyed the consonance of p and r in the first stanza or the imagery and metaphor you've sown throughout this poem. So, it is settled... it is a six, and that is that! :)
Thank you for sharing your Wonder Lust!
Kim
Comment Written 20-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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Very many thanks for your most encouraging and supportive review, Kim. I'm delighted that you enjoyed my poem and thought it worth a sixth star. All good wishes, Tony
Comment from w.j.debi
This is clever. I like the metaphor of the birds and the seeds to ideas and writing. The take off in unexpected ways and sometimes they are hard to capture before they get away.
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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This is clever. I like the metaphor of the birds and the seeds to ideas and writing. The take off in unexpected ways and sometimes they are hard to capture before they get away.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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Very many thanks for your review, W.J. I'm delighted that you enjoyed my poem. All good wishes, Tony
Comment from royowen
I love the sheer irony in this beautifully composed poem Tony, there's a great mix of emotion that isn't what God may right, but then we are part of this swirling morass we call life. It's amazing that man stands astride creation, has a special place of stewardship, and yet will never flow, we endeavour to possess. Excellent language and and great rhyming, this is a beautifully composed mixture of ideology, well done Tony, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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I love the sheer irony in this beautifully composed poem Tony, there's a great mix of emotion that isn't what God may right, but then we are part of this swirling morass we call life. It's amazing that man stands astride creation, has a special place of stewardship, and yet will never flow, we endeavour to possess. Excellent language and and great rhyming, this is a beautifully composed mixture of ideology, well done Tony, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 20-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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Very many thanks for your most encouraging and supportive review, Roy. I'm delighted that you enjoyed my poem. All good wishes, Tony
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Most welcome
Comment from estory
You had some interesting images here of the birds eating the fish, pecking the seeds; and you allude that these fish and seeds are metaphors for poetry. So this is an interesting image of the creative process born out of this feast, or pecked clean through it, and you seem to end up in a barren world, a kind of writer's block, with the creativity dried up. It's like the poems or the creative process is consuming itself. Interesting. estory
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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You had some interesting images here of the birds eating the fish, pecking the seeds; and you allude that these fish and seeds are metaphors for poetry. So this is an interesting image of the creative process born out of this feast, or pecked clean through it, and you seem to end up in a barren world, a kind of writer's block, with the creativity dried up. It's like the poems or the creative process is consuming itself. Interesting. estory
Comment Written 20-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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Very many thanks for your review and analysis, estory. Much appreciated. All good wishes, Tony
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hello Tony. This is beautiful phrasing and elegant writing. I love the metaphors. I always like to find a sentence or line of note within the stands and it particularly strikes me. Here's the one from this poem: "With stealth I crept and with a net recaptured them"
Beautifully written.
Robert
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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Hello Tony. This is beautiful phrasing and elegant writing. I love the metaphors. I always like to find a sentence or line of note within the stands and it particularly strikes me. Here's the one from this poem: "With stealth I crept and with a net recaptured them"
Beautifully written.
Robert
Comment Written 20-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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Very many thanks for your most encouraging and supportive review, Robert. I'm delighted that you enjoyed my poem. All good wishes, Tony
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You're welcome
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello tfawcus
How nice to read your poem about birds. Smiles I'm also one.
I like your metaphors especially----
Beyond the prison bars they flew, and I gave chase.
I heard them sing from trees, their trills a waterfall
Gert
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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Hello tfawcus
How nice to read your poem about birds. Smiles I'm also one.
I like your metaphors especially----
Beyond the prison bars they flew, and I gave chase.
I heard them sing from trees, their trills a waterfall
Gert
Comment Written 20-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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Very many thanks for your supportive review, Gert. I'm delighted that you enjoyed my poem and thought it worth a sixth star. Much appreciated. All good wishes, Tony
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You are so welcome tfawcus
Gert
Comment from lance michaels
I, like you, love to watch birds doing what birds do best, and that is just being beautiful creatures of nature and entertaining us by their busy activities. A very enthralling poem!
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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I, like you, love to watch birds doing what birds do best, and that is just being beautiful creatures of nature and entertaining us by their busy activities. A very enthralling poem!
Comment Written 20-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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Very many thanks for your supportive review, Lance. I'm delighted that you enthralled by my poem. All good wishes, Tony