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Comment from krys123
Sken58, I found your phone to be very creative, inventive and illuminative and show your resourcefulness and ingenius. This type of poetry, the Cordery, was well achieve by such creativeness. I have one suggestion to making your last line of your problem, near the end of the line To change the word "in" to "from",: "...Today and left memories (from) the past."
Thank you very much for sharing and posting your poem for everyone and may the good Lord be with you always.
Alex
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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Sken58, I found your phone to be very creative, inventive and illuminative and show your resourcefulness and ingenius. This type of poetry, the Cordery, was well achieve by such creativeness. I have one suggestion to making your last line of your problem, near the end of the line To change the word "in" to "from",: "...Today and left memories (from) the past."
Thank you very much for sharing and posting your poem for everyone and may the good Lord be with you always.
Alex
Comment Written 11-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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Thank you Krys.
I appreciate your comments and rating .
I deliberately chose the word "in " because in my comments I stated it was time to let go and leave those memories wherecthey belong -in the past.
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You are so welcome
Comment from nancy_e_davis
I have never heard of this form myself but it looks as though you followed the instructions. I wish I could remember more of my childhood. It was a happy time for me which I took for granted. Thanks for sharing. Good job. Nancy
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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I have never heard of this form myself but it looks as though you followed the instructions. I wish I could remember more of my childhood. It was a happy time for me which I took for granted. Thanks for sharing. Good job. Nancy
Comment Written 11-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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Thank you.
Your generous review and comments are appreciated.
My childhood was not happy-hence the decision to leave
Memories in the past.
Comment from STEPHEN A CARTER
Love 'flared'.
blowing /Beautiful blooms A procession of 'b' enhances
Good use of 'Resplendent' 3 syllables
" " " 'Lingering' " "
passed/ past. Interesting co-comparison
Loved the piece.
Regards:
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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Love 'flared'.
blowing /Beautiful blooms A procession of 'b' enhances
Good use of 'Resplendent' 3 syllables
" " " 'Lingering' " "
passed/ past. Interesting co-comparison
Loved the piece.
Regards:
Comment Written 11-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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Thank you for a detailed review.
I appreciate your time and comments.
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My pleasure
Comment from barleygirl
I'm not into complex poetic formats, so I'll just bypass your lengthy description & focus on the message. This is a great idea for a poem, a dilemma we all grapple with, & I love the way the "childhood home" symbolizes so much junk that we are often better leaving behind. Thanks for sharing this insightful poem.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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I'm not into complex poetic formats, so I'll just bypass your lengthy description & focus on the message. This is a great idea for a poem, a dilemma we all grapple with, & I love the way the "childhood home" symbolizes so much junk that we are often better leaving behind. Thanks for sharing this insightful poem.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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Thank you.
Your time and review are appreciated.
Comment from akulkumol
Childhood days are the days of our daily dream. No tension no worry only fun. Flashback of childhood memories while passing by the childhood home. It reminded me of my own childhood days. Loved reading it. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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Childhood days are the days of our daily dream. No tension no worry only fun. Flashback of childhood memories while passing by the childhood home. It reminded me of my own childhood days. Loved reading it. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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Thank you.
I appreciate your time.
I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from El Coyote
This is an interesting form. I'm sure many people can relate to the topic, I know I can. For me, your first and last lines make the poem. They tie it all together so the reader is not left hanging. Flows well and reads naturally without the need for rhyme.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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This is an interesting form. I'm sure many people can relate to the topic, I know I can. For me, your first and last lines make the poem. They tie it all together so the reader is not left hanging. Flows well and reads naturally without the need for rhyme.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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Thank you for a thoughtful and generous review.
Comment from adewpearl
You have followed the format you describe well
lovely detail of setting
nice nostalgic tone
interesting progression from flaring memories to leaving those memories in the past
Brooke
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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You have followed the format you describe well
lovely detail of setting
nice nostalgic tone
interesting progression from flaring memories to leaving those memories in the past
Brooke
Comment Written 11-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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Thank you Brooke.
I .aappreciate your positive responses and generous review.
Comment from Ben Colder
Good subject. Photo is awesome that really enhances. I find no fault in the way the poem is built. It kept my attention. Shalom.
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reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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Good subject. Photo is awesome that really enhances. I find no fault in the way the poem is built. It kept my attention. Shalom.
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Comment Written 11-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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Thank you so much.
I appreciate your time and comments.
Comment from James Dooney
This is pretty cool here ! I like what you have done with this one. Its nice. The words and every thing blend pretty well together !
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reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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This is pretty cool here ! I like what you have done with this one. Its nice. The words and every thing blend pretty well together !
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Comment Written 11-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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Thank you.
I appreciate your review.