Comment from Alan K Pease

Excellent

Self-worth is often the problem of the offended. Churlish remarks do not always satisfy the need for justice. Kick her in the butt.

 Comment Written 20-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 20-Feb-2014

Thank you, Alan. Actually, in this case, he murders her. This is straight from my imagination.

Comment from michaelcahill

Excellent

This is all too common. My wife watches a crime channel that has to be 75% exactly like this. The meter shift is to create a kind of short stop, right? Love all this free education. So Irish of me. I sat in on all my first wife's classes at UCLA and got a free education too. What a leech! mikey

 Comment Written 20-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 20-Feb-2014

Hey, my brother, never apologize for picking up free knowledge, or free anything, because of who you know.

Many thanks, my friend. Actually, I changed the substitution this morning, but yes, that's EXACTLY what a met sub does.

Comment from RGstar

Excellent

Another in the tug of war saga, and much to wonder, or indeed, ponder about.
I like the image and the heaviness of the first stanza. It then levels out into the interplay we have al come to know at some stage in our lives.
Bravo.
RGstar

 Comment Written 20-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 20-Feb-2014

Thanks so much, RG. I appreciate it!

Comment from Jackarrie

Excellent

I love this sonnet, you say it is not personal, But it is obvious you know a woman you describe a particular type of woman. with having two cats and bric a brack.
A poem well written, it is also humorous to read.

Surprised to find you two would share a ditch
And not a cozy condo by the sea?

Well done . Mary

 Comment Written 20-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 20-Feb-2014

Thank you, Mary! Actually, all of it came from my imagination, but I'll take that as a compliment!

Comment from tfawcus

Excellent

Love works so much better in circles than in triangles. Too many sharp points in the latter. Someone is bound to get hurt. You inject just enough vitriol into this to make sure that there can be no doubt that you write of a crime of passion, not just cold-blooded murder.

 Comment Written 20-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 20-Feb-2014

Thank you, my friend. Love your intelligent reviews and excellent thoughts.

Comment from Kausar_Javeria

Excellent

'She?d left him stranded with a dog, two cats,
A cottage of disheveled bric-a-brac,
Assorted sweaters, shoes, and stacks of hats,
And four cold words: I?m never coming back!'
Wow...great work! THis is amazing..I loved it..the title is fitting too..One of the best sonnets I've read..
Great Job and God Bless~!

 Comment Written 20-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 20-Feb-2014

Thank you so much, Kausar! I appreciate it!

Comment from Katzintx

Excellent

Tsk tsk rage and dark emotion swirl and drift throughout this poem,it's form is solid, it tone emotional and of course pensive in its effect.katz

 Comment Written 20-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 20-Feb-2014

Thanks so much, Katz!

Comment from padumachitta

Excellent

Hello. Oh man, such a tale of madness. I sure di paint a Picture, not exactly pretty. The sharing a ditch is brilliant.
Pooer Dogs, what'll happen to them?

 Comment Written 20-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 20-Feb-2014

Thank you, my friend. You know, it's funny, I worried more about the dogs, too!

Comment from sweetwoodjax

Excellent

this is very well written, marillion, how sad that so many people leave the ones they're married to in order to have an affair with someone who offers a flash in the pan. then wonder why the one they left goes crazy

 Comment Written 20-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 20-Feb-2014

Thank you so much, my friend. You're so right.

Comment from Angel Blessings

Excellent

Great presentation great imagery , taking the reader to picture in great detail what you intended to express in this poem. Thank you for sharing sincerely Angel Blessings

 Comment Written 20-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 20-Feb-2014

Thank you very much, Angel Blessings!