The Heart of Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 38 "Haiku (bulky bumblebees)"'Tis not the Bard, but pretty good poetry anyway
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Comment from Benjamin Valencia
I really enjoyed the Haiku. Bees are a facinating topic especially with them dissapearing. I'm not sure of the word Impossible. Perhaps another word. I was thinking infinite, but then lacks one more syllable. Good luck.
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2014
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I really enjoyed the Haiku. Bees are a facinating topic especially with them dissapearing. I'm not sure of the word Impossible. Perhaps another word. I was thinking infinite, but then lacks one more syllable. Good luck.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2014
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Counting in a haiku is a major distraction for me. lOL Thanks for the wonderful review. I am glad you liked the poem.
Comment from GracieAnn
This Haiku - Insects writing prompt entry fulfills the requirements of the contest with the b alliteration, the correct line and syllable count and title. The topic is nature. The message is strong and full of the truth of God's design. All the best in the contest. :0 GracieAnn
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This Haiku - Insects writing prompt entry fulfills the requirements of the contest with the b alliteration, the correct line and syllable count and title. The topic is nature. The message is strong and full of the truth of God's design. All the best in the contest. :0 GracieAnn
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Comment Written 29-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2014
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Thanks GracieAnn for the affirming comments. Haiku is not my strongest point. Bumblebees are definitely unique. God deserves all the glory for their ability to fly.
Comment from Julia.
Nice poem. I think you've done a good job with the challenge, although I'm not completely convinced that "flight design" is truly a concrete image. Still the satori works well with the previous lines so it all hangs together in the end.
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Nice poem. I think you've done a good job with the challenge, although I'm not completely convinced that "flight design" is truly a concrete image. Still the satori works well with the previous lines so it all hangs together in the end.
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Comment Written 29-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2014
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Thanks Julia,
I appreciate your thoughtful review.