Comment from Acquired Taste

Excellent

Really well said and, I think, pretty emotional.

Taking ownership for causing whatever sorrow was experienced by another. Enough so, you want to capture a tear "mental picture" to remind you always - you were the reason.

AT=/

 Comment Written 26-Jan-2014

Comment from MagKing

Excellent

Save me one sweet tear
So that I will remember
I was the reason.

I love this poem.
I will really like to know you after the contest.
And please do let me know if you won.

MagKing

 Comment Written 26-Jan-2014

Comment from in777wr#

Excellent

This was a well written poem. The poem flows, and reads well. Your 5-7-5 syllable count is in good order.

save me one sweet tear
so that I will remember
I was the reason

Nicely written.

 Comment Written 25-Jan-2014

Comment from Righteous Riter

Excellent

save me one sweet tear
so that I will remember
I was the reason
Good complimentary photo. The syllable count is spot on. Good alliteration with save/sweet/so...will/was...remember/reason. Clear message that is short and simple.

 Comment Written 25-Jan-2014

Comment from sweetwoodjax

Excellent

this is very well written, mystery writer, you did an excellent job writing this senryu poem about being worthy of a reminder. I enjoyed reading it. good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 25-Jan-2014

Comment from Glasstruth

Excellent

We all want to matter, be remembered. Being a parent, the reward is children. Being single, you have to look deep to find it. Very nicely written. Les

 Comment Written 25-Jan-2014

Comment from goompa

Excellent

This is a very sentimental and sensitive senryu, a type of poety of which I knew nothing until coming to Fanstory. Thanks for the poem and thanks for the education.

 Comment Written 25-Jan-2014

Comment from lakeport

Excellent

Senryu sorrow, indeed that's a very emotional expressed Senryu poem. Thanks for sharing it,good luck at the contest. God bless you.Lakeport....

 Comment Written 25-Jan-2014

Comment from padumachitta

Excellent

Hello
a sad but well written senyu
the colour scheme works well as well as the picture
I wish you well in the contest.
May you be well

 Comment Written 25-Jan-2014

Comment from Domino 2

Excellent

Extremely sad, dramatic and poetically expressive.

Nice 's' alliteration and consonance.

All three lines flow together extremely well.

Good luck, Ted



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 Comment Written 25-Jan-2014