Christmas Visitors come to Hedgerow
Phyllis's Penguins stay with Timmy and Tommy Mouse38 total reviews
Comment from gramalot8
Sandra, this is such a cute, whimsical poem that kids will love... some may not know what some of the items are in your 12 days list, but I think they'll still like it. Great job and thanks for sharing with us.
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2013
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Sandra, this is such a cute, whimsical poem that kids will love... some may not know what some of the items are in your 12 days list, but I think they'll still like it. Great job and thanks for sharing with us.
Comment Written 26-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2013
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thank you gramalot, it was just a fun poem to go with one that Phyllis wrote about her penguins, I am so pleased you enjoyed reading it. :) xsx Sandra
Comment from crookedtoes
To tell you the truth, I liked some parts of it and didn't like other parts as much. Some of it (to me) rhymed fairly well, while other parts seemed just a little bit jumpy. What I do is: I read mine over a few times to see if it flows!!! Sometimes I'll end up changing something to help it to flow better.
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reply by the author on 26-Dec-2013
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To tell you the truth, I liked some parts of it and didn't like other parts as much. Some of it (to me) rhymed fairly well, while other parts seemed just a little bit jumpy. What I do is: I read mine over a few times to see if it flows!!! Sometimes I'll end up changing something to help it to flow better.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 26-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2013
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Hi there, you must be quite a recent member, you really don't know my work. This piece was just a joke piece between myself and another poet on here. My Hedgerow gang (who, I am very proud to say, sold almost 1000, copies in the 2 days leading up to Christmas) have little 'visits' with Phyllis's penguins, they had made up their own version of the 'Twelve days of Christmas' with 'fish' being the gifts, mine, being mice, went for different cheeses, and you are quite right, it was choppy, I just couldn't get the cheeses to rhyme! LOL, it was fun trying though. I am pleased you like some of it! :) Oh, I always check my work and will not put it on until it is perfect. LOL. I am so sorry you read this one first, but never mind, I am sure we will soon get to know each others work. Welcome to Fanstory! xsx Sandra
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Yes!!! I am new here, and congratulations on the copies sold. Dean
Comment from Devon Phipps
I love your take on Christmas and the song. It was very unique. I enjoyed reading and didn't find anything wrong with the poem. Nice job!
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2013
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I love your take on Christmas and the song. It was very unique. I enjoyed reading and didn't find anything wrong with the poem. Nice job!
Comment Written 26-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2013
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Thank you so much for reading this bit of fun, Devon Phipps, I am so pleased you enjoyed it. :) xsx
Comment from tfawcus
Five...stilton...rings brought a big cheesy smile to my face. This continuing saga of the penguins is just delightful. I am sure that it will give great pleasure both to the children without and the children within.
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2013
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Five...stilton...rings brought a big cheesy smile to my face. This continuing saga of the penguins is just delightful. I am sure that it will give great pleasure both to the children without and the children within.
Comment Written 25-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2013
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Thank you so much for reading my fun poem, it was just something in reply to Phyllis's Penguins and their song. You must go and read it if you haven't already. xsx Sandra :)
Comment from J. Dark
So charming and brilliant fun, Sandra. I love the way you create such cute and charming characters and a laugh-out-loud story line. I particularly liked the five stilton rings in the song.
Wishing you a very happy Christmas and a great 2014.
Kindest of regards,
Julie :-)
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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So charming and brilliant fun, Sandra. I love the way you create such cute and charming characters and a laugh-out-loud story line. I particularly liked the five stilton rings in the song.
Wishing you a very happy Christmas and a great 2014.
Kindest of regards,
Julie :-)
Comment Written 25-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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Thank you so very much, Julie! I couldn't think of any other cheese to turn into rings, and a good stilton is round!! Thank you also for the generous 6 stars, you are very kind! I hope you are having a lovely Christmas too, and I wish for you a wonderful 2014 xsx Sandra
Comment from wordsfromsue
Sandra, your critters are quite funny. :-) They certainly gave The 12 Days pf Christmas a new look. :-) or... Smell! All that cheese... P. U
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Hedgerow always cheers me up. :-)
Happy Christmas!
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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Sandra, your critters are quite funny. :-) They certainly gave The 12 Days pf Christmas a new look. :-) or... Smell! All that cheese... P. U
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Hedgerow always cheers me up. :-)
Happy Christmas!
Comment Written 25-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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Hi Sue, my dear friend, thank you so much for your wonderful review! I hope your Christmas was lovely, we had a very quiet one, just my mother with us, she was too ill to go to my son's home, so we spent a quiet day here. Tomorrow, I will be over my sons with the rest of my family, mum is staying home and then coming back for another few days, she has a friend who will be with her. So you must tell me about yours, send me an e-mail, your letters seem to get lost!! LOL, love you to bits, my bestest dearest American friend! xsx Sandra
Comment from Jim Lorson Sr
You know Sandra, I am enamored with your Hedgerow stories. All of them are very well written as your stories are always filled with fun, laughter and sometimes a little mischief. This one is no exception my friend. Love the twelfth day of Christmas. Absolutely hilarious.
I hope things are well with you. How's your mom? Is your knee getting any better? I truly hope so. After the New Year's day is over, I plan on getting back to Cody and Alex's story. Been way too long. I'm really doing this for just 2 people, YOU and me. Well take care and love you a lot lady,,,,Jim xxx
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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You know Sandra, I am enamored with your Hedgerow stories. All of them are very well written as your stories are always filled with fun, laughter and sometimes a little mischief. This one is no exception my friend. Love the twelfth day of Christmas. Absolutely hilarious.
I hope things are well with you. How's your mom? Is your knee getting any better? I truly hope so. After the New Year's day is over, I plan on getting back to Cody and Alex's story. Been way too long. I'm really doing this for just 2 people, YOU and me. Well take care and love you a lot lady,,,,Jim xxx
Comment Written 25-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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Thank you so much my very special dear friend. I am so pleased you are going to bring Cody and Alex back, yes, it has been too long and I have missed them, they are part of my family!!! Thank you also for your very generous 6 stars, you are the very best! Love you always. xsx Sandra
Comment from adewpearl
Great artwork
I love that you have decided to visit Phyllis's penguins :-)
wonderful alliteration throughout
solid rhyming couplets
I am laughing my head off - Sawyer is in his fussy eater phase, but he will eat a Babybel any time of night or day - his eyes light up at the sight of that red ball. LOL Thanks for this fun poem on Christmas morning :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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Great artwork
I love that you have decided to visit Phyllis's penguins :-)
wonderful alliteration throughout
solid rhyming couplets
I am laughing my head off - Sawyer is in his fussy eater phase, but he will eat a Babybel any time of night or day - his eyes light up at the sight of that red ball. LOL Thanks for this fun poem on Christmas morning :-) Brooke
Comment Written 25-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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I am glad you enjoyed my bit of fun, Brooke. The funny thing is, my granddaughter Chloe will always eat the Babybel, because they are 'not' cheese, and we all know she doesn't like cheese! LOL. Thank you, Brooke, I hope your Christmas is going well. xsx Sandra
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Sawyer's little girlfriend's name is Chloe. It is one of his favorite words to say. He calls her on the pretend phone a few dozen times a day :-) Your Chloe doesn't happen to live in Encino, does she? LOL
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LOL, no, but she will be tickled pink when I tell her about Sawyer!
Comment from michaelcahill
Hahaha! It is catching. This is right up there. Loved it. I enjoyed this just as much and I think it is hilarious that it occurred to you!! I wonder what is going to happen New Years Eve? Just sayin.... mikey
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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Hahaha! It is catching. This is right up there. Loved it. I enjoyed this just as much and I think it is hilarious that it occurred to you!! I wonder what is going to happen New Years Eve? Just sayin.... mikey
Comment Written 25-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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Thank you so much, Mikey, I am so happy you enjoyed reading this one. Happy Christmas, my friend, to you and to all your family! xsx Sandra
Comment from Righteous Riter
Good use of the aabb rhyme scheme. Good end rhyming. Good perfect rhyming with mouse/house. Good description and alliteration. Good story telling. Good complimentary photo. Good, clear and warm message for the Christmas holiday. Merry Christmas to you and yours.
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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Good use of the aabb rhyme scheme. Good end rhyming. Good perfect rhyming with mouse/house. Good description and alliteration. Good story telling. Good complimentary photo. Good, clear and warm message for the Christmas holiday. Merry Christmas to you and yours.
Comment Written 24-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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Thank you so much, RR, I wish you and your family a wonderful Christmas and a brilliant 2014! xsx Sandra