To Cherish Thorns
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Comment from dragonpoet
This is a well written free verse poem that seems to say the opposite. A stone that rolls in a roiling river is trying to get free of the moss. While the stone once it lands on the beach and dries off sheds its covering. Maybe now it can see and contemplate the butterflies mentioned in the poem.
Maybe sometimes our minds need to be freed from the moss of old problems and memories rolling around in them.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
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This is a well written free verse poem that seems to say the opposite. A stone that rolls in a roiling river is trying to get free of the moss. While the stone once it lands on the beach and dries off sheds its covering. Maybe now it can see and contemplate the butterflies mentioned in the poem.
Maybe sometimes our minds need to be freed from the moss of old problems and memories rolling around in them.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 29-Oct-2015
Comment from BOO ghost
My favorite quatrain:
I see a bend in the river
and make my escape
rolling ever on it seems
the moss fades as do the
memories of it growing
Unique and creative, anything short of six is unsat. Count your doubloon
BOO
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My favorite quatrain:
I see a bend in the river
and make my escape
rolling ever on it seems
the moss fades as do the
memories of it growing
Unique and creative, anything short of six is unsat. Count your doubloon
BOO
Comment Written 29-Oct-2015
Comment from Dean Kuch
A very...interesting and unique take on that age old saying, "A rolling stone gathers no moss.", Michael. We, as men, never like to hear the word "No!" in the bedroom. Unless it's an answer to the wife's question concerning her latest pair of blue jeans.
"Mike, do think these jeans make my butt look fat?"
"No babe...of course not. No way."
My favorite stanzas were the final two:
"I find myself alone
in the sand
nothing grows on me here
nothing binds me
I've found what I sought
and endless time
to contemplate it"
Freedom. It's such a liberating feeling, is it not?
Well done, Michael.
Good luck in the booth.
~Dean
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A very...interesting and unique take on that age old saying, "A rolling stone gathers no moss.", Michael. We, as men, never like to hear the word "No!" in the bedroom. Unless it's an answer to the wife's question concerning her latest pair of blue jeans.
"Mike, do think these jeans make my butt look fat?"
"No babe...of course not. No way."
My favorite stanzas were the final two:
"I find myself alone
in the sand
nothing grows on me here
nothing binds me
I've found what I sought
and endless time
to contemplate it"
Freedom. It's such a liberating feeling, is it not?
Well done, Michael.
Good luck in the booth.
~Dean
Comment Written 29-Oct-2015
Comment from Eric1
Hi Mikey, this is a wonderful and well presented entry for this particular competition, written in free verse it explains beautifully why a rolling stone gathers no moss, I wish you the very best of luck in the contest my friend.
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Hi Mikey, this is a wonderful and well presented entry for this particular competition, written in free verse it explains beautifully why a rolling stone gathers no moss, I wish you the very best of luck in the contest my friend.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2015
Comment from Lovinia
Hi Mikey
This poem is fabulous. I really like your free verse style. You make a great argument for flipping the moss and making a dash for the leap of faith. LOL :))
Brilliant presentation. No moss growing there.
"the stillness of the river
stirs the butterflies
inside this stone
alone
amongst the many
the clinging has already begun
the moss grows"
A great lead-in verse. I love the "butterflies" stirring ... so difficult to step out from the status quo ... one does have to be prepared to go it alone.
"I leap for the current
even as I hear the cries of
"NO!"
and sure, maybe a whisper or two
regrets my absence
but it's the space and the buttress
that most bemoan" --- wow! I love this verse, I selected my favourite two. I can see little Mikey Stone take that leap ... SPLASH! I do think you should have taken your sunglasses with you. :))
Seriously, it takes courage to jump away from the herd, or that pile of rocks. To not be swayed by the pack. Aloneness is the price ... a terrifying fear for most herd animals. Many think aloneness means lonely. AHHH ... to think without all the chatter. A brilliant piece which well deserves the six I do not have. A definite contender for the WIN. I wish you the best of luck. Hugs - Lovi xoxo
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Hi Mikey
This poem is fabulous. I really like your free verse style. You make a great argument for flipping the moss and making a dash for the leap of faith. LOL :))
Brilliant presentation. No moss growing there.
"the stillness of the river
stirs the butterflies
inside this stone
alone
amongst the many
the clinging has already begun
the moss grows"
A great lead-in verse. I love the "butterflies" stirring ... so difficult to step out from the status quo ... one does have to be prepared to go it alone.
"I leap for the current
even as I hear the cries of
"NO!"
and sure, maybe a whisper or two
regrets my absence
but it's the space and the buttress
that most bemoan" --- wow! I love this verse, I selected my favourite two. I can see little Mikey Stone take that leap ... SPLASH! I do think you should have taken your sunglasses with you. :))
Seriously, it takes courage to jump away from the herd, or that pile of rocks. To not be swayed by the pack. Aloneness is the price ... a terrifying fear for most herd animals. Many think aloneness means lonely. AHHH ... to think without all the chatter. A brilliant piece which well deserves the six I do not have. A definite contender for the WIN. I wish you the best of luck. Hugs - Lovi xoxo
Comment Written 29-Oct-2015
Comment from lightink
This was a pretty painful reminder that I'm a foreigner - I actually had to look up this one :(! (Slightly ashamed.)
Anyways, I loved how you embodied the longing for freedom, to shake off the ties of conventions, expectations and habits. The exhilaration of the risk taking was present along with a sense of solitude - both among the other 'rocks' and then, after breaking free.
Beautifully written poem, Michael!
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This was a pretty painful reminder that I'm a foreigner - I actually had to look up this one :(! (Slightly ashamed.)
Anyways, I loved how you embodied the longing for freedom, to shake off the ties of conventions, expectations and habits. The exhilaration of the risk taking was present along with a sense of solitude - both among the other 'rocks' and then, after breaking free.
Beautifully written poem, Michael!
Comment Written 29-Oct-2015
Comment from reconciled
let's see...no...there's got to be something...ew yea yea right there...no no...shit....yea...i guess this is okay Cahill...........-smile- ah haha...marvelous write Bro. You rock the Kaseasbeh....love michael
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let's see...no...there's got to be something...ew yea yea right there...no no...shit....yea...i guess this is okay Cahill...........-smile- ah haha...marvelous write Bro. You rock the Kaseasbeh....love michael
Comment Written 29-Oct-2015
Comment from I am Cat
Listen to me... are you listening? I'm not kissing your ass, ok? Seriously... listen to me... THIS is amazing. I was literally easing forward toward the screen as I read...
Where is he going?
Wherever he's going, whatever he's saying, I'm following him. LOL
Do you know how powerful your words are?
Do you? You have an innate charisma and spirit that people NEED to connect to... or maybe it's me. LOL
Either way, I'm actually drawn to your words, and completely hang on the words that you write.. .I SEE myself in them.
THAT is the ultimate compliment that i can pay you.
I was IN.
You know the saying, "You had me at Hello"...
you did.
you had me at hello.
you had me here:
the stillness of the river
stirs the butterflies
inside this stone
alone
amongst the many
the clinging has already begun
and moss grows...
so I went back... 'stirs the butterflies'?
really?
butterflies inside a stone..?
wait...
so i went back again
and by the time I got to : The clinging has already begun...
I was hooked.
and I GOT it.
I GET it.
I have it.
yeah. and i just needed you to know that.
Words are powerful.
YOUR words are especially powerful when I read them. i'm reading your free verse poems... and yeah... this is powerful.
A collaboration is in order. ;)
wow.
When I saw this contest, I didn't dream this.
so you've taken me on a different path.
this contest just rose to another echelon.
VERY well done.
Bravo.
I have a lot to learn.
I'm watching. ;)
Cat
(by virtue of the fact that I have no more)
a VIRTUAL SIX
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Listen to me... are you listening? I'm not kissing your ass, ok? Seriously... listen to me... THIS is amazing. I was literally easing forward toward the screen as I read...
Where is he going?
Wherever he's going, whatever he's saying, I'm following him. LOL
Do you know how powerful your words are?
Do you? You have an innate charisma and spirit that people NEED to connect to... or maybe it's me. LOL
Either way, I'm actually drawn to your words, and completely hang on the words that you write.. .I SEE myself in them.
THAT is the ultimate compliment that i can pay you.
I was IN.
You know the saying, "You had me at Hello"...
you did.
you had me at hello.
you had me here:
the stillness of the river
stirs the butterflies
inside this stone
alone
amongst the many
the clinging has already begun
and moss grows...
so I went back... 'stirs the butterflies'?
really?
butterflies inside a stone..?
wait...
so i went back again
and by the time I got to : The clinging has already begun...
I was hooked.
and I GOT it.
I GET it.
I have it.
yeah. and i just needed you to know that.
Words are powerful.
YOUR words are especially powerful when I read them. i'm reading your free verse poems... and yeah... this is powerful.
A collaboration is in order. ;)
wow.
When I saw this contest, I didn't dream this.
so you've taken me on a different path.
this contest just rose to another echelon.
VERY well done.
Bravo.
I have a lot to learn.
I'm watching. ;)
Cat
(by virtue of the fact that I have no more)
a VIRTUAL SIX
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Comment Written 29-Oct-2015
Comment from Realist101
Hey Michael, good job! I couldn't think of ONE thing for this contest. Sigh...must be a senior thing. But I enjoyed this and always admire those who go against the flow! No pun intended. I have been swimming upstream all my life. Just can't seem to find a safe shore. :)
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Hey Michael, good job! I couldn't think of ONE thing for this contest. Sigh...must be a senior thing. But I enjoyed this and always admire those who go against the flow! No pun intended. I have been swimming upstream all my life. Just can't seem to find a safe shore. :)
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Comment Written 29-Oct-2015