The Boy At The Sandcastle
First romance?26 total reviews
Comment from Nika2016
It is so beautiful and has all of my favorite ingredients...the sea, sandcastles, love and the ability to express thoughts mind to mind. I did this with a man from Chile as we transcended language barriers and understood every word in a philosophical conversation. Life holds its own secrets. Thank you for the story.
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2016
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It is so beautiful and has all of my favorite ingredients...the sea, sandcastles, love and the ability to express thoughts mind to mind. I did this with a man from Chile as we transcended language barriers and understood every word in a philosophical conversation. Life holds its own secrets. Thank you for the story.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2016
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Hi Nika,! Yes, sometimes words are unnecessary. So happy you got the soul of this writing. A blessing to exchange lines with you. Abrazos!
Comment from Bryana
I love your story! He probably grew up to be a very nice man.
It's a pity you didn't find each other again.
It was very well written, you are eager to read it and what is
goi8ng to happen and maybe he was your first husband!
Its' a lovely entry to the contest,. I wish you good luck.
Un abrazo
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2016
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I love your story! He probably grew up to be a very nice man.
It's a pity you didn't find each other again.
It was very well written, you are eager to read it and what is
goi8ng to happen and maybe he was your first husband!
Its' a lovely entry to the contest,. I wish you good luck.
Un abrazo
Comment Written 08-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2016
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Thank you querida amiguita. Hugs and kisses to you.
Comment from lightink
Wow! That is such a moving and innocent story about connecting in a very deep way! I am touched by the love and the openness - and you two barely had to talk! What a sweet story! And I love your conclusion - still wondering if he remembers!
So romantic!
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2016
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Wow! That is such a moving and innocent story about connecting in a very deep way! I am touched by the love and the openness - and you two barely had to talk! What a sweet story! And I love your conclusion - still wondering if he remembers!
So romantic!
Comment Written 08-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2016
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Thank you so much!
Comment from Unspoken94
Oh, amada, you make us all want to go back to that beach.
Most of us have been there and can relate so easily to your
story. Mine wasn't a beach, but I still had the memory of that
first romance.
Just one spag. I think it's the beginning of the ninth paragraph.
Drop the "d" in exchange. This was such a heart touching story. -Bill
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2016
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Oh, amada, you make us all want to go back to that beach.
Most of us have been there and can relate so easily to your
story. Mine wasn't a beach, but I still had the memory of that
first romance.
Just one spag. I think it's the beginning of the ninth paragraph.
Drop the "d" in exchange. This was such a heart touching story. -Bill
Comment Written 07-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2016
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Thank you, Bill, for reading my work and for the spag correction. Yes, those special sweet memories are so precious. Best memories to you as well.
Comment from Joan E.
I just read two poems involving sandcastles--I like the serendipity of your sharing a prose piece involving them as well. More coincidences: I grew up in a similar environment, where children were to be seen and not heard, and like you followed my own ideas, which I too continue to do today. Thank you for sharing your lovely memories of sweet innocence--I am certain the friend from your past has parallel flashbacks. Best wishes in the contest- Joan
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2016
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I just read two poems involving sandcastles--I like the serendipity of your sharing a prose piece involving them as well. More coincidences: I grew up in a similar environment, where children were to be seen and not heard, and like you followed my own ideas, which I too continue to do today. Thank you for sharing your lovely memories of sweet innocence--I am certain the friend from your past has parallel flashbacks. Best wishes in the contest- Joan
Comment Written 07-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2016
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Dear Joan. So nice what you say in here...maybe he still remember those times as well.
Comment from damommy
What a lovely story. I can relate quite well, being an only child myself.
It was a magical summer for you, and now you have good memories. I love the way you related all this.
Perfect photo.
Thank you for sharing. 8-)
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2016
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What a lovely story. I can relate quite well, being an only child myself.
It was a magical summer for you, and now you have good memories. I love the way you related all this.
Perfect photo.
Thank you for sharing. 8-)
Comment Written 07-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2016
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Thank you for the delightful review to this boy of my young youth. Lovely!
Comment from reconciled
that is one of the most beautiful stories I've ever heard.
and why not....? you built together, bounded in its hurry. "with out" words spoken...just a nod and a smile. "out of the mouths of babes"....does truth turn real. -smile-....love Michael
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2016
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that is one of the most beautiful stories I've ever heard.
and why not....? you built together, bounded in its hurry. "with out" words spoken...just a nod and a smile. "out of the mouths of babes"....does truth turn real. -smile-....love Michael
Comment Written 07-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2016
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Really Michael! How lovely that you found this work. Thank you for the stars
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so you do remember me...-smile-
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Michael, I remember you wrote a song for me inspired by a song from my native language. That means a world to me...it brings tears to me eyes!
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no tears for Happy...-smile-
Comment from michaelcahill
There's no question he remembers you. No doubt he has the same thoughts and feelings regarding you as well.
This was just beautiful and touching and hit me exactly where I wanted to be hit. Nine or ten is old enough to already be who we are. I honestly don't feel much different now then I did then. I'm know more and there were obvious changes, but an encounter like that would affect me the same way it would now and thus the very strong connection to this story. Just lovely. Thanks so much for sharing. mikey
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2016
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There's no question he remembers you. No doubt he has the same thoughts and feelings regarding you as well.
This was just beautiful and touching and hit me exactly where I wanted to be hit. Nine or ten is old enough to already be who we are. I honestly don't feel much different now then I did then. I'm know more and there were obvious changes, but an encounter like that would affect me the same way it would now and thus the very strong connection to this story. Just lovely. Thanks so much for sharing. mikey
Comment Written 07-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2016
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Thank you Mikey for this lovely review, specially for "There's no question he remembers you." We were akin in spirit already. Your comments Made My Day!
Comment from patcelaw
Amada, this is a delightful story. My first love I still remember, his name was Dale and when there was a 4H meeting at our home, Dale and I would sit behind the stove in the living room and holds hand and he even kissed me. Now that was over 71 years ago. Patricia
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2016
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Amada, this is a delightful story. My first love I still remember, his name was Dale and when there was a 4H meeting at our home, Dale and I would sit behind the stove in the living room and holds hand and he even kissed me. Now that was over 71 years ago. Patricia
Comment Written 07-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2016
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Thank you Patricia for sharing your love story as well. Kissing! And you still remember after 71 years! Lovely, tell us more...
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There is really a not a lot more to tell other than he kissed me and I thought he was a cute one with natural curly hair.
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There is really a not a lot more to tell other than he kissed me and I thought he was a cute one with natural curly hair.
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi, Amada
= Lovely story.
= One shall always go back and build sandcastles.
= Nostalgia and what could have been sometimes can nourish the saddened soul.
= Good luck in the contest. A very powerful entry.
* Cheers & Blessings *
Keep Smilin'... Jackie/Jax (*>*)
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2016
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Hi, Amada
= Lovely story.
= One shall always go back and build sandcastles.
= Nostalgia and what could have been sometimes can nourish the saddened soul.
= Good luck in the contest. A very powerful entry.
* Cheers & Blessings *
Keep Smilin'... Jackie/Jax (*>*)
Comment Written 07-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2016
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Thank you Jax!