To Cherish Thorns
Viewing comments for Chapter 65 "And Sometimes You Just Fall In Love"Free Verse Poetry
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Comment from amada
It seems to me this is a very truthful love declaration. Congratulations. I love what you say in here. I like the best this line "words can lie." But when those words are written up they take a part of our heart with them. I wish you the best.
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2015
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It seems to me this is a very truthful love declaration. Congratulations. I love what you say in here. I like the best this line "words can lie." But when those words are written up they take a part of our heart with them. I wish you the best.
Comment Written 28-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2015
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"But when those words are written up they take a part of our heart with them"
Wow. That is so beautifully said. I'm so pleased you enjoyed. Thank you so much. mikey
Comment from Realist101
OH boy. I did a few years ago. Only to be hurt. Lol! I'm TOO DANG OLD FOR IT. :D But, even at an old age, we can still love and be hurt. That's life. I live with it. And I hope your poem is for real and you find someone really great Mikey. If it's just a poem it's purely beautiful and should be saved for future reference. Suse
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2015
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OH boy. I did a few years ago. Only to be hurt. Lol! I'm TOO DANG OLD FOR IT. :D But, even at an old age, we can still love and be hurt. That's life. I live with it. And I hope your poem is for real and you find someone really great Mikey. If it's just a poem it's purely beautiful and should be saved for future reference. Suse
Comment Written 27-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2015
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It indeed can happen at any age and the feeling is just as silly and all encompassing as it is in high school. :))
Can't reveal if it's true, but it would be hard to make up something this good wouldn't it!! Ha! Thank you so much and for all the stars, maybe I can use them tonight!! mikey
Comment from Sefiros
You isolate some words after every stanza. If you're not going to make them part of the previous stanza, then perhaps capitalizing them is in order (make them more "important.") But yeah: love can just be that way sometimes. Nice job.
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reply by the author on 30-Nov-2015
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You isolate some words after every stanza. If you're not going to make them part of the previous stanza, then perhaps capitalizing them is in order (make them more "important.") But yeah: love can just be that way sometimes. Nice job.
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Comment Written 27-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2015
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Capitalizing them is not a good idea. They stand out by being isolated. You should make it a point to study poetry a bit. Read some of the reviews for this piece for instance. More knowledge of poetic devices such as alliteration, rhyme, meter and the like will help you better assess a piece. Pleased you enjoyed this though. mikey
Comment from reconciled
perhaps when you first arrived ....i'm not sure anymore...-headshake- ...ahhh the long hair, the word placement, maybe the genius presentation...who knows, who cares...but when I heard the voice I...i knew....ya know...I never thought ...I' could...I'd feel this way...oh its so confusing...lets not examine it too closely though, for fear the beauty found in this moment tarnish even aura giftwrapped in...love you too Bro -wink-
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2015
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perhaps when you first arrived ....i'm not sure anymore...-headshake- ...ahhh the long hair, the word placement, maybe the genius presentation...who knows, who cares...but when I heard the voice I...i knew....ya know...I never thought ...I' could...I'd feel this way...oh its so confusing...lets not examine it too closely though, for fear the beauty found in this moment tarnish even aura giftwrapped in...love you too Bro -wink-
Comment Written 27-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2015
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Ha! I think you have an idea where presentation came to my mind. :)) Pleased you enjoyed. It pays to seek out inspired influences, yes? Thank you kindly. Love back at ya. mikey
Comment from I am Cat
WEll, you've done it again...
and why not? Like Craig said (CD Richards)... everyone falls for Mikey... even those who don't bend that way. LOL It's your persona. ;)
and it's words like these:
'sometimes boys are reached just like that
before the more foolish parts of them
can speak'
But they have to remember... you're no boy... you're a grown man, one who knows what he's doing. ;)
Yeah... no boy, though there is a boy and a girl in all of us, I suppose. One that longs to get out.
You've been 'smart' here and named no one, actually, you've not even said you have a crush... just that it can happen. lol
the song is lovely... yes, a bit heavy on the high notes... the recording lacks a little to be desired, but you can tell that the voice is just so lovely. Hard not to fall for that.
;)
Well done, a six any day... but two days from now would have been better for me. LOL
I loved it.
She does too.
Cat
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2015
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WEll, you've done it again...
and why not? Like Craig said (CD Richards)... everyone falls for Mikey... even those who don't bend that way. LOL It's your persona. ;)
and it's words like these:
'sometimes boys are reached just like that
before the more foolish parts of them
can speak'
But they have to remember... you're no boy... you're a grown man, one who knows what he's doing. ;)
Yeah... no boy, though there is a boy and a girl in all of us, I suppose. One that longs to get out.
You've been 'smart' here and named no one, actually, you've not even said you have a crush... just that it can happen. lol
the song is lovely... yes, a bit heavy on the high notes... the recording lacks a little to be desired, but you can tell that the voice is just so lovely. Hard not to fall for that.
;)
Well done, a six any day... but two days from now would have been better for me. LOL
I loved it.
She does too.
Cat
Comment Written 27-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2015
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I've been told I'm a grown man before, but usually when I'm doing something a grown man probably shouldn't be doing according to the grown man handbook! As far as knowing what I'm doing, well, it behooves me I suppose to let that go unchallenged, yes?
A declaration of six worthiness is just as good. Thank you so much. Pleased you find the voice to your liking. It is rather traumatic to post that to be honest. I know the sound quality is awful, but it's all I have. I DO sound better than that. mikey
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Oh I believe you, my dear boy... I believe you. ;)
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Unfortunately, I can't seem to get the sound on here, I am missing out big time. I love this poem, Mikey, it is so romantic. I think at some time in our lives, we all have a secret crush on someone, and why not as we grow older. The thing is, whoever it is doesn't need to know, so they don't know how old or young we are, for me, it would be an old lady's very secret crush. And yes, I have one too. :) I did enjoy reading this free verse poem, my friend, not too long, either! Good luck in the contest! xsx Sandra
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2015
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Unfortunately, I can't seem to get the sound on here, I am missing out big time. I love this poem, Mikey, it is so romantic. I think at some time in our lives, we all have a secret crush on someone, and why not as we grow older. The thing is, whoever it is doesn't need to know, so they don't know how old or young we are, for me, it would be an old lady's very secret crush. And yes, I have one too. :) I did enjoy reading this free verse poem, my friend, not too long, either! Good luck in the contest! xsx Sandra
Comment Written 27-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2015
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Hi. Thank you so much. It seems here that it would be inevitable with all are hearts and souls poured out for all to see AND seen by people who know what they're looking at!! Since you couldn't here the sound, I can only tell you that it was FABULOUS! HAHAHA!!! Thank you so much. Glad you enjoyed. Crushes are fun at any age and they always feel the same in spite of our aches and pains, yes? mikey
Comment from c_lucas
One cannot always control the direction of one's heart or one's emotions. This is the case in point. Your post is very well written, making for a good read.
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2015
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One cannot always control the direction of one's heart or one's emotions. This is the case in point. Your post is very well written, making for a good read.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2015
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Thank you kindly. Indeed, not a bit under control. :)) mikey
Comment from Ekim777
I prefer your pictures to your sound. The radiate a warmth beyond love. Call it loneliness and then words sneak in with their mischief and deception all fuelled by our projections. Those who quickly fall in love, quickly fall out of it too. That's what prompted a poet to say;" All men kill the things they love..." It is such a nebulous thing, why try to define it. -Ekim777
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2015
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I prefer your pictures to your sound. The radiate a warmth beyond love. Call it loneliness and then words sneak in with their mischief and deception all fuelled by our projections. Those who quickly fall in love, quickly fall out of it too. That's what prompted a poet to say;" All men kill the things they love..." It is such a nebulous thing, why try to define it. -Ekim777
Comment Written 27-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2015
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Very wise words and appreciated observations. Thank you kindly. mikey
Comment from Lovinia
Hi Mikey
OK I'm in melt-down ... just let me recover! Not tooo long at all ... long enough for me to go all gooey. :))) What a shame about the sound quality, though this is a little clearer than the last one. WOW! Sign him up Geffen! I would really love to hear you recoded in a proper studio Mikey. What a wealth of talent. A true Renaissance man! OK .... and that's just the music and your voice. :)))
Of course the presentation is stunning! Your words are even more so ... I can see why all the girls love Mikey. Shucks will all the entries in this contest be about you ... in secret of course? :)) Your poetic style here is unique and all your own. Full of poetic technique which I don't need to point out to you. I admire your work, yet this is what I like best to read.
"pure and simple strands of truth
that weave into a tapestry" --- of special note.
Well, this is surely a contender for top placement. I wish you the best of luck. Hugs - Lovi xoxo Ten stars ********** ... more ....
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2015
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Hi Mikey
OK I'm in melt-down ... just let me recover! Not tooo long at all ... long enough for me to go all gooey. :))) What a shame about the sound quality, though this is a little clearer than the last one. WOW! Sign him up Geffen! I would really love to hear you recoded in a proper studio Mikey. What a wealth of talent. A true Renaissance man! OK .... and that's just the music and your voice. :)))
Of course the presentation is stunning! Your words are even more so ... I can see why all the girls love Mikey. Shucks will all the entries in this contest be about you ... in secret of course? :)) Your poetic style here is unique and all your own. Full of poetic technique which I don't need to point out to you. I admire your work, yet this is what I like best to read.
"pure and simple strands of truth
that weave into a tapestry" --- of special note.
Well, this is surely a contender for top placement. I wish you the best of luck. Hugs - Lovi xoxo Ten stars ********** ... more ....
Comment Written 27-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2015
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You make me blush. :))
I'm so pleased you enjoyed. I will go ahead and believe every word of this and enjoy my world of make believe. LOL
This was sooooo much fun wasn't it? I know there is all kinds of truth running through most of these. A couple are a little scary. HAHAHA!!! See ya in the secret booth. Oh, and the voter booth too. :))))) mikey
Comment from Nosha17
Ha, I miss your rhyming. When I first joined you only wrote in rhyme. Your prerogative, of course. Well expressed thoughts on your secret crush. Love can be superficial, the enduring one is not superficial, it surpasses all other. I enjoyed your music-a real poet is also able to sing or play music, you prove that by your writing and artistic talents. I am a singer and pianist and music hopefully fills my poetry. Well chosen words of affection. Good luck in the contest. faye
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2015
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Ha, I miss your rhyming. When I first joined you only wrote in rhyme. Your prerogative, of course. Well expressed thoughts on your secret crush. Love can be superficial, the enduring one is not superficial, it surpasses all other. I enjoyed your music-a real poet is also able to sing or play music, you prove that by your writing and artistic talents. I am a singer and pianist and music hopefully fills my poetry. Well chosen words of affection. Good luck in the contest. faye
Comment Written 27-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2015
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Oh, that's because I was learning iambic. :)) This has tons of rhyme. All internal though. So pleased you enjoyed. This was a fun little contest, sure to spread some rumors. :)) mikey