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senryu piggy has new name

pig changes his name

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Comment from kiwijenny
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He took the name Cheese......well that's just grate
Was he grate-ful for his name?no !.......it's better than being full of bologna.....I guess that was unkind....
Well done
God bless

 Comment Written 19-Mar-2014

Comment from Dean Kuch
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Who in their right mind would name a pig bologna? Porky, maybe, or Wilbur, Babe, even. But bologna?! That does seem a bit cruel. At least lil' piggy was able to change his name--for posterity's sake, of course.

OINK! (That's "good luck" in piganese)

 Comment Written 19-Mar-2014

Comment from Jay Squires
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How I love the senryu poetic form, though, correct me if I'm wrong, doesn't the senryu evoke other than humor most of the time? Doesn't matter ... What you've done here is created a very humorous poem in a very difficult format.

 Comment Written 19-Mar-2014

Comment from Lysa Schuler
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This was a strange piece to me. Bologna, and cheese I suppose go well together. And I guess that makes a funny. Good writ. God bless.

 Comment Written 19-Mar-2014

Comment from DonandVicki
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Bologna and cheese, Now I get it. Cute write with a cute stuffed animal photograph to go along with it. A real contender in the contest. Don and Vicki

 Comment Written 19-Mar-2014

Comment from lancellot
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Well, I guess any kind of meat name is not good for a pig, Ham would have been much worse, or maybe bacon. But I like cheese, it's safe and neutral. Good on the syllable count.

 Comment Written 19-Mar-2014

Comment from adewpearl
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Your poem is in excellent 5/7/5 syllable count
A fun look at how this unkindly named pig decided to change his own fortune LOL
an amusing response to this prompt
Brooke

 Comment Written 19-Mar-2014

Comment from al1801
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Whoever named the pig Bologna needs to be smoked him or herself :) This was a witty little poem and you did capture the 5-7-5 witty animals theme. good effort.

 Comment Written 19-Mar-2014

Comment from Starlit Ink
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Well, that'll show 'em, lol. The picture is adorable, and the poem is witty, so you definitely fulfilled the prompt. A pig renaming himself is tired of all the bologna that we people are full of. Best of luck to you in the contest.

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 Comment Written 19-Mar-2014