Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)

Excellent

Hi, Jay,

Another great chapter, and yes I jumped ahead--couldn't resist the bonus reviewing. I plan to get to the others.

Two suggestions:

certain he (Gylo) understood their dismay (take out he and make it 'Gylo understood their dismay'

Their is one place you need a space between paragraphs.

Take care, my friend~Debbie

 Comment Written 23-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 23-Jun-2014

Thanks, Debbie. Yes, I agree with you on Gylo/he. I had only "he" at first, but it got confusing. You're right though.

Comment from c_lucas

Excellent

There are always people who are willing to short change the lower ranks to improve the status of their pocket book. This is very well written.

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 Comment Written 23-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 23-Jun-2014

Thanks, Charlie. My good friend.

reply by c_lucas on 23-Jun-2014

You're welcome, Jay. Charlie

Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep

Excellent

I'm afraid I have a little nervousness creeping up my spine with this chapter, because Doctrex could be in more trouble from people on his own side then from his enemies at this stage. Most intriguing chapter, extremely engaging, Giddy

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 Comment Written 23-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 23-Jun-2014

Thanks, Giddy. Oh, yes, there could be a lot more trouble ... or not. LOL, I just appreciate your being here.