Loving life
Quatrains philosophy poem22 total reviews
Comment from Tomes Johnston
This is yet another interesting poem that the author has created with this piece of work. This is all about change. We all have to face change in our lives. We nudt learn to embrace it.
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2014
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This is yet another interesting poem that the author has created with this piece of work. This is all about change. We all have to face change in our lives. We nudt learn to embrace it.
Comment Written 16-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2014
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VEry true change and attitude. I appreciate your review. Mary
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My pleasure
Comment from krys123
Mary;
progressive alliteration in "created change"-"loving life", sincere annotated commentary, superb rhyming couplets that are neither forced nor labored, enjoyable imagination that is creative and inventive, outstanding picture that represents and complements your poem(I believe it represents freedom and liveliness) and outstanding romanticism for your love of life and the freedom and loving it.
These all the qualities I've obtained from reading is excellent written poem. Thank you so much for sharing this with me and everyone else for was a very enjoyable read.
Alex
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2014
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Mary;
progressive alliteration in "created change"-"loving life", sincere annotated commentary, superb rhyming couplets that are neither forced nor labored, enjoyable imagination that is creative and inventive, outstanding picture that represents and complements your poem(I believe it represents freedom and liveliness) and outstanding romanticism for your love of life and the freedom and loving it.
These all the qualities I've obtained from reading is excellent written poem. Thank you so much for sharing this with me and everyone else for was a very enjoyable read.
Alex
Comment Written 16-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2014
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Thanks Alex for the wonderful review and your great comments. I do appreciate it. Mary
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You are indeed and sincerely welcome Mary.
Alex.
Comment from Joan E.
You certainly come across in your writing as someone who loves life. We have all had negative experiences in our past, and I am glad yours have not kept you from creating change and enjoying nature. I admired your rhymed quatrains and minimalist style. The flamenco dancer embodies the "zest" you reference. Smiles- Joan
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2014
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You certainly come across in your writing as someone who loves life. We have all had negative experiences in our past, and I am glad yours have not kept you from creating change and enjoying nature. I admired your rhymed quatrains and minimalist style. The flamenco dancer embodies the "zest" you reference. Smiles- Joan
Comment Written 16-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2014
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Thank you Joan for this excellent review. Mary
Comment from kiwisteveh
Mary, your first stanza makes a strong statement about your new philosophy of life, living it to the full.
You second stanza confuses me - if you were considered 'unsurpassed' then why were you so unhappy?
The first two lines of stanza 3 work well as a climax to your piece, but then the final two lines are even more confusing as you seem to introduce two new themes: this fountain of youth - not mentioned previously and then the reference to nature, also not mentioned before.
I feel the poem would be stronger if you dropped those last two lines altogether.
Steve
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reply by the author on 17-Nov-2014
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Mary, your first stanza makes a strong statement about your new philosophy of life, living it to the full.
You second stanza confuses me - if you were considered 'unsurpassed' then why were you so unhappy?
The first two lines of stanza 3 work well as a climax to your piece, but then the final two lines are even more confusing as you seem to introduce two new themes: this fountain of youth - not mentioned previously and then the reference to nature, also not mentioned before.
I feel the poem would be stronger if you dropped those last two lines altogether.
Steve
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Comment Written 16-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2014
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Sorry Steve you find my poem confusing and My first stanza is saying how I find life wonderful.
My second stanza shares the pain of the past.
The third stanza show how I changed my attitude and my life
I suffer pain every day from surgeries, and other ailments. I had depressions in the past. Now I manage with my health limitations to really love life and to enjoy the activities I can.
Thanks for your review I hope it comes clear to you now. Mary
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Not wanting to be picky, but this doesn't really respond to my criticisms. If your childhood was painful and unhappy then why were you considered 'unsurpassed'? It doesn't make sense unless you are someone who is made unhappy by your on personal excellence.
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You are right to be picky because I have changed the word that was not making sense. Thanks again Mary
Comment from ProSongwriter
Hi there!
Just seconds ago I wrote a long review of this wonderful poem and it simply disappeared! Ah, the mysteries of the cyberworld!
In short, I found the poem very well-written and I thoroughly enjoyed my read. We all must find that one thing that gives us hope and brightens our life. Yours is nature, mine is writing music and writing novels.
Excellent write! Best to you ...
Alan
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2014
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Hi there!
Just seconds ago I wrote a long review of this wonderful poem and it simply disappeared! Ah, the mysteries of the cyberworld!
In short, I found the poem very well-written and I thoroughly enjoyed my read. We all must find that one thing that gives us hope and brightens our life. Yours is nature, mine is writing music and writing novels.
Excellent write! Best to you ...
Alan
Comment Written 16-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2014
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Thanks Alan for the wonderful review, Yes I love nature, I also love to write and to paint. The day is not long enough. I also suffer pain everyday, but I manage that also. Mary
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Hi Mary ...
You are very welcome. It was a pleasure to read your poem.
My wife and I are both 68 years old. Fortunately, I have little to no pain ... no arthritis, Fibromyalgia, etc. On the other hand, my wife suffers significantly from pain every day. She and Ibuprofen have become close friends!
Wishing you well.
Alan
Comment from Erys
Your lyrics are full of life, positive spirit, optimism. If you learned these lessons, I think we can do this too...
Best wishes!
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2014
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Your lyrics are full of life, positive spirit, optimism. If you learned these lessons, I think we can do this too...
Best wishes!
Comment Written 16-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2014
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Yes Erys, I have learned the hard way, through surgery, depressions, and pain. but thankfully I have learned that we have not choice to find a way of managing it to enjoy life.
Thanks for you kind review Mary
Comment from Nosha17
We definitely should not dwell on the negativity of the past and our own shortcomings. Like you wrote live life to the fullest and enjoy yourself. Good use of rhyming and imagery to convey your thoughts. Most enjoyable, Faye
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2014
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We definitely should not dwell on the negativity of the past and our own shortcomings. Like you wrote live life to the fullest and enjoy yourself. Good use of rhyming and imagery to convey your thoughts. Most enjoyable, Faye
Comment Written 16-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2014
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Thanks Faye for the excellent review and kind words. Mary
Comment from robina1978
Lovely artwork that complements your poem very well. Nice rhyme and flow. It tells your story, I think. Well done and thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2014
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Lovely artwork that complements your poem very well. Nice rhyme and flow. It tells your story, I think. Well done and thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 16-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2014
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Thanks Ine for the exceptional review of my poem, I appreciate your six stars. Mary
Comment from Finglas
Nicely done Mary. Your love of life and inner strength is evident in the broad scope of topics you take on in your poetry. Well done b
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2014
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Nicely done Mary. Your love of life and inner strength is evident in the broad scope of topics you take on in your poetry. Well done b
Comment Written 16-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2014
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Thanks Joe for the excellent review. Mary
Comment from patcelaw
This is a beautiful poem of your love of life. I identify very much with the words.
Ignored any remarks of me being strange
This line of your poem is so important that we learn to ignore people who think of as strange. When we have been hurt deeply, we just see life differently than many folks see life. May you continue to enjoy life as it is for you now. Blessings, Pat
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2014
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This is a beautiful poem of your love of life. I identify very much with the words.
Ignored any remarks of me being strange
This line of your poem is so important that we learn to ignore people who think of as strange. When we have been hurt deeply, we just see life differently than many folks see life. May you continue to enjoy life as it is for you now. Blessings, Pat
Comment Written 16-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2014
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Thanks Patricia for the lovely review. Mary