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'Tis not the Bard, but pretty good poetry anyway

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Comment from sweetwoodjax
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this is very well written, carolyn, you did an excellent job writing this quatrain about the desert sands and the life is possesses. i enjoyed reading it. good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 06-Jan-2014


reply by the author on 07-Jan-2014
    Thanks for the wonderful review and good wishes. :-) Carolyn
Comment from zanya
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The desert sands look stunning and mysterious in the pic - yet as stated in the poem their continual movement is without 'rhyme or reason'.

 Comment Written 06-Jan-2014


reply by the author on 07-Jan-2014
    I appreciate your comments and rating, thank you, Carolyn
Comment from Cajungirl
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Carolyn

Nature is both beautiful and scary. Your poem gave the reader a real experience of a sand storm in the desert. The picture is a perfect enhancement.

I have not experienced a dust storm, but my niece did she described it as a tornado of dust and sand. I enjoyed the read. Best of luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 06-Jan-2014


reply by the author on 07-Jan-2014
    Thanks for the good wishes for the contest. Your niece explained the dust devil perfectly. :-) Carolyn
Comment from krys123
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Wow! You captured the essence of the picture very well and vice a versa. Your words flowed like the sands in the desert intertwining and turning, swirling and funneling its way into my mind as I read this short piece. Thank you so much for sharing this with everyone including myself . You have a good one Carolyn and God bless and may you have the happiest days in this year to come.
Alex

 Comment Written 06-Jan-2014


reply by the author on 07-Jan-2014
    And wow back, what a great review and rating, thanks so much for your continued encouragement Alex, :-) Carolyn
reply by krys123 on 07-Jan-2014
    You are so welcome Carolyn
Comment from MizKat
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Hi Carolyn,

I didn't realize that a person could write a Quatrain poem with one line that was un-rhymed. I learn something new every day. This is another good one.

Kat

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reply by the author on 07-Jan-2014
    Hi there Kat, I am glad you enjoyed this one. I learn from the other poets and am trying to broaden my forms. :-) Carolyn
Comment from Benny Beeharry
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Hi Carolyn
Arn't we all like the desert sand? Going round and round the mulberry tree
Till we find that there had never been a mulberry tree after all. We are also centrifugal..the centre is Him to makes it all.

Incidentally I am almost near the desert in tunisia. Cold is hand windy but bearable sea rough and cold.

Luck there is 24 hour wifi for free here.

I am sorry to hear that you are having a lot of snow there as in uk, ...all rain flood and wind.
Take care.good wishes to your family.

Benny Beeharry

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reply by the author on 07-Jan-2014
    Hi Benny, it is good to hear from you. I am glad you enjoyed this short poem. I like the way you compared the centrifugal force to God. :-) Carolyn
Comment from Tomes Johnston
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This is yet another wonderful poem about distant and forbidding landscapes. I love this and look forward to seeing how you do in the contest. Good luck in the contest.

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reply by the author on 07-Jan-2014
    Thanks Tomes, I am glad you enjoyed this one and appreciate the good wishes. (It would be nice to win, especially since you liked it) :-) Carolyn
reply by Tomes Johnston on 07-Jan-2014
    Yes good luck.
Comment from 9999pool
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The sand dunes of time - forever changing by the forces of nature in the desert sandstorms and wind.
The shape and size of the dune are formed randomly and there are no fixed shapes.
The sandstorm can leave many stranded in the cities especially in China whereby the whole city can be enveloped in sand dust particles and very hazardous to health.
Great write and well penned.
Good luck to the contest.
Cheerio, hugs, Ritchie. :))

 Comment Written 06-Jan-2014


reply by the author on 07-Jan-2014
    Hi there my dear friend, we finally made it back home, just today. Drove on snowy interstate for miles. I am so happy you enjoyed this one. Take care, Love, Carolyn
reply by 9999pool on 08-Jan-2014
    Hi Carolyn,

    Glad to know you are home safe. Driving on snowny land is very risky. best to stay at home for a while, smiles.
    Cheerio, hugs and luv, Ritchie. :))
Comment from jmdg1954
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Desert sands blow round and round
Centrifugal force of air to ground
No rhyme or reason to be found
Dust Devil, phantom of the land

This is great. Did this stem from your Arizona trip. I like the line -
Centrifugal force of air to ground
I can visualize the sand creating a "twister" look.
Nicely done... John

 Comment Written 06-Jan-2014


reply by the author on 07-Jan-2014
    Thanks John, I actually shot a pic of a dust devil on a previous trip to AZ. Had planned to use it for this poem and didn't have it stored on my laptop that I travel with. So maybe I will provide it at a different time. So glad you enjoyed this one. I had thought of it awhile ago but posted it last night when we were still out of town. Got back today. I have started a nature series. Hope you are doing well, love, Carolyn
Comment from country ranch writer
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Desert sands shift back and forth and if you aren't careful you can get very lost. Dust devils coming up out of nowhere filling you full of sand wishing you haven't ventured across the desert sand.

 Comment Written 06-Jan-2014


reply by the author on 07-Jan-2014
    That pretty much sums it up. LOL I always enjoy your comments. Thank you so much. :-) Carolyn
reply by country ranch writer on 07-Jan-2014
    WELCOME