Steve's Poems for Kids
Viewing comments for Chapter 7 "Good Night, Keilah"A collection of my children's poems
63 total reviews
Comment from ruzu27
This is a very beautiful poem and I am sure, grandchildren having it read to them are most happy and proud. The last stanza is definitely my favorite. When
Keilah's tucked up in her bed nice and tight
And Mummy has kissed her and turned out the light,
These magical folk will make sure she's alright,
So when Keilah's tucked up ,then it's time for Good Night!
Well done, thank you for sharing.
Ruth
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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This is a very beautiful poem and I am sure, grandchildren having it read to them are most happy and proud. The last stanza is definitely my favorite. When
Keilah's tucked up in her bed nice and tight
And Mummy has kissed her and turned out the light,
These magical folk will make sure she's alright,
So when Keilah's tucked up ,then it's time for Good Night!
Well done, thank you for sharing.
Ruth
Comment Written 25-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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Thanks, Ruth!
Steve
Comment from michaelcahill
This has an amazing flow and rhythm to it. It is actually fun to read for an adult. It makes me feel young reading it for some reason and there isn't anyone under fifty anywhere near the house. I think I'll read it to my wife Donna tonight. Could be the start of something. Or the end. Hahaha. Love this. Amazing writing. mikey
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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This has an amazing flow and rhythm to it. It is actually fun to read for an adult. It makes me feel young reading it for some reason and there isn't anyone under fifty anywhere near the house. I think I'll read it to my wife Donna tonight. Could be the start of something. Or the end. Hahaha. Love this. Amazing writing. mikey
Comment Written 25-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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Thanks, Mikey.
Rhyme, rhythm and repetition - three R's for a good children's poem....
Steve
Comment from The Death
Hi, Steve.
It is a very lovely poem for her.
children love rhymed poems and you have well used mono-rhyming couplets here.
I like the inclusion of everything children generally think of--such as fairies.
It flows nicely. I enjoyed reading it
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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Hi, Steve.
It is a very lovely poem for her.
children love rhymed poems and you have well used mono-rhyming couplets here.
I like the inclusion of everything children generally think of--such as fairies.
It flows nicely. I enjoyed reading it
Comment Written 25-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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Thank you, Anupam!
Steve
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
I can imagine that children, especially little girls, would love having this poem read out to them. The fantasy of fairies and elves is always intriguing to little children. Peter and I thought it was delightful, Steve, and we enjoyed the reading. Giddy
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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I can imagine that children, especially little girls, would love having this poem read out to them. The fantasy of fairies and elves is always intriguing to little children. Peter and I thought it was delightful, Steve, and we enjoyed the reading. Giddy
Comment Written 25-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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Thanks again, Giddy.
Keilah lives in Melbourne so I haven't read this to her myself yet, but she is old enough to read most of it for herself now....
Steve
Comment from 24chas
This was really special, kiwisteveh. I loved the flow of it and it made me happy when I read it. Just a very pleasant piece of writing.
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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This was really special, kiwisteveh. I loved the flow of it and it made me happy when I read it. Just a very pleasant piece of writing.
Comment Written 25-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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Thank you - yes, it is a happy poem.
Steve
Comment from ravenblack
Really, a sweet lullaby filled with alliterative sounds that kids (and adults) like such as : " abolishing,splashing, splashing"; wee woodland, etc. Goblins and elves trying to be good- a nice touch, trying to go against their nature's to please their princess.
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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Really, a sweet lullaby filled with alliterative sounds that kids (and adults) like such as : " abolishing,splashing, splashing"; wee woodland, etc. Goblins and elves trying to be good- a nice touch, trying to go against their nature's to please their princess.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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Thanks for the kind words.
Steve
Comment from Gungalo
When Keilah's tucked up in her bed nice and tight
And Mummy has kissed her and turned out the light,
These magical folk will make sure she's alright,
So when Keilah's tucked up ,then it's time for Good Night!
What a wonderful tribute to your granddaughter Steve. She beautiful. This is a magical fairytale created just for her.
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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When Keilah's tucked up in her bed nice and tight
And Mummy has kissed her and turned out the light,
These magical folk will make sure she's alright,
So when Keilah's tucked up ,then it's time for Good Night!
What a wonderful tribute to your granddaughter Steve. She beautiful. This is a magical fairytale created just for her.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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Thank you for the kind words.
Steve
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Smile.
Comment from evrenios
What an absolutely charming poem! I love it and I recommend (if I haven't before,) that you gather a group of these poems together and publish. Actually this poem itself (if you found the right illustrator and lengthened it a bit) could make a children's book in itself. It touches on all those elements that children live.
I love the way you begin and end each stanza with the same words. That, coupled with the strong metric meter and strong ending rhyme create a song-like homage to your grandchild.
I am serious about pursuing this as a single child's book. It is better than a lot of what is out there! Wonderful writing. (Sorry I don't have a six to give you!)
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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What an absolutely charming poem! I love it and I recommend (if I haven't before,) that you gather a group of these poems together and publish. Actually this poem itself (if you found the right illustrator and lengthened it a bit) could make a children's book in itself. It touches on all those elements that children live.
I love the way you begin and end each stanza with the same words. That, coupled with the strong metric meter and strong ending rhyme create a song-like homage to your grandchild.
I am serious about pursuing this as a single child's book. It is better than a lot of what is out there! Wonderful writing. (Sorry I don't have a six to give you!)
Comment Written 24-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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Thank you so much for the very warm review and the push to publish.
I have told myself that 2014 will be the year in which I gather my scattered poems and my scattered wits and start submitting them to publishers- the poems, I mean, not the wits!
Thanks again.
Steve
Comment from nancyjam
Sweet picture of your grand daughter and what
a delightful bedtime poem for children.
I like the rhythm and the wonderful images
in each stanza. Great rhyming too.
Thanks for sharing. Nancy
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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Sweet picture of your grand daughter and what
a delightful bedtime poem for children.
I like the rhythm and the wonderful images
in each stanza. Great rhyming too.
Thanks for sharing. Nancy
Comment Written 24-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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Thanks, Nancy - glad you enjoyed.
Steve
Comment from caromel
I thoroughly enjoyed reading this. The picture just makes it all better. Excellently thought out and perfectly written. What a lucky little girl she is to have Grandpa write a special poem just for her.
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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I thoroughly enjoyed reading this. The picture just makes it all better. Excellently thought out and perfectly written. What a lucky little girl she is to have Grandpa write a special poem just for her.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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Thank you for the kind words.
Steve