Your Last Night
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Comment from l.raven
HI Jeni, this just broke my heart....I am so sorry for your loss...and the way it happen...but there was nothing you could do...when God says it is our time...it is our time...I know you want to know what he wanted...but there is a reason why He didn't get through...I don't know what it was...but I believe God was protecting you from knowing...I have had three people die when I left the room...I didn't understand why at first...but it finally came to me God was doing that for a reason...I don't know why...to protect me...save me from being so hurt...I don't take death well...whatever it was...I now believe that...there was a reason...your son is right with you...if you believe in God...you believe in spirits...and his spirit is there...and you will see him again...he is a very handsome young man...a priceless picture...very well written...love Linda xxoo
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HI Jeni, this just broke my heart....I am so sorry for your loss...and the way it happen...but there was nothing you could do...when God says it is our time...it is our time...I know you want to know what he wanted...but there is a reason why He didn't get through...I don't know what it was...but I believe God was protecting you from knowing...I have had three people die when I left the room...I didn't understand why at first...but it finally came to me God was doing that for a reason...I don't know why...to protect me...save me from being so hurt...I don't take death well...whatever it was...I now believe that...there was a reason...your son is right with you...if you believe in God...you believe in spirits...and his spirit is there...and you will see him again...he is a very handsome young man...a priceless picture...very well written...love Linda xxoo
Comment Written 07-Feb-2017
Comment from Jumbo J
Hi Jeni,
what can one say, other than life is so cruel at times with no rhyme nor reason to the why's... yes, tears streamed, my heart broke and grieved along with you reading this very brave write.
I loved the music you chose to accompany your heart and Mickey's story... knowing the circumstances, it fitted perfectly.
I could write on and tell you of losses I have experienced through the evils of addiction.... but it is not your loss, even though I'm sure my tears are blended by all. A long time ago I made a pact to a higher power, or myself, that I would ingest the pain and suffering of others so that I would know of their pain... well I felt every crack of your heart in these words and the hollowed-out place in your stomach that still bares the loss.
Love to you and may the power of your resolve carry you through all the dark and lonely moments that have... and are yet to be.
POWERFUL!
BRAVE!
Thank you so much for sharing yours and Mickey's story.
With our thoughts we create,
unanswerable questions.
James vx's.
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Hi Jeni,
what can one say, other than life is so cruel at times with no rhyme nor reason to the why's... yes, tears streamed, my heart broke and grieved along with you reading this very brave write.
I loved the music you chose to accompany your heart and Mickey's story... knowing the circumstances, it fitted perfectly.
I could write on and tell you of losses I have experienced through the evils of addiction.... but it is not your loss, even though I'm sure my tears are blended by all. A long time ago I made a pact to a higher power, or myself, that I would ingest the pain and suffering of others so that I would know of their pain... well I felt every crack of your heart in these words and the hollowed-out place in your stomach that still bares the loss.
Love to you and may the power of your resolve carry you through all the dark and lonely moments that have... and are yet to be.
POWERFUL!
BRAVE!
Thank you so much for sharing yours and Mickey's story.
With our thoughts we create,
unanswerable questions.
James vx's.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2017
Comment from Teri7
Jeni, You did a beautiful job on this poem and tribute to your precious son that you lot way too soon! You and he look so much alike. A very handsome son. I am so sorry he had to go this way and you have to live with it my friend. Just know that he is at peace now! I love you my friend! Teri
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2017
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Jeni, You did a beautiful job on this poem and tribute to your precious son that you lot way too soon! You and he look so much alike. A very handsome son. I am so sorry he had to go this way and you have to live with it my friend. Just know that he is at peace now! I love you my friend! Teri
Comment Written 07-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2017
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Thank you so much, țeri.
I love you to. Yes, he looked just like me. Thanks for noticing.
Comment from Janet Foor
A horrific story Jeni. Sad and heartbreaking to read. I can't imagine the pain of the living through this emotionally draining story first hand. My heartfelt sympathy to your and your family.
Blessings
Janet
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A horrific story Jeni. Sad and heartbreaking to read. I can't imagine the pain of the living through this emotionally draining story first hand. My heartfelt sympathy to your and your family.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 06-Feb-2017
Comment from Alex Biasin
Wow.
That has to be one of the most emotional pieces of writing I have ever read.
The hurt and pain of loss comes through, along with the questioning of why?
Such a tragedy.
Sorry for your loss.
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Wow.
That has to be one of the most emotional pieces of writing I have ever read.
The hurt and pain of loss comes through, along with the questioning of why?
Such a tragedy.
Sorry for your loss.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2017
Comment from GWinterwin
Such a sad story in this poem. I cannot say I know how one would feel who went through this sort of thing because I have not. it has to be beyond heart breaking. I pray for you as you continue on, may God bless you with courage from above.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2017
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Such a sad story in this poem. I cannot say I know how one would feel who went through this sort of thing because I have not. it has to be beyond heart breaking. I pray for you as you continue on, may God bless you with courage from above.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2017
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My friend, I thank you for your supportive review. Yes, I will lean on my Creator for courage from above. Thank you for your support.
Comment from RGstar
I am giving you six stars. Its hard to put songs in and connect them simultaneous to the poem, not as easy as thought for it becomes two entities of thought instead of one...so didn't really work for me...but!
Your words written are the significant factor and how you touched me so. For I understand the questions, the not knowing, and the torment that follows you though perhaps in lesser forms.
I cant even begin to know where to start, which is unusual for me.
Only to say, dear Luna...I feel your pain and hope that, like any kind of pain, we endure and defeat it.
My best, dear friend.
RGstar
Such understanding for
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2017
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I am giving you six stars. Its hard to put songs in and connect them simultaneous to the poem, not as easy as thought for it becomes two entities of thought instead of one...so didn't really work for me...but!
Your words written are the significant factor and how you touched me so. For I understand the questions, the not knowing, and the torment that follows you though perhaps in lesser forms.
I cant even begin to know where to start, which is unusual for me.
Only to say, dear Luna...I feel your pain and hope that, like any kind of pain, we endure and defeat it.
My best, dear friend.
RGstar
Such understanding for
Comment Written 06-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2017
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Dear RG, thank you so much for the generous six-star review. The song, originally written by Trent Reznor of Nine Inch Nails, personifies to me the nature of addiction more than anything else. I'm sorry it didn't connect for you, but I'm really touched by your review of my poem. Thank you, you said quite enough, I appreciate the support, dear friend.
Comment from dmt1967
I am so sorry, my friend. Mother's are there to guide, to teach our children right from wrong. What they do with this information is up to them. I learnt that the hard way. Thank you for sharing and take care.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2017
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I am so sorry, my friend. Mother's are there to guide, to teach our children right from wrong. What they do with this information is up to them. I learnt that the hard way. Thank you for sharing and take care.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2017
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Thank you for your supportive review.
Comment from estory
This was really poignant. I think you really dug into the pain, the frustration of being a mother unable to help her child. The scene with your child doing drugs for the last time, far away from you, while you are unable to help him, put us right in the middle of this painful moment. brought it alive. All the questions unanswered captured the feelings of being torn from someone too soon, without knowing why. "Mothers are supposed to protect their children" digs up all your painful feeliings and confronts us with them. My condolensces, my friend estory
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2017
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This was really poignant. I think you really dug into the pain, the frustration of being a mother unable to help her child. The scene with your child doing drugs for the last time, far away from you, while you are unable to help him, put us right in the middle of this painful moment. brought it alive. All the questions unanswered captured the feelings of being torn from someone too soon, without knowing why. "Mothers are supposed to protect their children" digs up all your painful feeliings and confronts us with them. My condolensces, my friend estory
Comment Written 06-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2017
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Dear estory, I've not had a review that examined my poem quite ini the detailed way that you have, and I thank you for it. I loved reading it. I truly appreciate the awarding of the sixth star for the poem.
Comment from Lu Saluna
There is nothing to say to comfort your pain or lift the sorrow you are experiencing. Only time will take care of you and at your own pace. It is your process and I am so saddened by your loss. Our children are not supposed to pass before us. I pray that you keep writing about it, let the pain out, don't let the pressure build. You will help yourself and others.
Be gentle with yourself.
Hugs, Lu
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2017
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There is nothing to say to comfort your pain or lift the sorrow you are experiencing. Only time will take care of you and at your own pace. It is your process and I am so saddened by your loss. Our children are not supposed to pass before us. I pray that you keep writing about it, let the pain out, don't let the pressure build. You will help yourself and others.
Be gentle with yourself.
Hugs, Lu
Comment Written 06-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2017
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Thank you for your kind and loving, six-star review, Lu. I am honored and grateful. I will indeed try to take care of myself and keep writing about it. I don't keep the pain in anymore. I try to help others by the experience that I've had.
Love,
jeni