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Free Verse Poetry

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Comment from Sonaleeka
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Very well written free verse.What i can say awesome.I loved each wording and the feeling behind the poem.Worth reading .
Best of luck for the contest.

God bless!

 Comment Written 26-Jul-2014

Comment from krys123
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Mikey;
I was sad to say I was very impressed with this ingenious and creative piece of writing that is very inventive and innovatively fruitful and this has only been your imagination.
Whereas your imagery, on the other hand, is remarkably descriptive and ingeniously expressive throughout.
Before I forget I must wish you good luck in the free verse poetry contest for this is quite a most excellent entry.
The unique inner rhyming was very poetical and with you all unique style of rhythm which played well into the hands of your words dancing on this page.
Thank you very much Mikey for sharing and posting this for everyone to read and may all your endeavors be good ones.
Alex

 Comment Written 26-Jul-2014

Comment from tbacha58
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as I speak
I see my breath invade the air
I am alive!

Our dearest Mikey is so so popular, I visited some Fanstory pages, and your name is everywhere. I was so so proud of you, so happy you have delivered , first to yourself, that you can do it, and second to us here at FS, as for me it is not a surprise, as I felt from the start you will deliver your aim, to become that great writer and poet. Bravo , this poem also is amazing, I love how you change the way you present your poems, very artistic. Hello to your lady, have a great weekend. Love u Terry xoxo

 Comment Written 26-Jul-2014

Comment from seaglass
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This is a very creative poem about Seasons. They seem to pass by fast and fast for me. one could also read this as a metaphor of the seasons of life. how sneakily they also slip by.

 Comment Written 25-Jul-2014

Comment from HeavenlyDreads
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Beautiful poem! It actually made me yearn for change of season. Here in Southern California, we don't experience the seasons as described in your poem, but you gave so many visual descriptions and lent so many emotions to the seasons, I almost felt like I was experiencing them as I read. Good luck in your contest.

 Comment Written 25-Jul-2014

Comment from mfowler
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Wonderful, Mikey. I was intrigued as you walked me through the seasons; or maybe as you talked us readers through the seasons. It is a most intimate conversation, ending ultimately with your preferred embrace with winter: you are acquainted, but you may not know her as I do as I speak
I see my breath invade the air I am alive!

Eack verse/section connects your feelings with the season, exposing reactions both emotional and psychological to the time. The deeply personal banter gives this work a distinction from other nature poems which are essentially alike; lots of pretty images and personal reactions. Loved:
Autumn my dear. Was that you with a soft kiss on my neck while my head was turned? And many more.

Geeze, I wish I could write like this.

 Comment Written 25-Jul-2014

Comment from Nosha17
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There is always one season which has special meaning for any individual. For me, it is Spring. You have used lovely descriptive language and choice of words to convey your message. Lovely smooth read, good luck in the contest. Faye

 Comment Written 25-Jul-2014

Comment from livelylinda
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Michael: Oh, yes, here you are again in your poetic best. And, this poem I had to read carefully, three times to get each fine point so I have earned my. . .WHAT? Only 32 cents??

I don't have to tell you how great your poetry; you already know. I love this. The theme is worn out but you have made it brand new with your creative genius. And, so much prettier than that prose stuff. . .Linda

 Comment Written 25-Jul-2014

Comment from nordicgirl
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One of your best. Yes this has been done. But this is so personal and well written. You do have a style that is all your own with bursts of rhyme and poetic devices. Always persononifying in such an exciting way. Then a defiant life affirming message. Wow. NG

 Comment Written 25-Jul-2014

Comment from adewpearl
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effective proximate rhyme in pass/grasp
gravity as a rumor to mock - I really like that
good alliteration in perfection pleases
good alliteration and assonance in my feet are fleet
excellent personification of the seasons
more good alliteration and occasional rhyme follows
I love the celebratory tone of the closing
Brooke

 Comment Written 25-Jul-2014