Leslie Ann's Exploits
Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "Will Leslie Ann Score?"A spoiled young lady who learns the hard way
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Comment from sunnilicious
Well, she is a sexy little number nibbling on a chocolate heart. And so photogenic too.
I love the way this story is unfolding. You're a nice write. But I must say... The names are so formal. Tommy and Jon seem much more modern. I'm just saying... Dewar makes want to drink.
Riveting. Enjoyable to read. Great job!
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2013
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Well, she is a sexy little number nibbling on a chocolate heart. And so photogenic too.
I love the way this story is unfolding. You're a nice write. But I must say... The names are so formal. Tommy and Jon seem much more modern. I'm just saying... Dewar makes want to drink.
Riveting. Enjoyable to read. Great job!
Comment Written 10-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2013
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Thanks so much for reading this one, Sunni. I wrote the first part and then the second, but by then Leslie Ann had become a character in my head. My muse is working overtime this week - LOL
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It happens to all of us at sometime or another. Just don't exhaust yourself.
Good night.
Comment from Eigle Rull
A very cute little part about a girl who wants to trick a man into marriage, from what I gather. It was written very well, and flowed well too. You used easy words to read and understand. I thought it was very good.
Always with respect,
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2013
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A very cute little part about a girl who wants to trick a man into marriage, from what I gather. It was written very well, and flowed well too. You used easy words to read and understand. I thought it was very good.
Always with respect,
Comment Written 10-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2013
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Thanks so much for reading this one, Eigle Rull. I wrote the first part and then the second, but by then Leslie Ann had become a character in my head. My muse is working overtime this week - LOL
Comment from EMB
Writing a lengthy story using poetry is nothing new. However, to do so with continual rhyming seems a bit risky for me for two distinct reasons: 1. It seriously limits how you can present the story. 2. Readers may get tired of reading the rhymes because (at least, for me) it distracts from the story. I find myself paying attention to the rhyme scheme just as much, if not more so than the story. (But I must say, I ain't liking Leslie Ann to well. LOL)
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2013
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Writing a lengthy story using poetry is nothing new. However, to do so with continual rhyming seems a bit risky for me for two distinct reasons: 1. It seriously limits how you can present the story. 2. Readers may get tired of reading the rhymes because (at least, for me) it distracts from the story. I find myself paying attention to the rhyme scheme just as much, if not more so than the story. (But I must say, I ain't liking Leslie Ann to well. LOL)
Comment Written 10-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2013
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Okay, Mr.Baldwin, I know it's nothing new. Seriously, writing this story poem just happened. I wrote the first part, and the ideas kept coming. I'm not interested in writing a book, so I am going with the flow at this point - my muse is running hot. I expect you will let me know if, or when, I get off course. Furthermore, let me know whether you find the rhyming too tedious. Be blessed, and thanks for stopping by!
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
The plot thickens. This is intriguing, and you're doing it all in verse... amazing!
>>She located him in the park one 'eve near a grove,
No need for that ' by "eve", which is a perfectly good word. Just write "one eve".
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reply by the author on 11-Apr-2013
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The plot thickens. This is intriguing, and you're doing it all in verse... amazing!
>>She located him in the park one 'eve near a grove,
No need for that ' by "eve", which is a perfectly good word. Just write "one eve".
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Comment Written 10-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2013
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Thanks, Phyllis. I'm delighted you like this one. I wrote the first part and then the second, but by then Leslie Ann had become a character in my head. My muse is working overtime this week - LOL
Comment from chasennov
'Will Leslie Ann Score?' That is probably a question which will have to go unanswered for the time being. Whether she did score or not, is immaterial, what counts, is that she tried.
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reply by the author on 11-Apr-2013
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'Will Leslie Ann Score?' That is probably a question which will have to go unanswered for the time being. Whether she did score or not, is immaterial, what counts, is that she tried.
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Comment Written 10-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2013
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Thanks so much for reading this one, chasenow. I wrote the first part and then the second, but by then Leslie Ann had become a character in my head. My muse is working overtime this week - LOL
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You're very welcome.