The Mystic Bridge
Fabulous Free Verse Club32 total reviews
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Wow! Superb poem. Love that last part:
for few have crossed,
and those . . .
never returned.
What lies in wait,
lurking
in the circling
miasma <-- Great word choice!
of gray vapor? <-- Great word choice!
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2019
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Wow! Superb poem. Love that last part:
for few have crossed,
and those . . .
never returned.
What lies in wait,
lurking
in the circling
miasma <-- Great word choice!
of gray vapor? <-- Great word choice!
Comment Written 23-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2019
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Thank you for this wonderful review. I'm so glad you like that part. I was hoping someone would notice that. 8-)
Comment from nancyjam
I love the imagery in your beautiful
free verse.
There is a mysterious quality conveyed by your
choice of words.Where does this bridge lead,
where those who cross it never return?
Heaven perhaps?
Nancy
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2019
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I love the imagery in your beautiful
free verse.
There is a mysterious quality conveyed by your
choice of words.Where does this bridge lead,
where those who cross it never return?
Heaven perhaps?
Nancy
Comment Written 23-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2019
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Exactly. I was hoping it would seen interpreted that way. Thank you so much.
Comment from Joan E.
What a perfect picture to parallel your title and theme! You have a fertile imagination to conjure up this bridge. I enjoyed your telling this mystery story in free verse. Cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2019
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What a perfect picture to parallel your title and theme! You have a fertile imagination to conjure up this bridge. I enjoyed your telling this mystery story in free verse. Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 23-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2019
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Thank you so much for this wonderful review. I truly appreciate it.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your ultra-concise, powerful poem vividly describes the mystery of the mist-enshrouded "bridge." I believe it is--could be--about uncertainty concerning what happens after death.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2019
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Your ultra-concise, powerful poem vividly describes the mystery of the mist-enshrouded "bridge." I believe it is--could be--about uncertainty concerning what happens after death.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2019
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It could be. I'm always interested to see each person's 'take' on a poem. Thank you for a great review.
Comment from James W. Reynolds
Nice work. I love the image you have created. I also like how the ending is vague. The bridge could lead to opportunity, disaster, or something else - though it has a nice ominous feel that suggests disaster more than opportunity.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2019
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Nice work. I love the image you have created. I also like how the ending is vague. The bridge could lead to opportunity, disaster, or something else - though it has a nice ominous feel that suggests disaster more than opportunity.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2019
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Thank you. Yes, I intended it to be a bit spooky. I'm glad you like it.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a great job creating suspense with your free verse bridge poem, Yvonne. Your picture choice is perfect for your well-chosen words. Your lines read smoothly with a great imagery. You leave readers wondering what's on the other side. I guess one will never know since those that cross over don't come back. Your poem leaves open much interpretation for readers to come up with themselves. I see touches of alliteration and consonance with against/mist. I like the way you have displayed your lines. Great job and thanks for sharing. Jan
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2019
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You did a great job creating suspense with your free verse bridge poem, Yvonne. Your picture choice is perfect for your well-chosen words. Your lines read smoothly with a great imagery. You leave readers wondering what's on the other side. I guess one will never know since those that cross over don't come back. Your poem leaves open much interpretation for readers to come up with themselves. I see touches of alliteration and consonance with against/mist. I like the way you have displayed your lines. Great job and thanks for sharing. Jan
Comment Written 23-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2019
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Thank you for this wonderful, lovely review. It is open for interpretation, and it's been interesting to see different views.
Comment from Miss Sherry
Nice mysterious poetry. Anything could be on the other side, but we will never know. Very well-written and a real puzzle. You did a fine job with this! I wish you the best in the challenge!
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2019
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Nice mysterious poetry. Anything could be on the other side, but we will never know. Very well-written and a real puzzle. You did a fine job with this! I wish you the best in the challenge!
Comment Written 23-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2019
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Thank you so much. I'm glad you found it mysterious.
Comment from Thomas Bowling
The gray vapor is smog and what lies on the other side of the bridge is Los Angles. People never return because they can't find the bridge again in all the smog.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2019
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The gray vapor is smog and what lies on the other side of the bridge is Los Angles. People never return because they can't find the bridge again in all the smog.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2019
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Hahahaha. Good one! Thank you.
Comment from LaRosa
I really enjoyed the creative and progressive process of leading your reader to see the transition of one life to another through the concept of being united by a bridge. Awesome.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2019
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I really enjoyed the creative and progressive process of leading your reader to see the transition of one life to another through the concept of being united by a bridge. Awesome.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2019
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Thank you for this lovely review. I appreciate it so much. I'm so happy you like it.
Comment from kiwijenny
Ooooooo inquiring minds want to know.
What is in the miasma of grey vapor ........? Ghosts, flotsam and jetsam or just a guy called Sam who's lost his flot and jet...or a girl...Sam
Brilliant poem
God bless
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2019
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Ooooooo inquiring minds want to know.
What is in the miasma of grey vapor ........? Ghosts, flotsam and jetsam or just a guy called Sam who's lost his flot and jet...or a girl...Sam
Brilliant poem
God bless
Comment Written 23-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2019
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Hahaha. What a delightful review. Thank you.