The Heart of Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 26 "No Limericks for Me"'Tis not the Bard, but pretty good poetry anyway
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Comment from Sagnik Das
LOL ... " Deck'd in artful irony sublime,
Your terse lines indeed perfectly rhyme
But, for this reader,
Who can do just neither -
Your work proves worth every frugal dime!! "
Now, how about that as a review, my dear friend?! - sufficient? - (presumably so)! ...
PS ~ Can't speak much today - have got a very busy day ahead, promoting your poem as best as I can .... got my reply to your review that day?? ...
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2013
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LOL ... " Deck'd in artful irony sublime,
Your terse lines indeed perfectly rhyme
But, for this reader,
Who can do just neither -
Your work proves worth every frugal dime!! "
Now, how about that as a review, my dear friend?! - sufficient? - (presumably so)! ...
PS ~ Can't speak much today - have got a very busy day ahead, promoting your poem as best as I can .... got my reply to your review that day?? ...
Comment Written 31-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2013
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What a fun review, I am happy that you are still smiling, even if it is at a poem of me, making fun of my limerick inadequacies. Have a good day and tell your family I am thinking of you and them. Love, Carolyn
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I certainly shall, Carolyn. Please take care. :)
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Dear Carolyn,
Limericks are not a format I know a great deal with. However I think the syllables are supposed to be 9-9-6-6-9:)
But this still made me laugh, so thanks for the smiles.
Thanks for sharing it.
Maureen
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2013
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Dear Carolyn,
Limericks are not a format I know a great deal with. However I think the syllables are supposed to be 9-9-6-6-9:)
But this still made me laugh, so thanks for the smiles.
Thanks for sharing it.
Maureen
Comment Written 31-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2013
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I am sure you are correct on the syllable count, if I do one 'for real', I will work on perfection. I am so glad this made you laugh. Love you, :-) Carolyn
Comment from Cindy Warren
Yep, those limerics can be difficult, sometimes a bit crazy-making. Your poem sums it up pretty good. I'd trim the last line a little, though. Maybe something like 'and other forms I pick'
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2013
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Yep, those limerics can be difficult, sometimes a bit crazy-making. Your poem sums it up pretty good. I'd trim the last line a little, though. Maybe something like 'and other forms I pick'
Comment Written 31-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2013
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Thanks Cindy, I did this just for fun, and in getting some edits, may improve in the process. Thanks Carolyn
Comment from boxergirl
We just got to do what we have to do! :-) A humorous attempt at a limerick poem. I liked the rhyme scheme too. Blessings
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2013
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We just got to do what we have to do! :-) A humorous attempt at a limerick poem. I liked the rhyme scheme too. Blessings
Comment Written 31-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2013
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Glad you liked this satire of a limerick.... Thanks for the review and the great stars. Carolyn
Comment from Ben Colder
A light and humorous poem of 5 lines. Don't blame you. Not my cup of tea either. Stay the course of free verse sometimes answers the itch.
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2013
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A light and humorous poem of 5 lines. Don't blame you. Not my cup of tea either. Stay the course of free verse sometimes answers the itch.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2013
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Thanks Ben, Now I will have to get 'seriously' funny. The comments have been wonderfully enlightening. Yes free verse is an easy diversion. :-) Carolyn
Comment from Julia.
Dear poet, I feel your pain. :) Limericks aren't really something I excel at, although they are fun to play with. You've got the rhyme scheme down pat, but the meter in this is pretty rough (and hence the lower score). Here's a good description of the limerick form from poets.org:
"Typically, the first two lines rhyme with each other, the third and fourth rhyme together, and the fifth line either repeats the first line or rhymes with it. The limerick's anapestic rhythm is created by an accentual pattern that contains many sets of double weakly-stressed syllables. The pattern can be illustrated with dashes denoting weak syllables, and back-slashes for stresses:
1) - / - - / - - /
2) - / - - / - - /
3) - / - - /
4) - / - - /
5) - / - - / - - /"
Sometimes the leading iamb is replaced with an anapest, resulting in a slightly longer line.
If you decide to rework this a bit, please feel free to PM me and I'll take another look at it.
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reply by the author on 31-Aug-2013
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Dear poet, I feel your pain. :) Limericks aren't really something I excel at, although they are fun to play with. You've got the rhyme scheme down pat, but the meter in this is pretty rough (and hence the lower score). Here's a good description of the limerick form from poets.org:
"Typically, the first two lines rhyme with each other, the third and fourth rhyme together, and the fifth line either repeats the first line or rhymes with it. The limerick's anapestic rhythm is created by an accentual pattern that contains many sets of double weakly-stressed syllables. The pattern can be illustrated with dashes denoting weak syllables, and back-slashes for stresses:
1) - / - - / - - /
2) - / - - / - - /
3) - / - - /
4) - / - - /
5) - / - - / - - /"
Sometimes the leading iamb is replaced with an anapest, resulting in a slightly longer line.
If you decide to rework this a bit, please feel free to PM me and I'll take another look at it.
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Comment Written 31-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2013
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Thanks Julia for the thorough review. This one was intended for humor only, next one I guess I will have to get 'seriously' funny. I appreciate you, Carolyn
Comment from david bell
Yes a little of humor never hurts when writing poems. As for myself, I never worry about type of poetry I write. Mine is all free style.
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2013
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Yes a little of humor never hurts when writing poems. As for myself, I never worry about type of poetry I write. Mine is all free style.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2013
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As I have read several limericks of late, just thought it time to make a fun stab at it. Now I suppose I will have to get serious, oh I don't have to, they are suppose to be funny! Right? Thanks David
Comment from Gungalo
LOL you can live without 'em girl. They are 9/9/6/6/9 in syllable count so this one fails too. But we all know you meant ti that way. LOL
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reply by the author on 31-Aug-2013
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LOL you can live without 'em girl. They are 9/9/6/6/9 in syllable count so this one fails too. But we all know you meant ti that way. LOL
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Comment Written 31-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2013
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Yep........... Now I guess I will have to get seriously funny! I have been reading several as of late and thought it time I got my feet wet. LOL
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LOL girl.