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Comment from lyenochka
Beautiful and touching story. There's a lot of moving themes, about seeing beyond the limitations of human life and the strength to of some to overcome difficult conditions.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2018
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Beautiful and touching story. There's a lot of moving themes, about seeing beyond the limitations of human life and the strength to of some to overcome difficult conditions.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2018
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Thanks, lyenochka.
Comment from damommy
This is so heart-wrenching. You told this story so well, I felt I was watching them like a movie. Telling his father that he could see the stars was a wonderful touch. I grew up in the blind community, and know how well they deal with every day life.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2018
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This is so heart-wrenching. You told this story so well, I felt I was watching them like a movie. Telling his father that he could see the stars was a wonderful touch. I grew up in the blind community, and know how well they deal with every day life.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2018
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Thanks, da, for reviewing this. I'm pulling these up for review. This was first posted five years ago. I was trying to affect a response. I tend to lean towards humor.
Comment from royowen
Such a sad, poignantly penned story Bill. This really tugged art the heart strings, the narrative progressed nicely, but is one of those were people suffer hardships, and despite incredible hardships, still manage to emerge triumphant and victorious, this is one such. Well done, Bill, I enjoyed it immensely, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2018
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Such a sad, poignantly penned story Bill. This really tugged art the heart strings, the narrative progressed nicely, but is one of those were people suffer hardships, and despite incredible hardships, still manage to emerge triumphant and victorious, this is one such. Well done, Bill, I enjoyed it immensely, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 25-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2018
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Thank you, Roy. I was looking for a way to extend the meaning beyond the two men. Something what The old man sees and wha5 he asks his son at the end could broaden the scope of the theme.
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Well done, it has possibilities Bill.
Comment from Poetic Friend
Aw, Bill, this is such a heart warming story. In my humble opinion, I think it is the best prose that you've written.
I love all the family relationships expressed in this story (the father-son, the brother-brother, and even the mother-sons).
I love the ending sentences. It brings a sense of hope.
Good luck in the contest, Bill.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2018
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Aw, Bill, this is such a heart warming story. In my humble opinion, I think it is the best prose that you've written.
I love all the family relationships expressed in this story (the father-son, the brother-brother, and even the mother-sons).
I love the ending sentences. It brings a sense of hope.
Good luck in the contest, Bill.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2018
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Thanks, PC, for the kind review. Bill
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Oh, Bill, you are such a good writer. This brought tears to my eyes. What a beautiful, sad, loving story. The ending was just so tender, Ben would see the stars in his imagination because his dear father had described them so many times. Beautiful, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2018
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Oh, Bill, you are such a good writer. This brought tears to my eyes. What a beautiful, sad, loving story. The ending was just so tender, Ben would see the stars in his imagination because his dear father had described them so many times. Beautiful, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 25-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2018
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Thank you, Sandra.
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Just saw that I called you, Ben, Bill!! Sorry! :))
Comment from Dean Kuch
How could I not give this story of a devoted son's love for his father anything but the highest of ratings? This was so well written, so poignant and touching, that, I'll admit, I found myself thinking of the love and admiration I have for my own dad as I choked back a tear.
I can't heap enough adequate [raise upon this sttroy, so I won't try to, Just know that it touched me deeply, and resonated in my spirit. For a writer, what more could you ask for?
Bravo, Bill...Bravo.
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2013
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How could I not give this story of a devoted son's love for his father anything but the highest of ratings? This was so well written, so poignant and touching, that, I'll admit, I found myself thinking of the love and admiration I have for my own dad as I choked back a tear.
I can't heap enough adequate [raise upon this sttroy, so I won't try to, Just know that it touched me deeply, and resonated in my spirit. For a writer, what more could you ask for?
Bravo, Bill...Bravo.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2013
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I am humbled by your extraordinary review. This story felt really good when it was finished and it chokes me up to read it myself. Thank you for your kind words.
Comment from Betty Bleen
This was a good story which kept my interest from beginning to end. So sad that in the end the father dies. So kind that the boy told his father he could really see the stars so he would die happy.
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2013
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This was a good story which kept my interest from beginning to end. So sad that in the end the father dies. So kind that the boy told his father he could really see the stars so he would die happy.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2013
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Thank you for the kind and encouraging review.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, bill, you did an excellent job writing this story about the man who died underneath the stars that he loved so much. i enjoyed reading it. good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2013
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this is very well written, bill, you did an excellent job writing this story about the man who died underneath the stars that he loved so much. i enjoyed reading it. good luck in the contest
Comment Written 23-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2013
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Thank you very much for reviewing this.
Comment from Gungalo
Sigh what a great story this one is. You took us from before Benny was born to when Benny's father died, there on that hillside.. They could both see the stars from there.
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2013
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Sigh what a great story this one is. You took us from before Benny was born to when Benny's father died, there on that hillside.. They could both see the stars from there.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2013
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Thank you for the terrific review!
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My pleasure.
Comment from ras1973
I loved this! Ned's life was in turmoil. His beloved wife had died and his son was born blind, but yet he never gave up. He did whatever he could to help his son succeed.
I was left with mixed emotions at the end. I was happy that Benny got to see his father one last time, but yet his father was dying and still grieving for his wife. I guess maybe it was a bittersweet ending. Great job!
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2013
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I loved this! Ned's life was in turmoil. His beloved wife had died and his son was born blind, but yet he never gave up. He did whatever he could to help his son succeed.
I was left with mixed emotions at the end. I was happy that Benny got to see his father one last time, but yet his father was dying and still grieving for his wife. I guess maybe it was a bittersweet ending. Great job!
Comment Written 23-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2013
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Thank you very much for the kind, encouraging, and enthusiastic review.