My life for a Nickel
Sometimes the smallest things make the largest difference31 total reviews
Comment from Cindy Warren
Oooh, the poor guy! That would be quite a shock. Speaking of shock, I can imagine the one his wife will be getting in the next day or two, when they come for her.
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Oooh, the poor guy! That would be quite a shock. Speaking of shock, I can imagine the one his wife will be getting in the next day or two, when they come for her.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2014
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Thank you very much.
Comment from Treischel
How very intriguing, this tale of discovered treachery due to a letter returned fir insufficient postage. Very well told, leaving conclusions to our imaginations.
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How very intriguing, this tale of discovered treachery due to a letter returned fir insufficient postage. Very well told, leaving conclusions to our imaginations.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2014
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Thank you very much.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
This is terrific...just voted for it. Can't understand why another one, which I thought was really dumb, is currently first, but hopefully that will change. This tells a whole story in just a very few words, and it's shocking, to boot. You can just imagine the emotions he's feeling!
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This is terrific...just voted for it. Can't understand why another one, which I thought was really dumb, is currently first, but hopefully that will change. This tells a whole story in just a very few words, and it's shocking, to boot. You can just imagine the emotions he's feeling!
Comment Written 04-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2014
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Thank you very much.
Comment from humpwhistle
Author, I like this story because it's pretty complex--given the 60-word limit. It took me a few reads just to figure out who was telling the story. I guess I'm slow.
It wasn't until I read the envelope that the story came together. I'd have never figured it out without 'Maximum Security Section'. I'm not a stickler, but did you count the words on the envelope?
We'll have money and a house as soon as he's dead I love you so much it hurts."
--I think you need a period after 'dead'.
Best of luck.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2014
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Author, I like this story because it's pretty complex--given the 60-word limit. It took me a few reads just to figure out who was telling the story. I guess I'm slow.
It wasn't until I read the envelope that the story came together. I'd have never figured it out without 'Maximum Security Section'. I'm not a stickler, but did you count the words on the envelope?
We'll have money and a house as soon as he's dead I love you so much it hurts."
--I think you need a period after 'dead'.
Best of luck.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 04-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2014
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Thank you, Lee. I missed that period.
Comment from jmdg1954
This is a good posting depicting the perfect artwork for the story. I could only wish I had six stars remaining to reward.
Awesome. Good luck with your entry in the contest. John
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2014
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This is a good posting depicting the perfect artwork for the story. I could only wish I had six stars remaining to reward.
Awesome. Good luck with your entry in the contest. John
Comment Written 04-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2014
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Thank you vey much.
Comment from Jean Lutz
Hummmmm? Does this mean they will be switching places; or that he will be returning to prison? Sure sounds like conspiracy to me. Too bad she didn't use a Forever stamp. Best wishes with a fun entry.
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Hummmmm? Does this mean they will be switching places; or that he will be returning to prison? Sure sounds like conspiracy to me. Too bad she didn't use a Forever stamp. Best wishes with a fun entry.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2014
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Ha! That was funny. Thank you. I forgot about those stamps.
Comment from billscott
wow..so wild a possibility a letter poses.
Do you suppose people really live like this with their choices?
I suspect they do, unfortunately.
Interesting account.
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2014
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wow..so wild a possibility a letter poses.
Do you suppose people really live like this with their choices?
I suspect they do, unfortunately.
Interesting account.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2014
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Thank you. I know they do.
Comment from Smoothiecool
great picture
good luck in the contest
your words allow the reader to see the message in this story the lipstick kiss the five cents short the letter returned with a message inside of her love for you and how she loved and wanted you but the betrayal shocked you
cheers SC
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2014
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great picture
good luck in the contest
your words allow the reader to see the message in this story the lipstick kiss the five cents short the letter returned with a message inside of her love for you and how she loved and wanted you but the betrayal shocked you
cheers SC
Comment Written 04-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2014
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Thank you very much.
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welcome
Comment from Paddywack
Hi - hard to get a story across in 60 words, but you managed to create the emotion of regret in even less! I'm not sure how the character would have gotten hold of the letter, if it was return to sender? Thanks for sharing and good luck in the comp.
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reply by the author on 04-Jan-2014
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Hi - hard to get a story across in 60 words, but you managed to create the emotion of regret in even less! I'm not sure how the character would have gotten hold of the letter, if it was return to sender? Thanks for sharing and good luck in the comp.
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Comment Written 04-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2014
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Thank you, Paddy. I guess it wasn't very clear that his wife sent the letter from their house. I will try to make it clearer. Thanks for alerting me.
Comment from maggieadams
I had to read this several times because it was so clever and I wanted to get the story straight. Your author's notes helped provoke the intrigue as well. This could be a lead into a longer story. Well done.
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I had to read this several times because it was so clever and I wanted to get the story straight. Your author's notes helped provoke the intrigue as well. This could be a lead into a longer story. Well done.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2014
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Thank you very much. I guess it could. I'll think about it.