To Cherish Thorns
Viewing comments for Chapter 38 "Our Ocean"Free Verse Poetry
21 total reviews
Comment from TAB_that's me
nicely done Mikey. You've proved that all of those thing - faith, believe, destiny can have so many different meanings.
~teresa~
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nicely done Mikey. You've proved that all of those thing - faith, believe, destiny can have so many different meanings.
~teresa~
Comment Written 05-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2013
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Thank you very much. Glad you like it. mikey
Comment from fastdigits
A beautifully orchestrated voyage
of destiny, two souls starting
on a journey uncertain, no equipment,
only a longing searching for the
horizon where lies what they
are seeking, true love.
Your words on this voyage of
exploration artistically and
poetically produced
Well done
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A beautifully orchestrated voyage
of destiny, two souls starting
on a journey uncertain, no equipment,
only a longing searching for the
horizon where lies what they
are seeking, true love.
Your words on this voyage of
exploration artistically and
poetically produced
Well done
Comment Written 05-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2013
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Well put. Much appreciated. Excellent encouraging review. thank you, mikey
Comment from Bobby Jo
Wow, the fantasy's we go through and still find true love is an amazing act of God. I loved this poem and could feel the love brewing.
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Wow, the fantasy's we go through and still find true love is an amazing act of God. I loved this poem and could feel the love brewing.
Comment Written 05-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2013
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You are so on the money. There has to be more than luck involved. It is a pretty big world with a lot of people in it. Thank you so much, mikey
Comment from Darkhorse555
well these words are unique never saw it drawn like this before the moon smiling and making the stars giggle they mocked us with their winking beautifully penned piece dear friend
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well these words are unique never saw it drawn like this before the moon smiling and making the stars giggle they mocked us with their winking beautifully penned piece dear friend
Comment Written 05-Dec-2013
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Thank you. a great compliment. very appreciated. mikey
Comment from amanda98653
WOW.
A very deep poem by one of my favorite poets.
"-beginnings-
an empty sea of longing
yours
mine"
The sea, as opposed to the ocean, has known boundaries, and thus can signify the known quantities of life.
"to fathom tides and the clever toying of the moon
smiling and making the stars giggle"
love your use of personification there, Mikey. very effective.
stars- the presence of hope
my favorite lines:
" a kiss awakens a sleeping princess
a frog the handsome prince through adoring eyes
a jolly laugh slips a child's hope down a narrow chimney
faith transforms the stiffest wood to leaping life"
the existence of fairytales..portraying innocence, perhaps?
beautiful write
hugs
Amanda
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WOW.
A very deep poem by one of my favorite poets.
"-beginnings-
an empty sea of longing
yours
mine"
The sea, as opposed to the ocean, has known boundaries, and thus can signify the known quantities of life.
"to fathom tides and the clever toying of the moon
smiling and making the stars giggle"
love your use of personification there, Mikey. very effective.
stars- the presence of hope
my favorite lines:
" a kiss awakens a sleeping princess
a frog the handsome prince through adoring eyes
a jolly laugh slips a child's hope down a narrow chimney
faith transforms the stiffest wood to leaping life"
the existence of fairytales..portraying innocence, perhaps?
beautiful write
hugs
Amanda
Comment Written 05-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2013
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Hi Amanda. I was about to send a rescue party!! I am glad you liked this. I actually like this one myself. I can't get the editor to work so, I can't make it look too pretty. But, the words are there anyway. A wonderful review, thank you so much, mikey
Comment from Nosha17
I thought it was effective in its present form. It signified pauses in the development of the person involved. Your imagery and use of language were good, in order to convey your message. It was an enjoyable read. Faye
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I thought it was effective in its present form. It signified pauses in the development of the person involved. Your imagery and use of language were good, in order to convey your message. It was an enjoyable read. Faye
Comment Written 05-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2013
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I am so pleased you enjoyed it. Just some problems with the editor. It isn't working with my computer. So, I can't do anything with fonts or color. Well, as long as the words are there and you enjoyed them. Thank you, mikey
Comment from watergirl
Ah, this is an interesting poem allying thoughts and qualities of love with the ocean's nature. You carried this off well, and the loveliness of this lingers after the reading of it. Very nicely done.
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Ah, this is an interesting poem allying thoughts and qualities of love with the ocean's nature. You carried this off well, and the loveliness of this lingers after the reading of it. Very nicely done.
Comment Written 05-Dec-2013
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How very nice of you to say so. Lovely compliments. Thank you very much, mikey
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, michael, you did an excellent job writing this free verse poem about the love that encompasses the earth and the sea. i love the picture.
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this is very well written, michael, you did an excellent job writing this free verse poem about the love that encompasses the earth and the sea. i love the picture.
Comment Written 05-Dec-2013
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It is a cool picture. I like it too. Glad you enjoyed this. Thank you for the kind words, mikey
Comment from CR Delport
I know it is probably metaphorically in this poem, but I love the ocean, although it scares me. Love is probably like that too. Thanks for sharing another gem.
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reply by the author on 05-Dec-2013
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I know it is probably metaphorically in this poem, but I love the ocean, although it scares me. Love is probably like that too. Thanks for sharing another gem.
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Comment Written 05-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2013
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I adore the ocean too. I use the ocean to write about love all the time yes. Glad you liked it, mikey
Comment from Nichola
Deeply moving poem about two people from different view points trying to make sense of their lives and how they may or may not intertwine.
I love the first stanza. It really speaks to me. Reminds me of past relationships.
an abyss embracing separate sorrows unconnected - so sad
faith transforms the stiffest wood to leaping life - love the imagery
-destiny-
in the deepest and most wide ocean
two souls entered the water
they sought only love
the most perfect love in the universe
they found it - so hopeful, I think this is my favorite stanza.
Nichola
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2013
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Deeply moving poem about two people from different view points trying to make sense of their lives and how they may or may not intertwine.
I love the first stanza. It really speaks to me. Reminds me of past relationships.
an abyss embracing separate sorrows unconnected - so sad
faith transforms the stiffest wood to leaping life - love the imagery
-destiny-
in the deepest and most wide ocean
two souls entered the water
they sought only love
the most perfect love in the universe
they found it - so hopeful, I think this is my favorite stanza.
Nichola
Comment Written 05-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2013
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Thank you so very much. This is one that I really like myself. I am so happy that you enjoy it as well. Big smiles. You have made my day!! mikey