To Cherish Thorns
Viewing comments for Chapter 40 "Stardust in Her Eyes"Free Verse Poetry
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Comment from c_lucas
Evil Eddie has hid part of your poem from your readers. I ignored it and read what I could. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
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Evil Eddie has hid part of your poem from your readers. I ignored it and read what I could. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
Comment Written 21-Dec-2013
Comment from Nuad1
This was absolutely lovely; what an upbeat, powerful read this Saturday afternoon preceding Christmas. I love the analogies; the artwork; the use of color(s) that make the words even more potent than what they are. Write more because I shall read!!!
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This was absolutely lovely; what an upbeat, powerful read this Saturday afternoon preceding Christmas. I love the analogies; the artwork; the use of color(s) that make the words even more potent than what they are. Write more because I shall read!!!
Comment Written 21-Dec-2013
Comment from KG Writes
michaelcahill, You should give this to this special lady. I am sure she would enjoy it. Nicely written and a fun read. Touching and romantic. I enjoyed it very much. Very best of luck in the contest. KG Writes
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michaelcahill, You should give this to this special lady. I am sure she would enjoy it. Nicely written and a fun read. Touching and romantic. I enjoyed it very much. Very best of luck in the contest. KG Writes
Comment Written 21-Dec-2013
Comment from mommydear42
A lovely story of whimsy, filled with alliteration treats to the ear as a repeated sound. I especially liked to read of something as mundane as skimming rocks. It sounds like a boring pastime, but I can attest to the hours spent doing the same thing during the four years we lived on the farm.
Those were the days of no TV, certainly no electronics,and the nearest neighbors were five miles away.
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2013
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A lovely story of whimsy, filled with alliteration treats to the ear as a repeated sound. I especially liked to read of something as mundane as skimming rocks. It sounds like a boring pastime, but I can attest to the hours spent doing the same thing during the four years we lived on the farm.
Those were the days of no TV, certainly no electronics,and the nearest neighbors were five miles away.
Comment Written 20-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2013
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What lovely thoughts that you add. I can relate so very well to what you speak of. I had neighbors but, yep, no T.V. or gadgets. We still had a great time. Thank you for the lovely review, mikey
Comment from kiwijenny
I wish I had a six....this is simply great, marvelous in a rings around Saturn .....marblous....he he he......kind of way.................good luck with the contest
God bless and Merry Christmas
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2013
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I wish I had a six....this is simply great, marvelous in a rings around Saturn .....marblous....he he he......kind of way.................good luck with the contest
God bless and Merry Christmas
Comment Written 20-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2013
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The praise will do just fine!! Thank you so much. I am so shocked to be nominated. And I am not just saying that!! Hope you have a wonderful Christmas as well. Blessings, mikey
Comment from allborn66
This is a wonderfully romantic poem. I loved the two point-of-views. The word choice is vivid. You communicate your theme very well.
Barbara
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2013
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This is a wonderfully romantic poem. I loved the two point-of-views. The word choice is vivid. You communicate your theme very well.
Barbara
Comment Written 20-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2013
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So pleased that you liked it and found it clear. Thank you, mikey
Comment from Righteous Riter
Good alliteration with lustrous/light...blazing/blast/blistering...fast/free/flight...boisterous/boy...Saturn's/swirling...powerful/protector...flesh/from...broaching/beast...silly/small/skims...watching/write...flustered/face...roguish/romancer...soft/steel...warm/within...securely/spent...steals/sweet...brazen/boldness...his/head...her/heart...one/only...lucky/little...beloved/blind. Good complimentary photo followed by a descriptive message.
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2013
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Good alliteration with lustrous/light...blazing/blast/blistering...fast/free/flight...boisterous/boy...Saturn's/swirling...powerful/protector...flesh/from...broaching/beast...silly/small/skims...watching/write...flustered/face...roguish/romancer...soft/steel...warm/within...securely/spent...steals/sweet...brazen/boldness...his/head...her/heart...one/only...lucky/little...beloved/blind. Good complimentary photo followed by a descriptive message.
Comment Written 20-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2013
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Appreciate the great detailed review. Thank you kindly, mikey
Comment from mfowler
This is beautiful Michael. Your opening sequence is magical, and subsequent verses continue the lyrical exploration of your premise. I love the contrast of her wide eyed romantic vision for you, and your muted, less ebullient assessment of your own potential. And then, you bring it together at the conclusion, with a simple declaration of love between two innocents. Lovely poetry!
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2013
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This is beautiful Michael. Your opening sequence is magical, and subsequent verses continue the lyrical exploration of your premise. I love the contrast of her wide eyed romantic vision for you, and your muted, less ebullient assessment of your own potential. And then, you bring it together at the conclusion, with a simple declaration of love between two innocents. Lovely poetry!
Comment Written 20-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2013
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I am so pleased that you liked this one. One of the few that I am happy with myself. Big smiles. You make me feel like a poet! mikey
Comment from Tomes Johnston
This is an interesting poem that the author has created with this piece of writing. I am just enjoying the poetry at the minute, and this is fantastic.
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2013
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This is an interesting poem that the author has created with this piece of writing. I am just enjoying the poetry at the minute, and this is fantastic.
Comment Written 19-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2013
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That thrills me to hear that. Wow. What great words of praise. Thank you so much. mikey
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My pleasure.
Comment from livelylinda
michaelcahill: beyond beautiful and certainly worthy of a six stars (I'm out). After writing a poem like this one, I doubt that you are one of those people who concentrate on having to have six stars. You write from deep within yourself and we are lucky that you share with us that much of you. Thank you. livelylinda
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2013
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michaelcahill: beyond beautiful and certainly worthy of a six stars (I'm out). After writing a poem like this one, I doubt that you are one of those people who concentrate on having to have six stars. You write from deep within yourself and we are lucky that you share with us that much of you. Thank you. livelylinda
Comment Written 19-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2013
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What lovely words to hear. I am so pleased you enjoyed this. For once I am happy with something I wrote. Thank you so much and for the virtual six. Most appreciated, mikey