The Heart of Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 30 "The 'Morrow"'Tis not the Bard, but pretty good poetry anyway
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Comment from bichonfrisegirl
Very nice tanka, Carolyn! The artwork entices the reader to read, and your tanka delivers a sweet, calming(from "sweet, gentle") message to the reader. "Sonrise" is very effective, and this reader takes it two ways ... the rise of the sun, and the rise of God's son.
bichonfrisegirl aka Connie
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2013
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Very nice tanka, Carolyn! The artwork entices the reader to read, and your tanka delivers a sweet, calming(from "sweet, gentle") message to the reader. "Sonrise" is very effective, and this reader takes it two ways ... the rise of the sun, and the rise of God's son.
bichonfrisegirl aka Connie
Comment Written 27-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2013
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Thanks Connie for the lovely review, yes you got it. :-) Carolyn
Comment from krys123
You need to write requirements for a tanka. The wording is fine. It is very well penned an easy to read. You also have the correct 5 7 5 7 7 syllable structure. Thank you for sharing such a beautiful piece. I enjoyed it very much. You have a good one in God bless.
AK
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2013
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You need to write requirements for a tanka. The wording is fine. It is very well penned an easy to read. You also have the correct 5 7 5 7 7 syllable structure. Thank you for sharing such a beautiful piece. I enjoyed it very much. You have a good one in God bless.
AK
Comment Written 27-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2013
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Well thanks for the wonderful review and the encouragement you always manage to give me. God bless back to you, I am happy you enjoyed this one. Carolyn
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You are welcome
AK
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You are welcome
AK
Comment from amarherig14
There is a good message in your poem. Today is gone ,welcome tomorrow . A new day , a new beginning. Keep your faith and do not waver , for then your faith is not strong.I liked your spiritual poem.
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2013
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There is a good message in your poem. Today is gone ,welcome tomorrow . A new day , a new beginning. Keep your faith and do not waver , for then your faith is not strong.I liked your spiritual poem.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2013
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I am pleased you liked this and thank you for the wonderful review. Carolyn
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You are welcome,Carolyn. I love spiritual poems.Blessings,Margie
Comment from DanielEkine
Great artwork and a good write.
"Rest 'til the 'morrow
Greet Warmth of joyful Sonrise
Faith's path to tread undaunted
" my best part.
Sonrise should be Sunrise.
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2013
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Great artwork and a good write.
"Rest 'til the 'morrow
Greet Warmth of joyful Sonrise
Faith's path to tread undaunted
" my best part.
Sonrise should be Sunrise.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2013
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Hi there, in the authors notes I wrote that spelling was intentional. :-) But thanks, I can tell you are a good editor. I appreciate you. Carolyn
Comment from jmdg1954
Nicely crafted Carolyn. Day, night, resting and faith all intertwined magnificently in these few short lines.
Good message. I don't know all the poetic terms, all I can see is that it was well done and I liked it.
John
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2013
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Nicely crafted Carolyn. Day, night, resting and faith all intertwined magnificently in these few short lines.
Good message. I don't know all the poetic terms, all I can see is that it was well done and I liked it.
John
Comment Written 27-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2013
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And that's what it is all about. Until I came to FS I did not know all these different forms existed. As I study one, I write one, :-) I am glad you liked it John. Carolyn
Comment from The Death
Hello
It's a beautiful tanka poem.
Nice alliteration in
today's toil
good consonance in
darkness falls
tread undaunted
there is concrete beautiful imagery in it with a human parallel drawn from the natural phenomenon.
You did an amazing work.
Regards:-)
Shar-A
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2013
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Hello
It's a beautiful tanka poem.
Nice alliteration in
today's toil
good consonance in
darkness falls
tread undaunted
there is concrete beautiful imagery in it with a human parallel drawn from the natural phenomenon.
You did an amazing work.
Regards:-)
Shar-A
Comment Written 27-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2013
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And you did an amazing review! Thank you so much. Carolyn
Comment from CarloG
wow great job. in a short poem you managed to have great balance. Day, night , rest , faith. I did enjoy the last line the most. good job.
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2013
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wow great job. in a short poem you managed to have great balance. Day, night , rest , faith. I did enjoy the last line the most. good job.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2013
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What a great review, I appreciate all that you said. Thank you, Carolyn
Comment from rhonny
Beautiful pic to illustrate your poem which flows well, but there are a couple of things to check. In line 2 Nights needs an apostrophe ( Today's), and in line 4 did you mean sunrise or Sonrise (a play on words?)
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reply by the author on 27-Jul-2013
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Beautiful pic to illustrate your poem which flows well, but there are a couple of things to check. In line 2 Nights needs an apostrophe ( Today's), and in line 4 did you mean sunrise or Sonrise (a play on words?)
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Comment Written 27-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2013
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I meant Sonrise, in the authors line I noted spelling intentional. You are a great editor. :-) I am fixing the apostrophes. Carolyn
Comment from MizKat
Hi Carolyn,
Your tanka poem is wonderful. I love how you wrote it with a play on words, which makes it all the more interesting. The picture is great too.
Another great job! Kat
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reply by the author on 27-Jul-2013
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Hi Carolyn,
Your tanka poem is wonderful. I love how you wrote it with a play on words, which makes it all the more interesting. The picture is great too.
Another great job! Kat
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Comment Written 27-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2013
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And thank you as usual for the encouragement and wonderful review. Carolyn