Comment from Nosha17

Excellent

He may look a bit odd with that hairdo, but you might be right, he says some quite sensible things when you weed out the daft stuff. Well chosen tongue-in cheek words and message. Great picture. Good luck in the contest. Faye

 Comment Written 15-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 15-Aug-2015

Thanks Faye for having a read and giving me feedback and for your good luck wishes Cheers

Comment from Jackarrie

Excellent

Hi
this senryu is priceless, I cannot see many being offended. the subtle word included is clever and hilarious. The satori line is great

Should he COMB over

Good luck in the contest. Mary

 Comment Written 15-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 15-Aug-2015

Thanks Mary for your great review and comments ,Sometimes. I just can't help myself and he does lend himself to a bit of satire. With thanks and Cheers

Comment from Mary H-W

Excellent

That is rather funny, (I'm Canadian). So Trump's fame stretches far and wide, i see.
I like the poem, it meets the rules and the picture fits very well.
Good luck in the prompt vote.

 Comment Written 15-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 15-Aug-2015

Thanks Mary for reading and comments much appreciated Glad you like the picture as well Cheers

Comment from Jeanie Mercer

Excellent

This is a clever writing, but I wanted to mention that the prompt here specifies a 5-7-5 syllable senryu. This one is 7-5-7, which would probably get bounced by the judging committee. There's still about three hours left before the contest closes, if you want to change it. Good luck, Jeanie Mercer
(P.S. I see this has been changed and have changed my rating.)

 Comment Written 14-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 14-Aug-2015

Hi Jeanie thanks for your review and I have already changed to to a 5-7-5 ( based on my first review) so hopefully it is right now but would appreciate it if you could re check for me Cheers

reply by Jeanie Mercer on 15-Aug-2015

I see you have changed to 5-7-5 count, and I have changed my rating to 5 stars. Glad you got this done!

reply by the author on 15-Aug-2015

Hi Jeanie , yes always try to meet requirements and thanks for letting me know and also for changing your rating I would still have been happy with 4 stars but thanks anyway Cheers

Comment from ravenblack

Excellent

Though I do detest Trump and though your senryu displays wit, you need to pay attention to the contest rules. Your senryu should be 5-7-5 and yours is 7-5-7. Should you fix it, I would be happy to change the rating.

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 Comment Written 14-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 14-Aug-2015

Thanks Ravenblack for you observant eyes I though I had it right so thanks for letting me know my brain just went into 7 -5-7 mode I will see if I can change it much appreciated your comments Cheers

reply by the author on 14-Aug-2015

Thanks Ravenblack for you observant eyes I though I had it right so thanks for letting me know my brain just went into 7 -5-7 mode I will see if I can change it much appreciated your comments Cheers

reply by the author on 15-Aug-2015

Hi Ravenblack I have changed this based on your review so thanks for that I hope the edited one is Ok, not after changed rating just wanted to let you know I listened cheers once again